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Good articleWoman Hollering Creek and Other Stories has been listed as one of the Language and literature good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
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November 19, 2008Good article nomineeListed
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on September 25, 2008.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that one of the short stories in Sandra Cisneros' collection Woman Hollering Creek and Other Stories relates to the myth of La Llorona, who haunts the real Woman Hollering Creek in Texas?

Plan

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This is our plan.... We've divided up the sections from the wikipedia page on how to write a book review article.

Katie: Lead section, Background

Jacqui: Publication History, plot introduction, plot summary, characters, infobox--Katie322 (talk) 23:16, 15 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Esmeralda: Major Themes, Style, Reception, Film/TV/Theatrical adaptations, Image

Well done on getting a plan together. As Wikipedia doesn't like talk pages that don't have corresponding articles, I've now started the article itself... which means you have five days to work it up into something that you can submit to DYK. Good luck! --jbmurray (talk • contribs) 08:20, 17 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Hey Gals! I've started the lead, background, and references. It's definitely going to need some editing and revision so feel free...but it's a start! I like Esmeralda's idea for the hook for the DYK. Add some more info to the article when you can. (I looked at the edit screen on other articles to see how they formatted certain things). It's tough to get the hang of, but we'll get it :)--Katie322 (talk) 01:59, 19 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The structure looks good to me. Don't worry about fine detail and technology just yet. Right now there are only two priorities: adding content to the article, and finding reliable sources to use as references for that content. A blank page can be intimidating, so scribble on it! There are plenty of people who will help out, but for DYK you have to move fast on content! Good luck! Geometry guy 08:27, 19 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Yep, I've cleanup the article quite a bit, it's looking even better! I can't wait to feature this. —Sunday [speak+] 11:37, 21 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
You might want to make this plan a little more detailed, and more a series of "to dos." You can of course add to it over time. And cross things off when you've done them, including adding a big green checkmark {{done}}  Done. --jbmurray (talk • contribs) 18:18, 26 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Our detailed plan:

First and foremost, have a detailed bibliography for referencing up on the talk page by Monday, Sept. 29, midnight.
As for individual sections...
  •  Donelead section needs much more added in the way of introducing the article and what will be found there within (this may be easier to flesh out as the article progresses).
  •  Donebackground should include more information on Cisneros' perspective concerning men, as this is a main theme throughout her book.
  • No publication section yet. Submit any interesting points about the publication. (In the event that there are none, add basic publication info to the 'Publication Date' section.
  • Split chapters into three categories for the plot summary: child, adolescent, woman. Give a brief overview of some of the main characters in each of these sections, their similarities, and how they contribute to the book's themes. Book reviews providing this type of information should be utiilized. (Plot intro will not be used)
  • The 'Characters' section should expand briefly upon the stereotypes and themes mentioned in the plot summary.  Done More info added, if need be, as plot summary grows.
  • Major themes: expand on the themes mentioned in Plot Summary section. (themes must be backed up by reliable sources).
  • Style: explain the mechanics behind Cisnero's styles, as she uses many different page lay-outs and writing styles in this book. Try to find reviews which say 'why' she used these particular styles.
  • Describe how the novel was received in the Reception section. This includes reviews from critics and/or interesting figures in society.
  • Film adaptation: mention any adaptation's into 'dramatic media'  Done
  • make sure to REFERENCE EVERYTHING!!!
  • Infobox  Done
  • Image of bookcover  Done -Group meeting to see if we want to add any more pictures (ie: the REAL Woman Hollering Creek)
  • Add publication dates
  • Add original media types
  • Add to 'List of Novels'
  • Add Categories to bottom of the page
  • November 10th: submit for good article nomination...make appropriate edits
  • November 26th: submit for feature article nomination...make appropriate edits

DYK

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Everything looks good so far. You should now be thinking about your "Did You Know" hook. You'll see I just added Chicano literature to T:TDYK. You'll want to add yours here and then watchlist the page as other editors go over what you've contributed, checking that it fits the rules. --jbmurray (talk • contribs) 21:32, 20 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Hey Katie, I think I might have deleted some of the references...ahh Im just getting used to this whole editing thing...can you check that out for me/us? --Jacqui Nicole (talk • contribs) 02:21, 21 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Hey girls...WE DID IT!! Check out our DYK on the main page :) Now time for a 'good article' nomination...haha. Great job! --Katie322 (talk) 04:57, 25 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

accuracy in quotation

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You need to be especially careful about quotations, and ensure that you are accurate and have provided all the information you can.

Here you have a quotation in which there is no final quotation mark, and there seems to be some error of transcription:

“in woman hollering creek (1991) the female characters break out of the molds assigned to them by the culture in search of new roles and new kinds of relationships. Cisneros portrays woman who challenge stereotypes and break taboos, sometimes simply for the sake of shocking the establishment, but most often because the confining stereotypes prevent them from achieving their own identity.[5]

I just checked this, and discover that the original is in fact:

“In Mango Street and in Woman Hollering Creek (1991), the female characters break out of the molds assigned to them by the culture in search of new roles and new kinds of relationships. Cisneros portrays woman who challenge stereotypes and break taboos, sometimes simply for the sake of shocking the establishment, but most often because the confining stereotypes prevent them from achieving their own identity."[5]

The differences are small, but there should in fact be no differences. Be careful! --jbmurray (talk • contribs) 17:49, 21 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The subsequent quotations in that same section, from Brown-Guillory, were also inaccurate. Beware! --jbmurray (talk • contribs) 17:55, 21 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Another reminder about this: Citations need page numbers. --jbmurray (talk • contribs) 06:14, 5 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Image

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Ok so I added the image of Sandra Cisnero's book cover, but it turned out to be huge! I thought I had saved the smaller version of it, and that's the one that I uploaded with under the Non-free use media rationale. Is there any way to make the image smaller? --Jacqui Nicole (talk) 05:54, 23 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

(For some bizarre historical reason, the tradition at Wikipedia is to add new comments to the bottom of the talk page, not the top!) You can control the size of an image by adding the width in pixels. Alternatively the word "thumb" causes the width to be set to user preferences (default 180 px).
However, you may want to upload a lower resolution version of the image to be sure that the fair use criteria are met. I suggest opening the image in an image editor (Gimp, Photoshop etc.) and reducing the resolution by half (227 x 327 seems more reasonable), then uploading the lower resolution image over the current one. Geometry guy 08:09, 23 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your help!--Jacqui Nicole (talk) 03:23, 27 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I've replaced the jpg by a png image of half the resolution. Sorry for deleting your upload, but you are less likely to run into complaints later this way. Geometry guy 20:58, 19 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Bibliography

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  • Brady, Mary Pat (March 1999), "The Contrapuntal Geographies of Woman Hollering Creek and Other Stories", American Literature, 71 (1): 117–150, retrieved 2008-09-26{{citation}}: CS1 maint: date and year (link).

