Talk:William McAndrew
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![]() | On 5 February 2022, it was proposed that this article be moved from William McAndrew (educator) to William McAndrew. The result of the discussion was moved. |
Did you know nomination
[edit]- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted without image by Theleekycauldron (talk) 22:16, 26 August 2021 (UTC)
- ... that, William McAndrew (pictured), the superintendent of Chicago Public Schools, was accused by Chicago Mayor William Hale Thompson of being an agent of George V, King of the United Kingdom?
- ALT1:... that, in 1927, William McAndrew (pictured), the superintendent of Chicago Public Schools, was put on trial by the Chicago Board of Education for charges of "insubordination" and "unpatriotism"?
Created/expanded by SecretName101 (talk). Self-nominated at 15:23, 20 August 2021 (UTC).
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Overall: A very substantial and well-formed article on an interesting figure; the things that went on... Developed as draft 31/12/20-14/8/21, that's patience - and so fully OK on timing. Well-cited, incl. every para of body text. Neutral. Required some time with Earwig but two notable numbers did not flag any substantive issues. While not included in the nomination, hook facts are well-cited in the text. Hooks are decent, the "unpatriotism" should catch eyes, and the "spying for King George" is even better. QPQ is done, with some depth, so AOK there. Approved to go. SeoR (talk) 16:37, 24 August 2021 (UTC)
Ethan Allen malaprop
[edit]Friends, We are told in the section on McAndrew's trial that one of his questioners was laughed at for taking issue with the exclusion from Chicago's history curriculum of Ethan Allen, to whom the questioner attributes Nathan Hale's great last words. I think it plain that the ridicule spoken of resulted from the malapropism by one supposedly invested in historical education, not from the obscurity of Ethan Allen; I suppose Allen is more of a local figure, but whether or not McAndrew's questioners knew of him, one doubts that the suggestion of his inclusion would have elicited laughter more than the obvious confusion of the names. I take this to the discussion, because I do not have the book cited by the writer of this fact, and I do not wish to change the content of the assessment to reflect my observation if the author of the source actually believes & states that the ridicule came from Allen's minor status. I have added a link to the article on Hale, specifically to the section on his death, but I humbly ask you what is to be done with the remaining wording. "The malapropism for Nathan Hale caused ridicule . . . Some unfamiliar with Hale but familiar with Allen laughed because they thought Allen too minor a figure . . . " But again, I rather doubt this second point. Would anyone happen to have the book? Twozenhauer (talk) 03:52, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- @Twozenhauer: Good catch. Found a contemporary newspaper article that indeed confirms that part of the reason for amusement in the gallery was apparently the fact that the quote was Nathan Hale's, not Allen's. SecretName101 (talk) 22:20, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
- Excellent find, my friend. The article has been well edited by the addition of the other gentleman's correction. Thank you so much for your attention to my quibble! Twozenhauer (talk) 01:10, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
- @Twozenhauer: Good catch. Found a contemporary newspaper article that indeed confirms that part of the reason for amusement in the gallery was apparently the fact that the quote was Nathan Hale's, not Allen's. SecretName101 (talk) 22:20, 31 August 2021 (UTC)
GA Review
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Reviewer: Viriditas (talk · contribs) 01:18, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
Lead
[edit]- Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Lead section - Please review MOS:INTRO; Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Biography - Please review MOS:FIRSTBIO. Read those two articles, paying attention to the house style of lead sections on Wikipedia. Now, do this: open a new sandbox page, and from your own memory and understanding of this topic, write a new lead section from scratch, without looking at the current article. Once you are satisfied at your new attempt, go look at the current article and make any necessary corrections to the new lead you’ve composed. Then, copy it over. I’ve used this technique myself, and it really works. Try it. It’s a great way to do a rewrite because it forces you to focus intently on only what is important.
McAndrew was, at the peak of his career, one of the best-known educators in the United States
It helps if you say that after explaining what made him notable.
Before becoming Chicago school superintendent, he worked as superintendent of schools in St. Clair, Michigan; principal of Hyde Park High School in Chicago, Pratt Institute High School in New York City, and Washington Irving High School in New York City; and assistant superintendent of schools for New York City.
