Talk:Wolfenstein: The New Order/GA1

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Reviewer: AdrianGamer (talk · contribs) 15:04, 27 June 2015 (UTC)

Sorry for the delay. The article is much longer than I had expected

Lead and other sections

• for PlayStation 3, PlayStation 4, Xbox 360, Xbox One and Microsoft Windows - for "the" PlayStation 3... Or Put Microsoft Windows in front of PlayStation 3.
• May worth mentioning that this is the seventh main entry in the series and mentioned that it is a sequel to 2009's Wolfenstein instead of the first entry since it
• its levels are navigated on foot - All levels or most of its levels? Some segments of some levels are rail shooters where you sit on a plane and shoot enemies' plane, something like that.
• The game's attempt to delve into character development of Blazkowicz is a break from series tradition—a choice from the developers to interest players in the story. - Rephrase it to something like "The game also attempts to delve into character development of Blazkowicz, unlike its predecessors" - Sounds slightly more neutral
• They also aimed to portray him in a heroic fashion, as opposed to an antihero - Blazkowicz is an antihero in other Wolfenstein games?
• Development duties were shared between many studios worldwide. - Not mentioned in other sections. Not supported by sources
• Old Blood was never mentioned in other section. It should also be specified that it is a standalone expansion, not a standalone game.
• To progress through the story, players take on enemies throughout levels - "Take on" does not sound specific enough
• Alternatively, players can ambush enemies, which will result in an intense firefight between the two parties - That really depends on the nature of the ambush.
• which will result in an intense firefight between the two parties - Should use present tense
• The game gives players a wide variety of weapon options—they can be found on the ground, retrieved from dead enemies, or removed from their stationary position and carried around - No mention in the source given.
• and a laser cannon can be transformed into a cutting tool. - I am assuming the part where you must use laser to cut wires, so "Cutting tool" also doesn't sound specific enough
• You should talk about that there is a variety of weapons before talking about weapon customization
• Gameplay is honestly a bit short. If there is any more mechanics featured in the game, try to fill it in. If there is no other mechanics, then the current section should be fine
• The plot section is a bit too long. Try to cut it down a bit.
• which requires codes from the Nazi lunar research facility to operate - May added that the facility is located on moon.
• it was announced that The New Order would launch on 20 May in North America, on 22 May in Australia, and on 23 May in Europe - Year of release is important as well.
• All pre-orders of the game grant the purchaser an access code to the upcoming Doom - Doom is linked to Doom 4. The correct page name is Doom (2016 video game)
• Is the quote for the German release really necessary?
• use id Software's id Tech 5 engine, after Rage (2011) - Try to avoid brackets
• The adventure aspect does not define the past Wolfenstein games. They revolutionize it with New Order, according to the source given
• Actually there is a lot of quote in the development section, some of them are unnecessary. Using too much such quotes may hurt neutrality in my opinion. A small portion of the quotes used sound like an extension of what has already been written instead of providing more useful information.
• The engine also allowed the team to develop the game simultaneously on different platforms - Not in the source given
• many of which reveal that he has been traumatized from some of his experiences - traumatized by, not from
• However, id Software wished for Blazkowicz to be portrayed differently in the game. - "for" is not necessary
• Wilhelm "Deathshead" Strasse, the game's main antagonist, has been previously featured as the tertiary antagonist of Return to Castle Wolfenstein (2001) and main antagonist of Wolfenstein (2009). - Try to avoid bracket.
• The team was acquired by Bethesda. The article does not mention that. The origins of MachineGames can also be briefly mentioned as well, considering The New Order is their first game since their establishment
• The team placed a high importance on the game's music, and aimed for a high standard. - The high standard is not necessary as every developer said similar things
• During the game's development, composer Mick Gordon traveled to Sweden to meet with the team - Should wikilink Mick Gordon
• More information about marketing and pre-release reception would be great.
• Metacritic, which assigns a normalized rating in the 0–100 range, calculated an average score of 81 out of 100 - "which assigns a normalized rating in the 0–100 range" is not necessary. It is something that I assume everyone understand
• Reviewers liked the game's concept,[64][68][70][77][78] narrative[70][75][79][80] and combat mechanics.[67][68][73][75][76] - You don't really need all the sources here, considering that these sources are used again in later paragraphs
• The stealth sections of the game also received praise, with Simon Miller of VideoGamer.com lauding the shooting and stealth mechanics, naming the former as "solid" - Should focus on his praise on stealth, not shooting
• Do we need to mentioned that it received a honorable mention? Placed in the 23th place doesn't seem to be an award or nomination
• No obvious copyright violations according to the this tool. But I have checked most of the sources and found some close-paraphrasing

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to add a huge amount of variety and details to the environments.

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to add a large amount of variety and details to the environment

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require — quite understandably — that their work never be associated with any Nazi imagery.

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require that their work never be associated with any Nazi imagery

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a quarter of all games sold in the United Kingdom and accounting for 36% of revenue.

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totaling a quarter of all games sold in the United Kingdom and accounting for 36% of revenue

Sources/Images

• Source 4 is an article written by a contributor in Forbes. It should not be used
• Wikilink Gamer Network for source 28
• Is Dead End Thrills, NeoGaf and VideoGameWriters a reliable source?
• Things like "The Escapist Staff", "Cheat Code Central Staff", " New Game Network Staff", and "Giant Bomb Staff" are not really necessary
• Cover art is a bit too large. The size should be around 300x400
• File:Wolfenstein The New Order cover system.png does not show much of the cover system. An actual gameplay screenshot would be nice.
• Don't leave some of the fields of the template of File:Wolfenstein The New Order development.jpg empty
• No dead link

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1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and y:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

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   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

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   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

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A solid article. If you had addressed all the problem, the article should be good to go. AdrianGamer (talk) 12:38, 29 June 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, AdrianGamer! I've gone through and fixed most of your concerns. I just wanted to let you know that I'm still trying to find a replacement for the Gameplay image; it's actually proving difficult, so if I can't find one soon, I might have to hop in the game and take a screenshot myself.

If you have any further concerns, please don't hesitate to let me know. Thanks! -- Rhain1999 ^{(talk to me)} 23:38, 29 June 2015 (UTC)

Nice job getting most issues addressed so quickly. I still have some concerns though

• The close paraphrasing for the sales part is still there.
• I thought that being placed in 21st, 12th, 13th or 11th is still not an award or nomination
• Old Blood is not mentioned in other sections besides the lead. AdrianGamer (talk) 02:41, 30 June 2015 (UTC)

I've tried to fix your remaining concerns. One thing I noticed, however, is that the close paraphrasing that you wrote above is not entirely accurate; you've made it look like the article copied the source verbatim, but your transcription of the source is actually inaccurate. Take another look at the source, if you don't understand what I mean.

However, I understand that the text in the article is still fairly similar to the source, so let me know if you'd like me to try and change it more. -- Rhain1999 ^{(talk to me)} 03:19, 30 June 2015 (UTC)

Sorry for my mistake then. I didn't realize that, probably some mistakes I made when I am copy-pasting. The two sentences look different enough, so this shouldn't be a problem anymore I guess. Wolfenstein: The New Order promoted to . Congratulations. If you still have the intention to further improve the article. I have some suggestions. You can further trim down the plot section and write about the origins of the developer, and ZeniMax's acquisition of it. But for now, the article is good to go.

It is also impressive to see that you can produce so many GAs within this two months, with The Last of Us articles, that table tennis game and this one. Very outstanding. AdrianGamer (talk) 08:51, 30 June 2015 (UTC)