-> Plot Summary section.**this article is an essay on spatial representation in the book. Not sure if it contains much to add to our Wiki article.. Done

  • Brown-Guillory, Elizabeth (1996), Women of Color: Mother-Daughter Relationships in 20th-century Literature, Austin, TX: University of Texas Press, ISBN 9780292708471.
  • Cisneros, Sandra (1991), Woman Hollering Creek and Other Stories, New York: Random House, ISBN 978-0394576541.

-> Style Section: talks about style pg 22

-> Theme section: How woman change in the story, the symbol of cutting the braid

-> Character section: article on main character Cleófilas. Done

-> Character/Plot Summary section: 3 types of mexican woman (line 15) [mention in plot summary section, expand upon in character section] Done*added only to Characters....Lead section: "live on a fence" between cultures (top of page 2). Done*added to Characters instead of Lead Done

->Lead/Background section: Chicago= "rootlessness and love of family history" (p. 19). Done Character section: father failed college and ran away to US to escape her grandfather's wrath (p. 20). Could this be similar to any character in the book?? Also, page 25 for character breakdowns....Lots of background info on Cisneros' family.

-->plot section Done

->talks about metaphores

  • Hart, Patricia (May 6, 1991), "Babes in Boyland", The Nation, 252 (17): 597–598, retrieved 2008-09-21{{citation}}: CS1 maint: date and year (link). (EBSCO subscription required for online access.)

-> Character section: Talks about how Zapata is portrayed

  • Madsen, Deborah L., ed. (2003), Beyond the Borders: American Literature and Post-Colonial Theory, Sterling, VA: Pluto, ISBN 0745320465.

-> Style: 'counter discourse' strategy quote (p. 5). Done Character section: 'Never Marry a Mexican' character discussion (p. 244) Done

  • McCraken, Ellen (1999), New Latina Narrative: the feminine space of postmodern ethnicity, Arizona: The University of Arizona Press, ISBN 0816519412.

-> Major Themes section: cover's image representation of chicana identity (p. 17) Done, religious themes (101-103). Character section: discussion of characters (p. 17-22), 'Never Marry a Mexican' discussion (195-196). Style section: 'visual verbal hybridity' (p.128-49)

-> Lead section: "first kiss" Done....Background section: men = "catalysts" Done...Background/Character section: (p. 6)

  • Prescott, P.S.; Springen, K. (June 3, 1991), "Seven for Summer", Newsweek, 117 (22): 60, retrieved 2008-09-26{{citation}}: CS1 maint: date and year (link) (EBSCO subscription required for online access.)

-> Style section: (last para.) 2 ways of looking at the world through language....Lead section: Cisneros' voice Done....Background section: Cisneros' view on men  Done

  • Reichardt, Mary (2001), Catholic Women Writers: A Bio-Bibliographical Sourcebook, Westport, CT: Greenwood, ISBN 9780313311475.

-> Background section: feminism/gender issues (p. 135-36) Done...Plot section: describes the three main sections of book (p. 136) Done

  • Shirley, Carl R. (1988), Understanding Chicano Literature, Columbia, South Carolina: University of South Carolina Press, ISBN 0872495752.

-> Background Section: Cisnero's early Chicago life (p. 156)  Done

  • Stavans, Ilan (September 13, 1991), "Una nueva voz", Commonweal, 118 (15): 524, retrieved 2008-09-21{{citation}}: CS1 maint: date and year (link). (EBSCO subscription required for online access.)

-> example of negative review for Reception section

-> Character section: 'the characters' self worth comes from their loyalty to Mexico and their reality up north' Done

-> Style section: good comments on author's use of omniscient voice (para. 4)

You're doing a good job with this! It might be helpful to add some annotations, but great guns... keep at it! --jbmurray (talk • contribs) 10:31, 27 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments on bibliography. This is a good job: it looks pretty comprehensive, and you've made helpful annotations, which will be useful as you put these sources to work and write the article. Well done and good luck! --jbmurray (talk • contribs) 16:25, 30 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Citations

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I can't figure out how to do the citations properly on the article page...I just added some info to the character section with a reference, but the reference isn't done correctly...not sure how to fix it. --Jacqui Nicole (talk • contribs) 07:24, 5 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Don't worry too much about the formatting... I or someone else can do that. However, you do need to provide full information. For instance (see also above) citations need page numbers. --jbmurray (talk • contribs) 08:36, 5 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Signature

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I don't think I'm adding my signature correctly... Do I add it to the edit summary box, or to the actual page that I made the edit on? And is the signature just 4 tildes or 2 dashes and 4 tildes? Thanks--Jacqui Nicole (talk) 01:14, 13 October 2008 (UTC) (is that signature right?)[reply]

Perfect! You add it (as you did here) to your comments on talk pages. (I'm making an exception for the bibliography, because if we included the signatures there, it would soon become very cluttered.) And people usually use two dashes along with the four tildes. If you click the button (above the edit screen), that's what it'll add for you. --jbmurray (talk • contribs) 01:37, 13 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Good job!

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This article is really moving on, and is jampacked with good sources. Well done! One thing you do need to get to fairly soon, however, is a plot summary... or rather, an account of at least some of the stories. Try to make this no more than 500 words.

But again, above all you guys have really made progress on this article! --jbmurray (talk • contribs) 04:03, 14 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Once more, good job by Katie322. Add a summary of the content of the book itself, and I think you're close to being able to put this in for a "good article nomination." --jbmurray (talk • contribs) 07:15, 17 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

In fact, I've just upgraded this to C-class. It's probably very close to B-class if it weren't for the missing details on content. (See the Wikipedia grading scheme.) --jbmurray (talk • contribs) 10:24, 17 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I agree that it is close to B-Class and many WikiProjects would rate an article of this quality as B-Class. It is also nearly ready for good article nomination. One significant issue remaining is the lead (the part of the article before the table of contents). Please read the guideline on lead sections and rewrite the lead both to summarize the article and introduce the subject in about three paragraphs. If you cannot do both easily, it is a good sign that some work is needed on the rest of the article :-) Geometry guy 21:08, 19 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
PS. This article has been adopted by the FA-Team and I'm one of the editors watchlisting it on their behalf. We would like it to be featured, and will do all we can to help, except we can't find sources or add significant content. Good luck!

Madsen 2003

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When citing an article in an edited book, we need to cite the article itself, rather than the book. Hence the references to Madsen 2003 need to be more specific. I'll try to get the info myself. Let's see... --jbmurray (talk • contribs) 20:45, 19 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Notes

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Here are some comments from a read-through. I've tried to make this a general review, without focusing specifically on what you'd need for GA.