This is a waste of the lead section. On the one hand, you can simply say he worked in Michigan, Illinois, and New York, and highlight any notable accomplishments or milestones. You really want to reserve as much space in the lead for summarizing the main points, not for lists of places where the subject worked early in his career. You can accomplish both goals with less words, and keep the interest of the reader. If I see a list like that in the lead, I stop reading. Instead of adding these kinds of lists to the lead, ask what is important about his early career, and then answer that question.
While he garnered national reverence in some circles, he also became an enemy of local teachers unions.
In the lead, where we summarize the article, it helps to briefly explain why he garnered reverence as well as why he was an enemy of the unions. It can even be done in the same sentence.
- The third paragraph of the lead has an astounding 214 words about Thompson’s allegations, the subsequent fallout to McAndrew’s career, and the trial that vindicated him. I suggest that this can be edited down to half its size and have an even greater impact. Remember, it’s not how much you say, it’s what you say. Great Wikipedia articles say a lot, with few words.
- Copyedits. Please review. Viriditas (talk) 09:37, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
Early life, family, and education
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McAndrew was born August 20, 1863 in Ypsilanti, Michigan.
- MOS:OVERLINK: you do not need to link to Scottish, immigrants, United States, furniture, obstetrician, or liberalism. You should, however, link to Scottish immigrant to the United States.
- WP:PARAGRAPH: "Paragraphs should be short enough to be readable, but long enough to develop an idea. Overly long paragraphs should be split up, as long as the cousin paragraphs keep the idea in focus. One-sentence paragraphs are unusually emphatic, and should be used sparingly." For example, early life should be two large paragraphs instead of four. This is Wikipedia house style:
- McAndrew graduated from the local Ypsilanti elementary school and from Ypsilanti High School. He first studied at Michigan State Normal School (now known as Eastern Michigan University), before entering the University of Michigan, from which he graduated in 1886 with a Bachelor of Arts from the literary department. At the University of Michigan, he was a member of Phi Beta Kappa. He would later return to Michigan State Normal School to receive his Master of Education in 1916.
- Copyedits. Please review. Viriditas (talk) 01:43, 15 January 2022 (UTC)
Early career
[edit]In 1892, McAndrew found a job in Brooklyn, New York as the principal of Pratt Institute High School (Public School 44), holding this job until 1902.
Merge one sentence paragraphs into larger paragraphs.
- Avoid unnecessary repetition:
He became the school principal…He was fired in June….He had been ordered to certify…
Use noun and pronoun variation to avoid putting the reader to sleep. "McAndrew became the school principal…He was fired in June…McAndrew had been ordered to certify…"
- Last paragraph is 288 words! Please split it up into at least two paragraphs for readability.
Superintendent of Chicago Public Schools
[edit]- Copyedits. Please review. Viriditas (talk) 01:42, 15 January 2022 (UTC)
- Appointment
- This paragraph contains 285 words! Please use paragraphs for the reader. Between 2-4 is fine.
- Early actions
- WP:PARAGRAPH: “One-sentence paragraphs are unusually emphatic, and should be used sparingly." Combine these into larger paragraphs.
- Other actions
- WP:PARAGRAPH: “One-sentence paragraphs are unusually emphatic, and should be used sparingly." Combine these into larger paragraphs.
Article length
[edit]- You’ve got three articles here: a primary article about the biography of William McAndrew; a secondary article about the mayoralty or campaign of William Hale Thompson; and a tertiary article about the trial of William McAndrew. Per article length and WP:SIZESPLIT, move the sections to new or existing articles and replace them with summaries here per Wikipedia:Summary style.
- Subsequent split of the trial content by the nominator was successful. Cleanup and copy edits per the suggestions on this page are still needed.
References
[edit]- No copyvio detected using Earwig’s copyvio detector
- No dead links detected with InternetArchiveBot
- No original research nor violations of NPOV were detected, however multiple references should be consolidated whenever possible, and statements should be easily verified in at least one source. The use of multiple citations for simple statements can sometimes indicate a possible NOR and NPOV issue, so they should be avoided or used infrequently. Multiple citations can be useful for supplementary footnotes, however, such as pointing readers to further information.
