Talk:Women's Entrepreneurship Day

Pioneer Award claimed recognition by Congress

https://www.congress.gov/congressional-record/2018/11/16/extensions-of-remarks-section/article/E1538-1 would this article clear up the confusion about the congressional record? EmpoweringAllWomen (talk) 15:47, 26 June 2019 (UTC)

First off, thank you for starting this discussion! Context: This relates to some text that EmpoweringAllWomen has added to several articles on recipients of Women's Entrepeneurship Day 'Pioneer Awards':

This honor is officially recognized by both Houses of the United States Congress as one of our nation's most prestigious awards for women. This award was placed in the Congressional Record and will remain in history always.

I don't think the transcript you linked fully supports the above. In particular, I see no indication that the speaker described the award as "one of our nation's most prestigious awards for women". Their comments were mostly about Women's Entrepeneurship Day itself, with a brief mention of the award and a list of its recipients that year. I also don't see anything about official recognition from both houses of Congress - it seems to just be the remarks of one representative, Grace Meng. The last sentence (about the Congressional Record) may be kind of true (though "remaining in history always" seems like a pretty bold prediction). But I think it has WP:NPOV problems - it's basically a very WP:FLOWERY and circuitous way of saying the award was mentioned in Congress. (Which, even if stated plainly, is probably WP:UNDUE in the context of mentioning that a person received this award in the article about that person.) Colin M (talk) 16:05, 26 June 2019 (UTC)

btw, @EmpoweringAllWomen: I see you just re-added the claim at Twinkle Khanna with the congress.gov transcript added as a citation. Do you mind holding off on adding it to any more articles until the discussion here has concluded - hopefully with some consensus? (If we're not able to reach consensus, there are some more heavyweight processes we can turn to likeWP:RFC) Colin M (talk) 16:13, 26 June 2019 (UTC)

Thanks for the help so far, is there a different wording that you suggest to make this work? I also have https://www.congress.gov/crec/2018/11/16/CREC-2018-11-16-pt1-PgE1538.pdf which could possibly help. EmpoweringAllWomen (talk) 16:09, 26 June 2019 (UTC)

The page Women's Entrepreneurship Day already notes this:

The U.S. House of Representatives also annually recognizes the WEDO movement November 19th as “A Day in Honor of Women Entrepreneurs” under the leadership of Congresswoman Grace Meng.

I think this is accurate. I don't think the same text needs to be copied onto other pages. AJ2265 (talk) 16:17, 26 June 2019 (UTC)

References

Yeah, basically what AJ2265 said. Keep it short and to-the-point. e.g. something like In 2016, NAME was a recipient of a Women's Entrepreneurship Day Pioneer Award for her work in X. The beauty of wikilinks is that if the reader wants to learn more about Women's Entrepreneurship Day and the Pioneer Award, they can click the wikilink and read the article at Women's Entrepreneurship Day. For example, the article at Barbara Liskov says:

Liskov received the 2008 Turing Award from the ACM, in March 2009, for her work in the design of programming languages and software methodology that led to the development of object-oriented programming.

Rather than, say:

Liskov received the 2008 Turing Award from the ACM, in March 2009, for her work in the design of programming languages and software methodology that led to the development of object-oriented programming. Awarded annually, the Turing Award is considered the highest distinction in computer science and has been called the "Nobel Prize of computing". It comes with a cash prize of $1 million USD.

Colin M (talk) 16:25, 26 June 2019 (UTC)

Great, I still want to mention on the winners pages that they earned such a great accomplishment, how should I do that? EmpoweringAllWomen (talk) 16:19, 26 June 2019 (UTC)

See my comment above - keep it short and neutral. If the reader wants to learn more about the organization/award, they can click the wikilink. BTW, I don't think the award will necessarily be worthy of mention on the page of everyone who's received it. Considering the scope of their career, will a reader looking for a summary of that person be well-served by reading about this award? For example, I removed mention of the award from Sandra Lee (chef) based on such a judgement call. If you can find a mention of the person receiving the award in a WP:RELIABLE source that's independent of Women's Entrepreneurship Day, that makes a much stronger case for the award being noteworthy.

One more thing: as I mentioned on your talk page, if you have a conflict of interest with this organization, you must disclose it. When 100% of your edits relate to one organization, it creates a strong implication of a COI. And a pattern of systematically adding (WP:FLOWERY) mentions of the award to articles about winners is the first thing I would do if I were trying to WP:PROMOTE the organization. Given these circumstances, editors may give extra scrutiny to your edits. Colin M (talk) 17:35, 26 June 2019 (UTC)

Will it be appropriate to say: In (year), (name) received the Women's Entrepreneurship Day Pioneer Award at the United Nations in recognition for her achievements in the (industry) world. This honor is officially recognized by both Houses of the United States Congress as was placed in the Congressional Record.

Also I would add the congressional records as a source. Let me know, Thanks for all the help.EmpoweringAllWomen (talk) 18:27, 26 June 2019 (UTC)

No, I don't think that would be appropriate. For one thing, I don't think your source quite supports the factuality of "officially recognized by both Houses of the United States Congress". But even if that were verifiably true, it would be WP:UNDUE. See the Turing award example above. Colin M (talk) 18:32, 26 June 2019 (UTC)

@EmpoweringAllWomen: Regarding the proposed wording you mentioned in a deleted comment: In (year), NAME was a recipient of a Women's Entrepreneurship Day Pioneer Award at the United Nations for her work in X.... We're getting close, but I would remove the "at the United Nations" part. Not only is it, IMO, unnecessary detail, it creates a false implication that the award is somehow related to or endorsed by the United Nations. Based on my reading, it sounds like Women's Entrepreneurship Day books a conference room in the Delegates Dining Room in the UN building, a restaurant/event space that anyone can book to hold a private event. Colin M (talk) 20:12, 26 June 2019 (UTC)