  • General comments
    • There's a need for a copyedit pass, but I think that can wait, since it amounts to a polishing phase and should be saved until you're fairly sure the article is close to the right shape. I have indicated a couple of problematic sentences below.
  • Lead
    •  Done In the lead, I'd shorten "This compilation of tales focuses on ..." to "These tales focus on ...". The tales are what are doing the focusing.
    •  DoneLook out for opportunities to cut words without losing the sense. An example: "... the social role of women, as well as their relationships ..."; replace "as well as" with "and" and you haven't lost anything. Another example from the end of the lead: "However, even with": cut "However" and the meaning is unchanged.
    •  DoneWhy is there a "the" in "the men embody the machismo"?
    •  Done"The book coincides with three chapters of life": this is a confusing metaphor, given that books have chapters.
  • Background
    •  Done"As one columnist notes": you don't always need to mention your sources in this way; inline citations mean that you can simply use the material and leave it to the reader to check the source. You should only use this style of quoting when it's clearly opinion. What you're doing is called "qualifying the source", and here is the guideline on when you need to do it. You do quote a lot of opinion, so you need to do a fair amount of this, it's true.
    •  Done"Other versions of this story are recognized throughout the world among the Aztecs, the Greek, the Spaniards, and found its way into Cisneros's work." Not quite grammatical -- did you mean "have found their way"? -- and in any case I'm not sure you mean what it appears to say; do the Aztec, Greek and Spanish versions all appear in Cisneros's work?
    •  Done"Amongst the collection of short stories is a chapter with the collection's title of Woman Hollering Creek." This is kind of ugly. How about "The book's name is taken from one of the stories, "Woman Hollering Creek", in which a woman who ... "? Could probably still be improved.
    •  Done"cleverly remarks": I'd avoid using terms such as "cleverly" for two reasons. One is simply that they're not neutral: you need to maintain a neutral point of view. The other is that it is generally better as a matter of writing style to let readers discover for themselves that a comment is smart (or asinine or insightful or whatever); readers don't like to be told what to think.
    •  DonePARAPHRASING IS STILL NEEDED THROUGHOUT THE ARTICLE.Your use of quotations in this section is quite deft, but I think you may have a little too much in the way of quoted material and not quite enough of your own prose. Phrases such as "the convergence of rootlessness and love" and "dull routine of her life" are pleasant, but since they're from critics, they are only formulations about Cisneros. Unless they are pithy, you should consider rephrasing them in your own words. One way to think about quotes is that they are like girders: you can assemble a paragraph out of them, but they are inflexible -- you can't tweak them. If you replace them with your own prose you have much more freedom to structure the argument to convey your point. But don't go overboard; many of these quotes are good: the Prescott quote is excellent, for example. Just cut or shorten one or two of them. It's also true that you're reporting opinion here, so you do need to use more quotes than would be necessary in a purely biographical section. Take a look at this section of El Senor Presidente; the two paragraphs beginning "Even though" and "Despite" are good examples. In both cases, critics' opinions are quoted, but they're integrated into a narrative argument that clearly belongs to the article, not to the critics. Your text is getting towards this, but it's not quite as smooth yet.
    •  DoneIs "groundwork" what you mean in the last paragraph? Groundwork is what you do to prepare for the real work that needs to be done. Is feminism "work" in this sense? Do you mean something more like "subtext", or "background", or "message"?
  • Plot summary
    •  DoneSimilar comments about the use of quotes apply here, and to later sections, so I won't repeat them. Here I'd say you are definitely relying a too much on quotes; there's no need to go to the critics to describe the plot.
    •  DoneThe section about "There Was a Man, There Was a Woman" seems to me to veer into critical analysis: wrestling with icons of sexuality and articulating their oppression doesn't sound like a plot description to me. I can't actually tell anything about what actually happens in the story from this description. Similarly, the quote from Steinberg doesn't belong in this section.
    • Overall I think the length of this section is about right. The article is likely to expand and you would be justified in expanding this section as you go in order to maintain a similar ratio; as you put in more critical commentary you will probably find that a more detailed plot summary will be useful as a reference point.
  • Characters
    •  DoneIdeally you'd list and describe major characters here, but presumably as this is a collection of stories there are too many of them. Perhaps you could pick a few and describe them, selecting ones that critics have focused on? Without reading your sources I don't know if that's a sensible suggestion.
    •  DoneAlternatively (or as well) you could list under each of the three archetypes characters from the stories that have been described by critics as fitting those archetypes.
    •  Done"the protagonist epitomizes the figure of La Malinche": do you mean "epitomizes"? Doesn't seem the right word to me. And I'd suggest a parenthetical explanation of La Malinche; few general readers will know what you're talking about without clicking on the link. Links shouldn't serve as a substitute for explanation; they are there for the reader to get more info on a topic.
    •  DoneNo need to date the Fitts quote; the date is in the citation.
  • Themes
    •  Done"observes the visible representation of the book": cut this -- the quote starts by talking about the cover art, so this adds nothing.**
    •  DoneI don't understand the quote, however. "Simultaneously" should be referring to two things, but I only see one, the confirmation of stereotypes. If this is in contrast to Reichart's comments about challenging stereotypes, it reads oddly because the reader doesn't know, when you quote McCracken, that Reichart is still in the referential context. If that's what's going on some work to position the McCracken quote is needed.
    •  DoneI'd cut the Brown-Guillory quote so that it starts: "Elizabeth Brown-Guillory notes that the story "Never Marry a Mexican" "portrays the mother ..." This elision makes Brown-Guillory say that the story, rather than Cisneros, does the portraying, but I think that's harmless and the resulting concision is worth it. The main reason you can cut like this, though, is that your topic sentence for this paragraph was repeated in the first part of the quote; you don't need both.
    •  DoneEven with that cut you still have "failed relationship" twice in a short span; can you rephrase one of them?
    •  DoneThe Madsen paragraph: just a note that single-sentence paragraphs are deprecated. Try to find another paragraph as a home for sentences out on their own like this. I don't believe there's a style guideline that says this, but a lot of reviewers regard it as poor writing to have paragraphs made of a single sentence.
  • Style
    •  Done"This is a fictional book composed of short stories." Cut; you need a lead in sentence, but this isn't it.
    •  Done The way you cite the first Madsen book, you're forced to say "in a later book" for the second quote, but I don't think the reader really cares about the title of the first book or the separation of the quotes. I think a formulation like "critic Madsen has said" followed by "Madsen has also commented" or something along this lines would avoid the title and the chronology.
  • Reception
      •  Done"*"The book Woman Hollering Creek and Other Stories was well received not only because Latin women could relate to the stories but all women of different cultures could relate." This sounds like an opinion to me. Is that really the reason it was well-received? Not because it was well promoted and marketed, or the author was very pretty, or it caught the zeitgeist? I'm sure you're right that this is thought to be the reason, but you need a citation to support you.
    •  Done"It is mentioned that": yuck. Passive voice, and you're using a qualifying phrase without actually providing any information! If you're quoting and citing, then yes, it's mentioned.
    •  DoneThe Stavins quote has been used before; you can refer to it again but shouldn't present it as if it was new. Ideally at least one should be partly rephrased so the reader doesn't see the identical language again.
    •  DoneI'm not clear from the "La Llorona" sentence whether this refers to the legend becoming a film, or a particular one of Cisneros's stories becoming a film.