Discussion
[edit]@Viriditas: Did I do a serviceable job spinning-off content? SecretName101 (talk) 07:31, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
- I will take a look in about eight hours or so. I think you did a good job, but on the other hand, I also think the summary style section can be reduced to four or five large paragraphs, without sections. It’s okay if you think differently, as I’m coming at this from the POV of readability rather than content. We don’t have to agree, but maybe we can meet somewhere in the middle. Viriditas (talk) 07:59, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
@Viriditas: made further copyedit changes, per your encouragement on my talk page. SecretName101 (talk) 00:34, 13 January 2022 (UTC)
- @SecretName101: Thank you. Please continue to eliminate one-sentence paragraphs per my concerns up above and merge small paragraphs into larger ones. Conversely, break up the larger paragraphs into smaller ones. Viriditas (talk) 01:00, 13 January 2022 (UTC)
- @SecretName101: Please rewrite the lead section, paying attention to what I wrote up above and on your talk page. Viriditas (talk) 01:45, 15 January 2022 (UTC)
- @SecretName101: The article mentions that "McAndrew supported a bill introduced to the Illinois State Legislature by Walter R. Miller (an Illinois state representative and teacher at Lindblom High School)". I can find no record of anyone by that name. Please check the source again and see if "Walter R. Miller" is a typo. Viriditas (talk) 02:41, 17 January 2022 (UTC)
- Found it in The Chicago Daily News Almanac and Year Book for 1925. Viriditas (talk) 00:19, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
- @SecretName101: The article mentions that "McAndrew supported a bill introduced to the Illinois State Legislature by Walter R. Miller (an Illinois state representative and teacher at Lindblom High School)". I can find no record of anyone by that name. Please check the source again and see if "Walter R. Miller" is a typo. Viriditas (talk) 02:41, 17 January 2022 (UTC)
- @SecretName101: Citation 30 (Good Politics Is Good Go olitics Is Good Government": The T ernment": The Troubling Hist oubling History of Mayoral Contr al Control of the Public Schools in T ol of the Public Schools in Twentieth-centur wentieth-century Chicago". American Journal of Education) needs to be fixed. Viriditas (talk) 00:08, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
- @SecretName101: Consider creating a new "Legacy" section to summarize his achievements and posthumous notability and significance. Also consider trimming the last paragraph of the lead and ending it with a sentence or two about his legacy. Right now, you’ve got content about his legacy in the second paragraph of the lead, but it would have more impact at the end, although this can work both ways. In the "other actions" subsection, you’ve got a list of trivia which should either be incorporated elsewhere or removed. One of these items would work well in a new legacy section: "During his tenure, McAndrew expanded vocational training programs in the city." Viriditas (talk) 22:58, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
- I included the USS Constitution factoid because (as the article dedicated to the trial states) it was later a notable line of attack against McAndrew during his trial. It might look like a trivia fact otherwise, but it gains signicance due to its later use as an attack. SecretName101 (talk) 23:02, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
- @SecretName101: Consider creating a new "Legacy" section to summarize his achievements and posthumous notability and significance. Also consider trimming the last paragraph of the lead and ending it with a sentence or two about his legacy. Right now, you’ve got content about his legacy in the second paragraph of the lead, but it would have more impact at the end, although this can work both ways. In the "other actions" subsection, you’ve got a list of trivia which should either be incorporated elsewhere or removed. One of these items would work well in a new legacy section: "During his tenure, McAndrew expanded vocational training programs in the city." Viriditas (talk) 22:58, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
- @SecretName101: It’s really important to get the historical framing right. Even though the sensationalist press at the time pretended that McAndrew was undergoing a trial, there was, in fact, no such trial, only a public hearing. See Moreau 2010, p. 75 as to how and why this is the case. This is why you need to be very careful using primary and secondary sources from the time of an event, and why it’s also important to rely on sources like Moreau to set the record straight. Viriditas (talk) 23:33, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
