Talk:Ye Qianyu/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: LT910001 (talk · contribs) 01:40, 28 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

If there are no objections, I'll take this review. I'll note at the outset I've had no role in editing or creating this article. I welcome other editors at any stage to contribute to this review. I will spend a day familiarising myself with the article and then provide an assessment. While you wait, why not spare a thought for the other nominees, and conduct a review or two yourself? This provides excellent insight into the reviewing process, is enjoyable and interesting. A list can be found here. Wikipedia needs more reviewers! Kind regards, LT910001 (talk) 01:40, 28 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for waiting. In conducting this review, I will:

Provide an assessment using WP:GARC
If this article does not meet the criteria, explain what areas need improvement.
Provide possible solutions that may (or may not) be used to fix these.

Assessment

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	Addressed
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	Addressed
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.

Commentary

Firstly, thanks for your edits to this article and Wikipedia. In terms of the review, I feel overall this is a well-reading article that may need some attention before being promoted. Some specific notes:

I feel this article requires some fleshing out, particularly in the career and personal life sections, which at the moment are punctate sentences of short length.

Will do soon. -Zanhe (talk) 06:24, 13 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

See other Chinese articles, such as Deng Xiaoping for introductions and the use of pinyin/chinese or transliterations

The use of Chinese in the lead now conforms to WP:MOS-ZH (all in the separate infobox). -Zanhe (talk) 06:24, 13 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

This statement "Ye was married to the famous dancer Dai Ailian and later to movie star Wang Renmei." lists the notable marriages, but is missing a marriage. Suggest "Was married three times..."

Done. -Zanhe (talk) 06:24, 13 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Would request that you add one or two sentences to "Career" so as to flesh it out; it currently is almost in list form
Suggest break "Career" into "Birth" and "Career" for clarity.

Done. -Zanhe (talk) 06:24, 13 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Suggest add age here: "Out of work, Ye Qianyu "

Done. -Zanhe (talk) 06:24, 13 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Some sources, specifically "Biographical Dictionary of the People's Republic of China", " War and Popular Culture: Resistance in Modern China, 1937-1945", and ""覆水难收的婚姻悲剧：叶浅予与罗彩云和梁白波" [Ye Qianyu, Luo Caiyun, and Liang Baibo] ", lack page numbers, which impacts on verifiability. Additionally, the link on the final source is dead.

Added page number for the first two sources. The third source is available online (I've replaced the dead link with an equivalent live one) as a regular web page, but without the original page numbers in print form. But I don't think the lack of page numbers here impacts on verifiability as the it is so easily accessible. -Zanhe (talk) 06:24, 13 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I feel this article could certainly be promoted to GA status, but may need some attention, so I've put the nomination on hold. Awaiting your reply, --LT910001 (talk) 00:44, 30 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for reviewing the nomination. I'm travelling right now, and will work on fixing the issues in a week or so. Thanks for your patience. -Zanhe (talk) 19:51, 4 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your edits, now it's my turn for some travelling! Will update assessment on or after the 18th (ie, the 19th).--LT910001 (talk) 09:53, 13 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Conclusion

Sorry for the long delay. This article meets or exceeds the GA criteria, and you have addressed all my concerns as documented above. Well done on developing this article, and I wish you all the best on your wiki-travels. --LT910001 (talk) 05:06, 22 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

One small thing is that the description of his Chinese name in text is traditional, whereas at the top of the infobox is simplified.