There's a lot of good material here, and I think you have the structure of the article right. The quotes seem apposite and consistent. I hope these comments are useful, and that you don't mind the detailed critique -- it doesn't mind I think the article is bad; quite the reverse. If you disagree with anything, or want more details or different feedback, just let me know, and I'll respond as soon as I have time. Mike Christie (talk) 00:53, 26 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I agree with Mike's comments. However, I would go further on the quotations: I think there is way too much literal quotation at the moment. Just to get an idea, I copied the article into a text editor. Out of about 13KB of prose (just over 2000 words), approximately half of it (just under 1000 words, 6.5KB) is quoted material. Copyediting would reduce the size of the unquoted material even further. I sympathise that when the sources describe an aspect of the book in a particularly apt or appealing way it is tempting to quote them, but bear in mind that the sources are quite often trying to provide critical analysis or even develop an argument, whereas Wikipedia's goal is to convey information. That requires a different style.
I would have copyedited some more today, but as Mike says, this is polishing, and there will be much more to polish once the quotation issue is addressed. Good luck! Geometry guy 16:39, 26 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Upgrade to B class

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After I wrote the notes above, I looked through the B class criteria and I think you're there. So I've upgraded the article to B class; congratulations. Mike Christie (talk) 01:03, 26 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Wow, thank-you so much for looking at our work, and taking the time to help us out!--Jacqui Nicole (talk) 03:17, 26 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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I've just done a rough copyedit of the lead. I fixed some grammar issues, removed some overlinking (USA and English language are presumed to be known terms to anyone who can access Wikipedia), and wikilinked Chicana (certainly a familiar term to your class, but not the world at large). While trying to fill out more of the infobox, I found that although the ISBN and cover image are from the same edition of the book, that doesn't appear to be the first edition. It is preferred to describe the first edition, but not required—however, we definitely must not call the image 'first edition' if it is not. The true first edition seems to be this one: OCLC 253421931. Maralia (talk) 14:56, 26 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I was about to tidy the lead when Maralia stepped in, for instance to remove the word "renowned", which is what we call a peacock term. The lead looks pretty good now. See here for advice on overlinking, although the body of the article looks more like it is underlinked to me. I spotted some weasel words there ("Some critics say") and our guidelines on words to avoid may help to get the idea of "encyclopedic style". It is very different from an essay or term paper style. Geometry guy 16:18, 26 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Everyone is being such a great help (and keeping us busy! haha). Thank-you very much! I was just wondering about the process of "copyediting". I looked it up on wikipedia, and I'm assuming it means that you have edited the issues you've seen by correcting them directly in the article. I'm just making sure that there isn't a separate 'copyedit' page that we should be searching out. --Katie322 (talk) 01:33, 27 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

No. Copy-editing means revising for clarity and concision, because our first drafts are seldom the best. Geometry guy 01:54, 27 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I hope that I copyedited the correct way by simply deleting from your post what I thought was (ironically) unnecessary. If this IS correct, then this is what Maralia did earlier with our article (?)--Katie322 (talk) 03:34, 27 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Hehe. Indeed. As for what Maralia did, you can take a look here. Copy-editing is revising a test to ensure that it not only has no grammatical and spelling errors, but also that it is as clear and unambiguous as possible. Especially as you get closer to featured article status, you will repeatedly need to go over your prose, revising it as much as possible so that it is as well-written as possible. Here is a long, but very useful, page with advice on how to improve your prose. Of course, copy-editing is not only an issue on Wikipedia: with anything that you write, the more revisions, the better. --jbmurray (talk • contribs) 03:55, 27 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
The great thing about Wikipedia is that it does not matter if your prose is not perfect the first time. You can fix it, and other editors can fix it. Copyediting is also about making prose as concise as possible. I've copyedited further my post above. Geometry guy 08:56, 27 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Just so all is clear. Gguy's text has now been changed from:
No it just means that on some occasions when you write something down on paper for the very first time, you don't always write it in the most optimal manner. Or you might tend to use some unneeded words. Or you might even say the same thing in more than one similar way. However, I've deliberately written this reply in a way that might need a certain amount of copyediting. Can you remedy the unnecessary elaborations I have tried to make in explaining the notion of copyediting?
to (first copy-edit, by Katie322):
No it just means that on some occasions when you write something down on paper for the very first time, you don't always write it in the most optimal manner. However, I've deliberately written this reply in a way that might need a certain amount of copyediting. Can you remedy the unnecessary elaborations I have tried to make in explaining the notion of copyediting?
to (second copy-edit, by Gguy):
No, it just means that the first draft is not always the best. This reply needs copyediting. Can you fix it?
to (third copy-edit, by me):
No. Copy-editing means revising for clarity and concision, because our first drafts are seldom the best.
How's that? ;) --jbmurray (talk • contribs) 09:07, 27 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Sorry for not responding earlier. Your version shows that encyclopedic prose can be both to the point, and also beautiful. It may be worth noting, however, that this is more than a copyedit (probably it isn't worth noting, but I'm noting it anyway): the self-referential part of the original post has been eliminated, because it is now false. Removing incorrect or out-of-date information is also an important part of editing, but it isn't copyediting. Geometry guy 22:04, 28 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

General comments from Awadewit

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This is an excellent start! My comments may seem a bit overwhelming, but I am working on the assumption that this group eventually wants to reach FAC:

  •  DoneWe generally try to avoid quotations in the lead since it is supposed to be a summary of the article. Readers who look at only the lead rarely care about one reviewer's take on the book, for example, so it is important that any quotations in the lead be exceptionally important or exceptionally representative of the views in the article.
  •  DoneThe last paragraph of the lead is vague - give the reader more of a hint of the what the "daring stylistic techniques" are and what some of the "distinct literary fashions" that she uses are.
  • Infoboxes are optional on Wikipedia. You might think about whether this infobox is actually necessary. In what way does it help the reader?
    • My opinion on the info box is that it offers factual information at a glance. I've often used Wikipedia to check dates of books and how long they are, and having an organized reference at the beginning of an article is very helpful. We actually have more information in our infobox than the one for Pride and Prejudice, and Anna Karenina 's is lengthier only with it's translation information (as Woman Hollering Creek has not been translated), to give a few examples of famous books. So I do think that this info box would help the reader; however, I'm new to wikipedia as an article writer and am not sure what really constitutes a good info box. Above all, I believe that we would need to keep the cover image if the info box were to go...readers love seeing covers of the book, I know I do. --Katie322 (talk) 03:45, 31 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      • Dates should be in the lead (I've added it) and as to length, that is deceptive, of course. Pride and Prejudice was originally published as a three-volume novel. That sounds a lot longer than it is, though. Page-size and type-size determines the number of pages. :) However, as long as you have an argument and all of the information is indeed factual, let's keep it. Awadewit (talk) 18:38, 8 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  •  DoneIn The Nation, Patricia Hart remarks, "anger repressed bursts the seams of life for Cisneros’ female characters, who struggle valiantly to make something beautiful from the ugly fabric fate has given them to work with". - It is not clear to me why this sentence is necessary in the "Background" section.
  •  DoneThe third and fourth paragraph of "Background" need to be rewritten, one to focus on Cisneros's biography and one to focus on Chicano feminism. Because many readers will not know what Chicano feminism is, you will need to define this term in fairly simple language. Try to avoid quoting any scholars! :)
  •  DoneThe "Plot summary" section needs to be entirely rewritten. Currently, it uses quotations from critics to explain the overarching themes of the stories. You need to describe the plot of each story, that is, you need to describe what happens in each story - the narrative arc of the stories.


  • Right now, the "Themes" section seems to be a list of the research you have uncovered. The writing needs to be more structured. So, for example, you need to figure out what are the themes that scholars return to repeatedly in their discussions of Cisneros's work and create subsections for those and then write individual paragraphs on those topics (perhaps "Gender" and "Relationships"?). Done
  • In the "Style" section, when you include claims about how Cisneros writes, it is a good idea to include quotations from the collection of short stories itself that the scholars used to make their points, so that readers can see how that writing works. For example, how does the third-person narration work? " Done
  • Madsen also commented that Cisneros uses "the strategies described in post-colonial theory as 'counter-discourse' to engage and deconstruct the oppressive cultural narratives that are a legacy of Mexican America's colonial past". - Whenever a complicated idea like postcolonial theory arises in an article, it has to be explained to the reader!" Done
  • I'm sensing that more research could help you flesh out this article more, but Jbmurray will be able to give you better advice on that than I.
  • One noticeable problem with the prose in this article is the ubiquity of quotation - far too much of the article is quoted. Try to write the article yourself, rather than relying on the words of others. Quote very sparingly - no more than once per paragraph, say.
  • I have not said much regarding sentence-level prose issues, because I think that the editors should focus on re-organizing and fleshing out the article first, but this article will require extensive copyediting before any nominations take place (as all articles do). Once the bulk of the article is in place, we will all pitch-in with the copyediting.

I hope that these suggestions are helpful! Awadewit (talk) 14:52, 27 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

paraphrasing

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It's true, as observed by others on this talk page, that you need to put material from quotations in your own words. But be careful as you paraphrase that you do not distort the original source. In this paraphrase, for instance, we should note that "gender relationships and culture" are not at all the same things as "feminism and cultural imperialism." Is this really an accurate paraphrase, that preserves the meaning of the original author?

Paraphrasing is not always an easy skill to pick up. But there are resources out there to help you: see here, for instance. --jbmurray (talk • contribs) 03:02, 2 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Awadewit - part the second

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At Katie322's request here, I have rereviewed this article. Much has improved - well done! However, there is still much to be done.