- @Viriditas: All other book sources I have used refer the it as a "trial" as well. That is where I base the use of the wording "trial". SecretName101 (talk) 23:45, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
- @Viriditas: Moreau seems to object to the use of the term "trial" because it did not take place in the formal court system. However, per Wikipedia itself, a trial does not need to take place in a formal court. Per wiki, a trial is a "a coming together of parties to a dispute, to present information (in the form of evidence) in a tribunal, a formal setting with the authority to adjudicate claims or disputes". For instance, the Impeachment trial of Andrew Johnson did not take place in the court system itself, but rather the United States Senate. SecretName101 (talk) 23:53, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
- Rolled back last three changes related to this. The use of trial appears wholly appropriate.SecretName101 (talk) 00:00, 19 January 2022 (UTC)
- That’s a NPOV issue. The use of the word “trial” was deliberately used sensationally by the sources of the time when it was a public hearing. Wikipedia frames articles and its subjects in terms of precision and accuracy, not sensationalism or bias. Historian Joseph Moreau notes that the use of the word “trial” in this context is a misnomer and historically inaccurate. His explanation is also supported by historian Douglas Bukowski (The Mayors, 2013, p. 78) who calls it a civil service proceeding which was deliberately manufactured as a showcase trial by Thompson and the sensationalist media. Wikipedia does not write from that context or frame. Educator Gerald Leinwand (Mackerels in the Moonlight, 2004, p. 55-56) refers to the proceedings in the context of a media circus and a show trial. Author Walter Lippmann also corrects the record (American Inquisitors, 1928): “…the trial, or more accurately, the hearing…” Historian Jonathan Zimmerman also corrects the historical record (Whose America? Culture Wars in the Public Schools, 2005, pp. 17-18) and accurately describes the subtopic:
- Rolled back last three changes related to this. The use of trial appears wholly appropriate.SecretName101 (talk) 00:00, 19 January 2022 (UTC)
- @Viriditas: Moreau seems to object to the use of the term "trial" because it did not take place in the formal court system. However, per Wikipedia itself, a trial does not need to take place in a formal court. Per wiki, a trial is a "a coming together of parties to a dispute, to present information (in the form of evidence) in a tribunal, a formal setting with the authority to adjudicate claims or disputes". For instance, the Impeachment trial of Andrew Johnson did not take place in the court system itself, but rather the United States Senate. SecretName101 (talk) 23:53, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
- @Viriditas: All other book sources I have used refer the it as a "trial" as well. That is where I base the use of the wording "trial". SecretName101 (talk) 23:45, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
- @SecretName101: It’s really important to get the historical framing right. Even though the sensationalist press at the time pretended that McAndrew was undergoing a trial, there was, in fact, no such trial, only a public hearing. See Moreau 2010, p. 75 as to how and why this is the case. This is why you need to be very careful using primary and secondary sources from the time of an event, and why it’s also important to rely on sources like Moreau to set the record straight. Viriditas (talk) 23:33, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
"By 1923, at least twenty-one legislatures were considering measures to regulate the content of "new" history textbooks. Countless school districts and municipalities also moved to bar the offending books, culminating in a lengthy "textbook trial" convened by Chicago Mayor’s William "Big Bill" Thompson in 1927—actually a dismissal hearing for superintendent William McAndrew, whom Thompson had accused of imposing "treasonous" and "un-American" texts on the schools."
- It was a dismissal hearing, not “a formal examination of evidence before a judge, and typically before a jury, in order to decide guilt in a case of criminal or civil proceedings”. To quote Moreau again:
"Trial" was something of a misnomer. McAndrew sat before the city’s school board, not a judge and jury in a civil or criminal court. The superintendent faced neither imprisonment not fines, only dismissal and loss of pay. In essence, the affair amounted to an extended public hearing on several of the countries most popular textbooks and their authors, and secondarily, on McAndrew’s job performance. But participants as well as newspapers, opted to label the affair a "trial". The term lent drama to the story, and it also recalled the recently concluded trial of John Scopes, another educator accused of introducing subversive ideas to students.
