Talk:William Middleton Wallace

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Reviewer: Shudde (talk · contribs) 05:34, 14 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hey mate. I've decided to review the article (been meaning to do some GA review for a while) and will hopefully start in the next day or so. But before I start a reminder on how I normally go about this: I'll usually read through the article starting immediately after the lead, and make comments as I go. These comments do not necessarily relate directly to the Good article criteria, but should in most cases. I believe that if I'm going to review an article, I may as well give any feedback I can, regardless of whether it relates to meeting the GA criteria. I read the lead last. Once I've finished reading through, I normally check the references and images (although sometimes I check these as I go). It is here that I'll normally spotcheck the references (to see that they verify the relevant statement) and also check for close-paraphrasing. If I find any problems with close paraphrasing I'll fail the article immediately—I'm not comfortable passing an article if there is evidence it contains a copyright violation. I hope to start adding comments soon. Cheers! -- Shudde ^talk 05:34, 14 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Excellent, thanks! FunkyCanute (talk) 10:44, 14 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Main text

Is he most commonly referred to as "Willie" in secondary sources? Otherwise this seems a little colloquial.

Changed to Wallace. FunkyCanute (talk) 10:40, 14 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

cricket, captaining the school team in 1911, as wicket-keeper -- you probably want to link cricket and wicket-keeper for those non-Anglophilic among the readership.

Done. FunkyCanute (talk) 10:40, 14 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Link "fullback"

Done. FunkyCanute (talk) 10:40, 14 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

You say "United Kingdom" -- does this mean United Kingdom as we think of it today, or does it also include the Republic of Ireland? If the latter, I think you should reword it. Some people are very sensitive about Ireland being referred to as the UK, Britain, Great Britain etc, so if that's the case I'd recommend "Britain and Ireland" instead (just to avoid the whole problem, not because there is something intrinsically wrong or incorrect with what is written).

Technically, between 1912 and 1914, the UK included Ireland (rather than Northern Ireland, as today). The source say 'UK' and I believe he means England, Scotland, Wales and Ireland. These were the 'Home Nations' (and for rugby purposes, are still referred to as such), as you know. I don't think the sensitivity is necessary. In any case, it is correct and that is more important than politics within an encyclopedia. FunkyCanute (talk) 10:40, 14 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
- I know Ireland was part of the UK then, but I can assure you that some people will be offended at use of the term to describe Ireland. I don't think this is politics but rather being sensitive to people's strong views on the issue. Have a look at Talk:British and Irish Lions if you want a few examples of the strong feelings. It costs nothing to avoid using a contentious description. -- Shudde ^talk 04:43, 15 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  - Yes, I'm aware that the renaming of the Lions caused a few people to stomp up and down. I remember it well at the time: it was mostly Brits who were upset. But we're not talking about Ireland here anyway, we're talking about a Scotsman. So, if he's the best fullback in the UK, it doesn't matter whether we're including Ireland or not. FunkyCanute (talk) 16:32, 15 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"freshers' rugby match" -- this may be too colloquial or unfamiliar to some readers. I'm assuming you mean first-year students? Consider rewording.

Have linked to freshman. FunkyCanute (talk) 16:46, 8 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

He was selected to play for Scotland against England in 1913; and Wales, Ireland, and England in 1914. -- link the national teams where appropriate

Done. FunkyCanute (talk) 10:40, 14 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Can more be said on his initial selection for Scotland?

I haven't come by anything much in my research. FunkyCanute (talk) 16:46, 8 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Scotland's first Five Nations match of 1914 was on 7 February, played away to Wales at Cardiff. Scotland had not won in Cardiff since 1890 and Wales were favourites, having 'lost so unluckily'[4] against England. The match pitted Welsh forward strength against the swift threequarter line of the Scots. The first points came from a try for Scotland by W. A. Stewart, converted by Hamilton, giving the visitors a five-point lead after four minutes. These were the only points they scored. Wales then attacked repeatedly and Wallace was kept busy in defence. With a 7–5 lead at half time, the Welsh pressed their advantage and ended the game 24–5 winners. -- it may be good to link to some of the jargon in here. Also why is this match focused on?

Wallace is specifically mentioned as being kept busy, hence the emphasis on the game. Added several wl. FunkyCanute (talk) 16:46, 8 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The English were then playing with fourteen men after Cherry Pillman's leg was broken in a tackle. -- specify that injury replacements were not permitted

Done. FunkyCanute (talk) 16:46, 8 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Triple Crown and the Calcutta Cup, as well as the Five Nations Championship -- link Triple Crown, Calcutta Cup and Five Nations

Done. FunkyCanute (talk) 10:40, 14 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

It was England's last international test on British soil before the First World War -- again with British. Maybe reword to say they played only once more before the war (against France I assume).

I don't see the need to reword this. It means exactly what it says. FunkyCanute (talk) 10:40, 14 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
- Yeah you should definitely reword this one. Calling Ireland part of British soil is pointlessly contentious. -- Shudde ^talk 04:43, 15 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  - Again, we're talking about a game that took place in Scotland. Ireland has nothing to do with this. To describe Scotland as British soil is 100% legitimate and accurate. Calling Ireland British soil would be contentious and wrong. I'm not going to avoid using terms like UK and Britain when they are correctly used. FunkyCanute (talk) 16:32, 15 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

11 of the 30 players went on to be killed in it -- this is a little ambiguous even though I know what you're trying to say. Maybe "11 of the 30 players from the match went on to be killed in it"

Done. FunkyCanute (talk) 16:46, 8 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"was gazetted" -- I'm unsure what this means exactly (maybe it's British English I'm unfamiliar with)

Re-worded. FunkyCanute (talk) 16:46, 8 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"as an observer" -- what is an 'observer'?

wikilinked. FunkyCanute (talk) 10:46, 14 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

link "capped"

Done. FunkyCanute (talk) 17:36, 14 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Consider linking the other national teams in the lead

Done. FunkyCanute (talk) 17:36, 14 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Okay I see "gazetted" there now. So does this mean that his appointment was "announced"? That he was conscripted, or that he volunteered to serve?

Other comments

Link fullback and Sainghin in the infobox
Generally avoid flags next to national teams in the infobox

Images

File:Operational B.E.2c.jpg -- licensing looks fine
File:William Middleton Wallace.jpg -- Was Drummond Young and Watson the photographer or just the publisher of the book? Need evidence of some reasonable inquiry into finding out details on the photographer (and when they died).

-- I'll spot check references and close-paraphrase tomorrow. -- Shudde ^talk 06:06, 14 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Delay

My apologies for the delay in progress. I've been caught up with a combination of heavy workload and Rugby World Cup activities. I'll make sure that I've dealt with all comments by the end of this week. FunkyCanute (talk) 13:17, 22 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@FunkyCanute: Not a problem. If you look at my editing history I've been too busy to edit much myself and was actually a little worried you'd be waiting for me. Take your time because I'm probably not going to be able to edit much in the next week. If you're happy to wait for me then I'm happy to wait for you. -- Shudde ^talk 05:48, 23 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

FunkyCanute, Shudde, with the exception of a date correction by Catlemur, the article has not been edited since September 14, over seven weeks ago. If this nomination is not going to progress at all, it should probably be closed. Thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 22:34, 5 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I will respond to any outstanding points this weekend. Apologies. FunkyCanute (talk) 09:10, 6 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I think I've covered everything now. Anything outstanding, please advise. Many thanks. FunkyCanute (talk) 16:48, 8 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Shudde hasn't edited in sometime but everything does look done, so I'll step in and close this. Wizardman 16:16, 1 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Useful additional material

Eng v Sco 1913: [1]