  • Katie let me know that all of you are still working on the paraphrase problem. The overabundance of quotation is still a problem in the article, but as everyone knows about it, let's move on.
  •  DoneThe collection reflects Cisneros's multicultural background of being raised in a country that is not quite her own, but the only one she truly knows. - Fluffy and vague - Can you explain this sentiment in language that is more specific and precise?
  •  DoneCisneros adds an obvious flavor of feminism to the stories, yet produces a feeling of sensitivity to the universal reality of immigrant life. - The "yet" does not make sense here - what is the connection between the feminism in the stories and the "universal reality of immigrant life"?
  •  Doneobvious flavor of feminism - Usually we try to avoid saying anything is obvious in case it isn't to the reader (besides, from the descriptions of the feminine cliches, it is unclear how the stories are feminist). What is a "flavor of feminism"? This phrase is awkward.
  •  Donea feeling of sensitivity to the universal reality of... - wordy - Do we need all of these prepositional phrases?
  •  DoneThe legend of La Llorona (Spanish for "weeping woman") is a ghost story found in Mexico and Texas. Woman Hollering Creek, a body of water just off Interstate 10 in Texas, is part of that same myth. - Very awkward beginning to the "Background" section - explain to the reader why they are being told this information (perhaps this would be the place to mention the title connection?). Also, try to make these sentences flow together better.
  •  DoneCisneros takes this tale, which has also been found slightly modified in Aztec, Greek, and Spanish cultures, and incorporates it into her work. - I would suggest moving the information about the myth's multicultural origins earlier in the "Background" section - focus this sentence on how Cisneros uses it.
  •  DoneThe title of the short story collection is taken from the story "Woman Hollering Creek", which focuses on a woman who is physically abused by her husband and feels drawn towards the nearby creek, but finds help from two strangers before she is led to do anything drastic. - Tie the Cisneros story to the myth more explicitly. Show the reader why you are discussing this story in the context of the myth.
  •  DoneThe paragraphs in the "Background" section have no transitions between them. You either need to create transitions or create subsections.
  •  DoneThe second paragraph of the "Background" section does not adequately describe Cisneros's immigrant background. Moreover, it covers two topics: her immigrant background (first sentence) and her experience as a woman (rest of paragraph). Divide the paragraph into two paragraphs, each focusing on a single topic. You can integrate some of the Madsen material into the paragraph about Cisernos's experience as a woman and how that affected her writing.
  •  DoneLucy's home is described as a typical low-income, Mexican-American family, in which the overworked mother is busy with her many children and the father is rarely around. - I'm a little worried about this statement - why are we saying that this is the "typical low-income, Mexican American family"? Do we have a source for that? (I noticed this sentence was only sourced to the book.)
  •  DoneIxchel throws caution to the wind in her desire to be romanced by someone with alleged Mexican roots, only to be disappointed by the reality of having fallen in love with a Mexican-American serial killer. - "throws caution to the wind" is vague - What happens in the story? What is her motivation?
  •  DoneThe fourth paragraph of "Plot summary" is not a plot summary - this material belongs in the "Themes" section.
  •  DoneThis section will discuss the main characters in three of the aforementioned stories from the plot summary as well as the three major feminine archetypes highlighted by Cisneros in the last section of this book that represent Mexican womanhood; "the passive virgin, the sinful seductress, and the traitorous mother." - Ew! Let's try to be a bit more interesting, shall we? "I will now proceed to section 2, subsection B of this lecture...." Make the reader want to go on!
  • In the "Characters" section, more needs to be said about Lucy and Ixchel than is said about them in the "Plot summary".
  •  DoneClemencia is the Chicana protagonist in "Never Marry a Mexican", who captures the identity of the historical figure La Malinche, an indigenous woman who befriended the Spanish Conquistadors in the 1500s, and is "doomed to exist within a racial and class-cultural wasteland, unanchored by a sense of ever belonging either to her ethnic or her natal homeland". - What does "captures the identity" mean? Who is "doomed to exist with a racial...wasteland"? The sentence is a bit ambiguous.
  •  DoneChayo, a character who writes the last note in the story “Little Miracles, Kept Promises” - What does "writes the last note" mean?
  •  DoneChayo, a character who writes the last note in the story “Little Miracles, Kept Promises”, explains the challenges of living as a modern Chicana and of leaving her Mexican heritage in attempts to redefine her role as a woman. - Does Chayo actually explain anything? The "in attempts to redefine her role as a woman" is a bit vague and tacked on to the end of the sentence.
  •  Done"Cleofilas neither drowns nor abandons her children. Instead, she saves them, and herself, by drawing on resources that come from both sides of the border." - What resources? This needs to be explained in more detail.
  •  DoneTry to start out the "Themes" section with a general sentence or paragraph that describes the material to come - a "roadmap" or "signpost" for the reader. It helps the reader to know a bit about what is to come. Done
  •  DoneOne of the major themes in the book is the social role of women. - This is a weak topic sentence - any paragraph about any theme could begin "one of the major themes is..." - Try to make it specific to this theme and this book.
  •  DoneAn example of this is Cleófilas, who by coming to the United States learns that life is very different from those she saw in the telenovelas. She learns there is more to woman than being a wife and a mother, that there are more possibilities that she can pursue while she still remains faithful to her religious beliefs - What are these "more possibilities"? Why is remaining faithful to her religious beliefs important? This bit of information seems strangely inserted here. Explain its relevance to the reader.
  •  DoneAnother theme of the book is that of conflicting love and failed relationships between man and woman and also between mother and daughter. - "Another" is a weak transition - try to connect the paragraphs together. Perhaps the topic of women or gender would work?
  •  Done*The second paragraph of "Themes" needs an example from the stories to illustrate it.
    •  DoneAfter the experience of growing up within two cultures, Cisneros was able to combine both ethnicities, American and Mexican, throughout the short stories, and develop a major theme of hybridity - wordy
  •  Done*The third paragraph of "Themes" needs an example.
  •  Done**The one-sentence paragraph of "Themes" needs to be expanded - what is the feminism and cultural imperialism in these stories? The feminism of these stories is alluded to several times in the article, but never explained.
  • For example, her narrative point of view almost continually changes, sometimes using first person, as we see in the story “Little Miracles, Kept Promises”, and sometimes third person, for example in “La Fabulosa: a Texas Operetta”. - Why does she use first-person in the one story and third-person in the other? Does Marsden say?
  •  Done[added NY Times book review]"Reception" section needs to be expanded. What did reviewers in publications like the LA Times and New York Times say about this when it was released? We want to know what critics who review literature thought about it.
    Guys, let me echo Awadewit's note here. The "Reception" section is, I think, the weakest in the article as a whole. It needs developing; there are a couple of very short (one-sentence) paragraphs; and it could do with rewording and copy-editing. --jbmurray (talk • contribs) 00:40, 11 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  •  DoneAccording to the Sandra Cisneros article, "in 1991, she had received the Paperback Book Club New Voices Award, the Anisfield-Wolf Book Award, and the Lannan Foundation Literary Award for her book "Woman Hollering Creek"." - Can we find some sources to verify this information?

I hope these comments are uesful. Please let me know if something is unclear or if I can help in any way. Awadewit (talk) 18:50, 8 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

A hello from the Sandra Cisneros Team

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Hey Woman Hollering Creek Team, it's Heather here. I checked out your article today and just wanted to point out that Cisneros was born in Chicago but has been living in Texas for a while now. So maybe San Antonio-based would be more accurate than Chicago-based. Heathermary (talk) 04:45, 11 November 2008 (UTC)heathermary[reply]

Fitts citations

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Please double-check the citations to Fitts p. 11. I just checked a couple of them, and had to change them as not all are from that page. Thanks. --jbmurray (talk • contribs) 10:33, 11 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • Thanks for the heads-up Jon! I checked out the rest of pg 11 Fitts quotes and there was one more which didn't belong there. I think what happened was we only looked at the one LONG page of the article and not the page numbered pdf version. oops. --Katie322 (talk) 19:56, 12 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]


GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Woman Hollering Creek and Other Stories/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Review

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I am reviewing this article and will post detailed comments shortly. Brianboulton (talk) 01:08, 12 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Detailed review points

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This is a generally well-written and informative article about an interesting writer. There are some rough edges, and a fair number of minor points that need atention:-