- This is why it is so important to rely on secondary sources removed from the event. For accuracy and precision, Wikipedia should place the topic in the appropriate historical context, which was a public hearing or proceeding. We would never frame a topic in a non-neutral manner. The use of “trial” in this context was meant to bias the public against McAndrew, even though there was never an actual trial to begin with. I think it is important for you to understand why historians put the word trial in quotes here. That’s a good indication we shouldn’t use it. The most neutral and unbiased term is “dismissal hearing” or proceeding. We know it wasn’t a real trial in any sense of the primary definition. Viriditas (talk) 01:52, 19 January 2022 (UTC)
- But I did rely on secondary sources. Plenty of books providing a retrospective look, as well as reputable articles providing a retrospective look, use the term "Trial". Particularly this WBEZ article, which was one of my starting points in writing. In fact, my use of contemporary sources on the trial/hearing section largely came much later in the writing proccess. I started out with secondary non-contemporary sources. Furthermore, [the documents of this 1931 court case referencing the McAndrew hearings uses the term "trial" for it https://www.courtlistener.com/opinion/3416777/the-people-v-gorman/] However, per your objections I have retermed it an "administrative hearing". SecretName101 (talk) 02:08, 19 January 2022 (UTC)
- Thank you. Another issue for you to consider is that while this wasn’t a legal case like Tennessee v. Scopes (1925), popularly known as the Scopes Trial, to which it was compared to in somewhat an absurd fashion, it was preceded by an unusual zeitgeist of anti-British sentiment which Big Bill latched on to as an opportunist. In other words, the manufactured controversy against McAndrew was part of a much larger tide in US history that had very little to do with McAndrew himself; he was just in the wrong place at the wrong time and subject to the machinations of Big Bill. The larger phenomenon of the campaign against textbooks began in 1920, possibly with Edward F. Sweeney, and notably occurred among many states before coming to Illinois, bringing Anglophobia to a head in New York before it reached Chicago, as I’m sure you are aware by now. The hearings of McAndrew were only one small part of this phenomenon, and the reader needs the larger context of this textbook controversy that took place around the country before McAndrew was even implicated to make sense of it. See for example Moser 1998, pp. 63-64 (Twisting the Lion's Tail). To conclude, this period of Anti-English sentiment in the US is poorly covered on Wikipedia. With a cursory search at best, I could only find one article that covers this period of history, United Kingdom–United States relations. The relevant content that precedes and leads up the McAndrew affair appears at the end of the "World War I" section and is interspersed (non-chronologically) in the "Inter-war years" section of that aforementioned article. Given that this is the actual, larger historical backstory as to why McAndrew was put under the microscope, some small effort should be made to mention it. Viriditas (talk) 10:06, 19 January 2022 (UTC)
- But I did rely on secondary sources. Plenty of books providing a retrospective look, as well as reputable articles providing a retrospective look, use the term "Trial". Particularly this WBEZ article, which was one of my starting points in writing. In fact, my use of contemporary sources on the trial/hearing section largely came much later in the writing proccess. I started out with secondary non-contemporary sources. Furthermore, [the documents of this 1931 court case referencing the McAndrew hearings uses the term "trial" for it https://www.courtlistener.com/opinion/3416777/the-people-v-gorman/] However, per your objections I have retermed it an "administrative hearing". SecretName101 (talk) 02:08, 19 January 2022 (UTC)
- This is why it is so important to rely on secondary sources removed from the event. For accuracy and precision, Wikipedia should place the topic in the appropriate historical context, which was a public hearing or proceeding. We would never frame a topic in a non-neutral manner. The use of “trial” in this context was meant to bias the public against McAndrew, even though there was never an actual trial to begin with. I think it is important for you to understand why historians put the word trial in quotes here. That’s a good indication we shouldn’t use it. The most neutral and unbiased term is “dismissal hearing” or proceeding. We know it wasn’t a real trial in any sense of the primary definition. Viriditas (talk) 01:52, 19 January 2022 (UTC)
- @SecretName101: This is looking good. Aside from copyediting and saying more about his legacy (if you haven’t already added it), I think we are almost done. Consider adding a legacy section and finishing the lead with a final statement or paragraph about his legacy. It’s not required of course, and if you choose not to do it, that’s fine, but it would greatly help the narrative of the biography and give the reader a finality to who McAndrew was and what they should take away from the bio. Right now, you’re ending the lead with the admin hearing, and that doesn’t wrap up the bio in an encyclopedic manner. How is he remembered by historians? What changes did he make or implement that have lasting effects that are still felt today, in either the classroom or in pedagogy? That’s the kind of thing you should end the lead with, and it’s why a legacy section is needed. My guess is that you already have the content for a legacy section, but these items appear throughout the article in different sections (accomplishments, initiatives, impact on the field of education). If you were to isolate these points, group them together, and then solidify them as a restatement of his influence from the perspective of today looking back, you would have a good legacy section ready to go. Viriditas (talk) 22:46, 20 January 2022 (UTC)
- @SecretName101: article still requires copyedits to meet the reasonably well written criterion. Viriditas (talk) 00:33, 25 January 2022 (UTC)
- @SecretName101: good job adding a legacy section. I think that kind of quote is better off as a paraphrase, but it’s totally up to you how you want to do it. One thing I would highly recommend doing is using this material to address my previous questions about the lead. In the second paragraph, you write "While he garnered national reverence in some circles, he also became an enemy of local teachers unions", but you don’t explain why. The new quote you just added to the legacy section answers part of that question, so if you could say something about this in relation to the material in the lead ("His concept of administration clashed with the philosophy of teacher participation in policy formation… which was administratively embodied in the system of Teachers' Councils, which McAndrew discontinued") that would be helpful to the reader. Viriditas (talk) 00:01, 26 January 2022 (UTC)
- @SecretName101: regarding this content:
Teacher representatives expressed concern as to whether middle schools would or would not offer terminal programs for children who would not attend high school
can you explain or disambiguate the concept of a terminal program? In contemporary parlance, a terminal program has a specific, technical meaning. Viriditas (talk) 00:58, 31 January 2022 (UTC)
- @SecretName101: regarding this content:
Review
[edit]- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Subject did not undergo a “trial” of any kind, but a public hearing that was covered by primary sources of the time in a sensational manner
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- On hold for seven days. Article is too long and has two other articles within it needing splitting and summary style per the above. If you don’t know how to do this or need help, just ask. Viriditas (talk) 00:12, 5 January 2022 (UTC)
- Closing review comments: nominator did a good job adding missing biography elements and splitting out the longer sections and summarizing the larger articles. Nominator also did a good job addressing specific, but minor issues with NPOV and adjusting the section headers as needed. With that said, the article was not ready for GA when it was nominated, and nominator needs to pay closer attention to prose, grammar, and spelling errors. I understand that the nominator wants to focus on FA, but there are a number of minor roadblocks and hurdles that need to be surmounted on the road to that destination. For one, the nominator should focus on constructing a biographical narrative that is consistent with secondary source coverage when possible, and relies on primary sources and dissertations only for direct support for already cited content. In terms of framing the narrative, the nominator should pay special attention to featured biographies and pay close attention to the way citations are used. For example, in most featured articles, you will rarely have more than one citation per sentence or paragraph because the sourcing is tight and easy to check. In this article, the nominator uses multiple sources for statements that likely don’t need it, and it is difficult to check specific content in some instances. If this style is preferred, what many featured writers do instead, is to use a single citation in the body of the reference, but otherwise bundle multiple citations in the reference section. The point is you want the prose to be as free and unencumbered as possible, so as to both enhance readability and ease of fact-checking. For this and other reasons, I would suggest a major rewrite of the entire article, paying attention to constructing a flowing narrative with readable prose and easy to check sources, before attempting the featured article path. Thank you for your effort. Viriditas (talk) 01:51, 17 February 2022 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail:
Requested move 5 February 2022
[edit]- The following is a closed discussion of a requested move. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made in a new section on the talk page. Editors desiring to contest the closing decision should consider a move review after discussing it on the closer's talk page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
The result of the move request was: moved. (closed by non-admin page mover) Colin M (talk) 21:07, 21 February 2022 (UTC)
William McAndrew (educator) → William McAndrew – He is the primary topic and has the most long term significance in a Wikipedia:ONEOTHER situation due to serving as Superintendent of Chicago Public Schools. The page was moved from Draft:William McAndrew (educator) to the mainspace in August 2021 and has gotten more page views since then. Sahaib3005 (talk) 10:35, 5 February 2022 (UTC)
- Support Even when taking out the month of August, where the educator was on the main page and therefore page views were skewed, page views seem to show a Wikipedia:ONEOTHER situation with the editor as primary topic.--Yaksar (let's chat) 21:25, 5 February 2022 (UTC)
- Support as primary topic. Given that the name William or Bill McAndrew is quite common, it’s unusual that we have only two articles. This may have to be revisited in the future. Viriditas (talk) 04:09, 6 February 2022 (UTC)
In search of featured article mentor(s)
[edit]@Dudley Miles: @Coemgenus: @Iridescent: @Montanabw: @David Fuchs: @Harry Mitchell: @Gen. Quon: @Josh Milburn: @Jimfbleak: @Smerus: @Simon Burchell: @Sarastro1: @Imzadi1979: @Peacemaker67: @Ceranthor: @The Rambling Man:
I am looking to elevate this article to a featured article. All of you are listed at Wikipedia:Mentoring for FAC as mentors, and each had listed areas of interest overlapping with this article (for instance history and bios) or had otherwise indicated a willingness to consider helping on articles any topic area.