  • General point
    •  Done Story titles should be italicised, rather than put in quotes, for example One Holy Night, not "One Holy Night"
  • Lead
    •  Done umlaut required over the "i" in "naïve”" – as is done later in the article
    •  Done fix typo in final line – "each story"
  • Background
    •  Done Repetition of "always" should be avoided, I suggest by removing the one in the second line.
    •  Done Is "on account of gender" necessary, when you have identified her as a single daughter among seven children?
    •  Done Not sure about "enough siblings to go round". Sounds informal and non-encyclopaedic – suggest rephrase.
    •  Done "After many years of writing, Cisneros now develops..." As the book was published in 1991, "now develops" is inappropriate. Perhaps just dropping the "now" would work, though I’m not sure – perhaps: "had by 1991 developed..."?
    •  Done "She doesn’t appear..." is definitely non-encyclopaedic. Should be "does not"
    •  Done "Cisneros developed this tale..." In instances like this, it’s OK to use the present tense. For example, we might say, in literary criticism, "George Eliot uses water-imagery", or in religios studies, "The Bible says..." Therefore, "Cisneros develops this tale..." is OK.
  • Plot summary
    •  Done I suggest section heading should be "Plot summaries" as there is more than one plot.
    •  Done I got a little bit confused in this section. My understanding is that the book’s structure is three sections, entitled My Friend Lucy..., One Holy Night and There Was a Man, and that each section contains a group of short stories. Am I right? A little further down you refer to My Friend Lucy... as a short story. Is it a story or a group of stories?
      •  DoneJacqui and Esmeralda: do you think that something like: "...a short story titled the same as the section it is in..." should be added? okay, well I think that that is too wordy, but something like it? Or maybe when the sections are introduced, mention that there are individual stories with the same name?--Katie322 (talk) 22:38, 12 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    •  Done In which section does the title story Woman Hollering Creekoccur?
        • I can't see where you have said in which of the three sections the title story is to be found, likewise for the "Eyes of Zapata" story. This section is generally OK, but could be organised a bit more tidily, for example by summaising the plots in the order in which they appear in the book. Brianboulton (talk) 18:25, 16 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
        • It looks like Jacqui has expanded and organized the plot summary section. I'm not sure which happened first: your comment or her editing. However, the section appears to be more coherent now (although I've read the book so it may be easier to understand). Could you let us know if it's still confusing? Thank-you. --Katie322 (talk) 19:57, 16 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
          •  DoneI can see what Jacqui has done, and it helps a bit. But to me, there is still confusion in this section which needs sorting out. Rather than have you guessing what's on my mind, I've done a bit of experimenting with the section. What I've done is (1) reorganise the information in the opening paragraph so that facts are presented in order of their importance, and (2) combine the short fourth paragraph with the next, and altered a bit of the wording at the same time. My version of your section can be examined here. Don't treat my suggestions as instructions, but discuss them among themselves, and adopt them if you think they make the position clearer. Incidentally, your use of the word "vignette" is questionable - one of the stories is 29 pages long, far too long to be properly described as a vignette. Brianboulton (talk) 23:20, 16 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
          • I like this version you've done. Organizing the first paragraph to talk about the sections first is a good idea, as well as linking the fourth paragraph to the next, as they are already linked by talking about the same stories. Our group will take a look and see what we can do with it. Thank-you for your effort on this point! --Katie322 (talk) 23:56, 16 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
          • Yes I agree, thanks for suggesting those changes, sometimes when you look at something so long it's hard to see how to make it better so, I really appreciate it! I made the suggested edits...--Jacqui Nicole (talk) 01:00, 17 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    •  Done Why, in this plot summaries section, have you not dealt with the plot of the title story, nor made any reference to the longest, 29-page (or 28?) story, both of which I would have thought were of importance?
    •  DoneSmall point, but the longest story is 29 pages in the lead, and 28 pages here. Also, "28" should be numeric, not written out.
  • Characters
    •  DoneFive characters are described in this section. There are, presumably, many more in the book. What were the reasons for selecting these particular five? Again I see nothing relating to the longest story in the book.
      • The reason for highlighting these 6 characters (I added one more) are:
        • I wanted to have at least one character from each of the three sections (Although Lucy and Ixchel are somewhat minor characters in the book, they provide a representative for the first and second sections.)
        • I wanted to include Clemencia, Cleófilas and Chayo because they represent the 3 female archetypes discussed throughout this article; those being : La Malinche, La Llorona and La Virgen de Guadalupe.
        • And finally I added the main character from "Eyes of Zapata" (the longest story), which I agree is necessary to the character section. --Jacqui Nicole (talk) 05:32, 16 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    •  DoneThe descriptions could be expanded, to focus less on what these characters did in their stories, and more on the type of character they were. In this respect the first two, particularly Clemencia, are superior to the others.
        • You should introduce this section of the article with an explanatory statement, something like: "The following are characters from each section, representing the female archetypes in the book". A further question (I'm not asking for action on this, but I'm curious): why no male character in your selection? I'd quite like to know how Cisneros presents males. Brianboulton (talk) 18:25, 16 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
          • I ended up adding one male character from "One Holy Night", but bascially Cisneros doesn't really give a voice to many male characters in this book, and that is why almost all of the protagonists are females...--Jacqui Nicole (talk) 01:19, 17 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Themes
    •  Done "There are many themes that we can find in the book..." introduces a personal voice which should be avoided. In this case the passive voice is necessary: "There are many themes found in the book..."
    •  DoneSuggest semi-colon after "book", delete "but", decapitalize Roles.
    •  DoneClumsy phrasing: "both ethnicities American and Mexican". "Both" is unnecessary; suggest simply "American and Mexican ethnicities"
    •  DoneShift comma after "short stories" to after "relationships"
    •  DoneCheck exactly where the Reichart quote begins. The opening quote marks look to be in the wrong place.
      • Please clarify: Does the Reichart quote begin before the story title, where the marks are now, or with the words "The female characters break out..." Brianboulton (talk) 14:49, 17 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      • The Reichart quote DOES begin before the story title. The original quote begins: "...in Mango Street and in Woman Hollering Creek (1991) the female characters..." This is why the quote begins in our article as shown. Is it okay as is, with the lead-in: "Critic Mary Reichart observes that in Cisneros's previous work as well as "in Woman Hollering Creek (1991),..."?
    •  DoneSEE QUESTION BELOW--Katie322 (talk) 04:48, 13 November 2008 (UTC) "...life is very different from those she saw in the telenovelas". "Life" is singular, "those" is plural. "Those" should be "that which". Same sentence, there is tense confusion, too: "life is...she saw". I suggest "she sees".[reply]
    •  DoneSecond para first line: I think there should be an "in" after "such as"
    •  DonePut a colon immediately after the story title and before the Brown-Guillory quote.
    •  DoneCitation [21] should be given immediately after the quotation, and again at the paragraph end if necessary.
    •  DoneThird para. Suggest start with "From" rather than "After", and lose comma after "two cultures". Also, last word of first sentence should be plural ("cultures")
    •  DoneGive a specific attribution to the long quote beginning "depicts the situation..."
    •  DoneTry to avoid ending the paragraph with a preposition.
  • Style
    •  DonePersonal voice again: "As you read her book...you see that..." Suggest: "Reviewer Susan Wood suggests the reader sees that..."
    •  DoneWhy not use Madsen’s first name, as with other critics/reviewers, at first mention? (I’d like a word with her about the form of her quoted statement, but unfortunately that’s not possible!)
    •  DoneDeal with the citation required tag
    •  Done"Another unique aspect..." is editorial opinion, unless it can be specifically attributed, e.g. "According to XYZ, another unique aspect..."
    •  Done"A sometime poet": this phrase is dropped in a bit casually. Was she actually a poet in the sense of having poetry published? If so, this shoud be mentioned before now, perhaps in the lead.
    •  DoneLast single-sentence para looks like a bit of an afterthought, and would be better if absorbed into the main text of the section.
  • Reception
    •  DoneFirst sentence is personal voice and editorial opinion. It’s also unnecessary – suggest it is deleted.
    •  Done"This is note worthy" is also opinion, and so is the sentence beginning "Thus having..." I suggest the para is reworded along the lines: “"usan Wood comments on the publication of the book by Random House: "Despite...etc"
    •  DoneSEE QUESTION BELOW--Katie322 (talk) 05:51, 13 November 2008 (UTC) Second para: Comma after "published", mdash not hyphen in "...condition—a condition..."[reply]
    •  Done "Stavans" needs to be properly introduced, and identified as the person who made the preceding quote.
      • Stavans didn't actually make the preceding quote, so I introduced both him AND Prescott to clarify.
    • I recommend combining the two short paras at the end, possibly absorbing them into the main para above.

I am putting the article on hold to enable the above points to be addressed. I see no problem with the article's promotion once this is done. I will check this page regularly, so if there are any queries, e.g. I haven't made myself clear above, leave a note here and I will pick it up. Leave a note on my talkpage when you have dealt with all the points. Brianboulton (talk) 19:27, 12 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • QUESTION: I've put all the story titles into italics and have left the section/segment titles in quotations (ie: "My Lucy Friend who Smells Like Corn", "One Holy Night", and "There was a Man, There was a Woman"). Am I correct in doing this? --Katie322 (talk) 20:40, 12 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • QUESTION: For your 4th suggestion to the background section, the sentence we had in the article was: "After many years of writing, Cisneros now uses Woman Hollering Creek and Other Stories to explore the failed relationships of the female characters via their reactions to the men in their lives." I've altered it to what you said, but I'm just making sure that we're looking at the same sentence.--Katie322 (talk) 21:08, 12 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    Another apology - you never had 1991 in your text. All I really wanted you to do was to delete the "now" in your original sentence, and to consider whether "uses" should be "used", bearing in mind the book was written in 1991. Somehow my notes got scrambled into your text. Can I (very humbly) suggest you go back to your original version, except deleting "now", and replacing "uses" with "used", so the sentence reads: "After many years of writing, Cisneros used Woman Hollering Creek and Other Stories to explore..." etc ? That is what I originally intended to suggest. Brianboulton (talk) 22:36, 12 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • QUESTION: For the 6th suggestion in the themes section, you mentioned disagreement between tense and number. I can't seem to find the sentence you were talking about which leads me to believe that we made an edit to it after you made your notes and before you posted your suggestions. The new version reads: "An example of this is Cleófilas, who had hoped for a better life after leaving her home in Mexico to live in the United States. The soap operas she had seen had led her to believe that her life was going to be a fairy tale. Instead, with a failing marriage and another child on the way she sees that her life is like a soap opera; a very sad soap opera." Are these sentences okay?
    Yes, fine except for the faux-dramatic emphasis at the end. I recommend you change this to something like: "...she sees that her life resembles only the saddest aspects of soap opera". Brianboulton (talk) 09:37, 13 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]


  • QUESTION

I'm not sure how to order the characters or to explain their purpose in the character section...maybe you can help

    • The order the characters appear in the book are: Lucy, Chaq, Ixchel, Cleófilas, Clemencia, Inés, and Chayo
    • Lucy is a representative for the first section of the book
    • Ixchel and Chaq are representatives of the second section of the book
    • Cleófilas, Clemencia, Inés represent characters from 3 of the longest stories of the book which happen to be contained in the last section, and therefore I believe they are important and should be present in the character section.
    • Cleófilas, Clemencia, Chayo represent the 3 female archetypes, La llorona, La Malinche, La Virgen de Guadalupe

Do you have any suggestions for how to order the characters, and also how to introduce this section with an explanatory statement? I know you had suggested "The following are characters from each section, representing the female archetypes in the book" but not all of the female characters are representatives of these archetypes... Thanks so much!--Jacqui Nicole (talk) 01:34, 17 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

      • The most logical thing would be to order them as they appear in the book – as per your list above. My suggestion for the intro statement was only meant as a "such as" example. A short sentence introducing them as a cross-section, or selection, of the book's main characters is all that is required. Brianboulton (talk) 10:01, 18 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
        • I added an introductory sentence to the character sentence and then switched the order in the presentation of the characters. This way it coincides with the introduction in that the first three sections of the book are discussed, and then the female archetypes. Let me know what you think. Are there any other edits needed for the character section?--Katie322 (talk) 23:56, 18 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • QUESTION: Hi Brian, I was reading through the book this morning and realized that our comment on the length of the stories may be misleading. We said: "...while "Salvador Late or Early" and "There Was a Man, There Was a Woman" each occupies a single page." These stories start halfway down one page (as per the lay-out of the chapters) and then finish halfway down the next page. I'm just wondering if it's misleading to say they are one single page when they are on two separate, PHYSICAL pages. The only story that is on one single, physical page is called "Bread"...should we change this or is it okay?--Katie322 (talk) 16:16, 18 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    • Not a point worth worrying about, but if you like, add the word "length" after "single page", so it reads: "...each occupies a single page length". Remember, the page layout in the edition you are reading may be different in other editions, but the stories will still be a page length. Brianboulton (talk) 16:35, 18 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review summary

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I am ready to close the review now. Editors should continue to refine the text or consider other ways of improving the article, but as it stands now, it is obviously of GA standard. Congratulations - this is now officially a Wikipedia Good Article.

  • The prose is of a good quality, lucid and interesting. There are no obvious MOS violations and the structure of the article is sound.
  • The article is properly referenced to reliable sources
  • The coverage is comprehensive, covering all aspects of the subject
  • The article presents a neutral point of view
  • The article is stable.
  • There is a single image, of the book cover. It may be worth considering, for the future, if there are ways of increasing the images.

Final comment: I believe this may be the project's first GA, though I am sure that others will follow it. The quality of this article, and the obvious dedication of its editors, make me feel you could aim for it to be the project's first Featured Article. What I would suggest is that you take a little time, continue to nurse the article and look to improve it. Put it to Peer Review, where you will get valuable feedback by other experienced editors. Then take it from there.

Last of all, thanks for improving my knowledge of a writer that I knew little about before ("Shame on you", says my daughter). Good luck to you all. Brianboulton (talk) 00:52, 19 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Nice work!

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It seems you beat us to the punch on passing a GA article! Oh bollocks, and I was looking forward to that... keg of coke? hah!

Any who, I took a second to read through your article and enjoyed it thoroughly! That being said, considering my disdain for some literature, makes it a great compliment. Congrats! :-) FoodPuma 13:53, 23 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the high praise! No worries, I'm sure that we can work out some sort of sharing arrangement for whichever type of 'keg'/'six pack' arises ;) haha! --Katie322 (talk) 21:08, 23 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Culturally challenged

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The author of this page makes at least two false assumptions: one is the Mexican-Americans are immigrants, and the other is that Mexico is not 'America.' — Preceding unsigned comment added by 24.170.73.71 (talk) 12:24, 7 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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