Even if you cannot fully mentor, if you'd be possibly willing to be the next peer reviewer (after I finish implementing edits suggested by the current user peer reviewing) please let me know. I could ping you once the article is ready to be reviewed by a second peer reviewer.
This article is about an American educator whose greatest notability came from his tenure as superintendent of the Chicago Public Schools system. The most fascinating aspect of his biography is how (during a mayoral campaign) the demagoguing Chicago mayor William Hale Thompson made outlandish accusations against McAndrew, including that he was an agent sent by the King of England to brainwash the youth with anti-American propaganda as part of a nefarious conspiracy for the United Kingdom to repossess the United States. This appears to have been part of the pattern of an anti-British textbook hysteria of the era, as well as a means to pander to and energize anti-British sentiments that imaginably would have been prevalent in the many Irish diaspora voters and German diaspora voters (with this being not too long after both the Irish War of Independence and World War I there were definitely heated tensions). Not too long after Thomspon was elected, he had his school board suspend McAndrew pending the result of an administrative hearing, with the accusations against McAndrew being both insubordination and what amounted to charges of un-patriotism regarding the supposed British propaganda conspiracy. The administrative hearing (detailed at administrative hearing of William McAndrew) saw further outlandish allegations about this supposed conspiracy. The administrative hearing took place over many months, McAndrew's superintendency expired before they delivered their guilty verdict). The hearing result was later voided by a court. The hearing was widely-publicized and seen as a curiosity akin to the contemporary Scopes Monkey Trial.
There are some other interesting aspects of his bio, but none as bizarre and eye-catching as that chapter.
This article is currently undergoing a peer review. I am currently implementing changes helpfully suggested by a user in that peer review among other improvements my eye catches along the way. This hopefully will be wrapped up in the coming days if my personal life does not get more demanding than anticipated in that time.
This article previously obtained "good article status", and I have made a good number of improvements since in order to better present the information contained within it.
I am new to navigating featured article process, so mentor or mentors would be greatly appreciated.
I was previously the co-primary contributor to the featured article 1927 Chicago mayoral election. However, the application and other aspects of formally making it a featured article were handled by the other primary contributor (who also handled a lot of the needed minutiae-related edits, such as improving the formatting style of citations so that book sources cited specific pages). Therefore, I did not learn many of the ins-and-outs unique to the featured article process through that endeavor. I am however familiar with the "good article" assessment process through this article and a number of others.
This article has a number of related and semi-related articles. The most heavily-related article is Administrative hearing of William McAndrew, which was spun-off of this article. Other articles that have areas of relation to the subject include the aforementioned 1927 Chicago mayoral election as well as William Hale Thompson 1927 mayoral campaign. Mentioning this just in case you find it helpful to know that.
Again, the help of a featured article mentor would be greatly appreciated! Thank you for whatever help you can offer. SecretName101 (talk) 03:24, 28 August 2022 (UTC)
- @SecretName101: I have done some copyediting, and strongly suggest that you take this to the Guild of Copyediting for a refactor before taking this to FAC; among other things for future reference be a bit more cautious about linking common terms unless directly relevant, and don't forget geocommas and datecommas. That said, I have these other questions, although I don't intend for this to become a formal peer review in place of other comments.
- How did McAndrew first come to New York? His move from St. Paul to New York is never explained. It's fine if you don't know.
[Irving] was regarded as a leading institution among all-girls schools in the United States.
Irving is not explained to be an all-girls school in its introduction.However, McAndrew declined the position.
Any reason why?- Be wary of duplicate links in an article.
making him, perhaps, the highest-paid educators in the United States at the time
. "One of" the highest-paid, or "the" highest-paid?- I notice some book sources are not fully in short form; this should be rectified for consistency
- This is not exhaustive, but should help. This is a good article, but not quite up to FA standards at this point. On my end, I have an FAC of my own right now for the "L"'s Lake Street Transfer station that I think you would like and that would need more participation. Thanks! – John M Wolfson (talk • contribs) 23:33, 3 November 2022 (UTC)
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