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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 05:59, 25 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]


Peacemaker67, thank you so much for reviewing this article. Very impressive—you work very fast and the article was so long. I'm sorry you found so many things. I have some family visiting right now, but still hope to work on this over the next few days. TwoScars (talk) 21:38, 26 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

This article is in pretty good shape. Despite my pretty limited knowledge of the ACW, I have a few comments/queries:

  • the lead needs a bit of work:
    • link Union (American Civil War) and captain (armed forces), and consider linking regiment, brigade and division
    • to be fair, he didn't capture a 500-man camp, he attacked such a camp, scattered it and captured 124. Something along those lines. And the lack of friendly casualties isn't explicitly in the body of the article. I assume some Confederates were killed and/or wounded, although that also isn't in the body?
      • Reworded using "Powell was awarded his country's highest award for bravery during combat, the Medal of Honor, for heroism at Sinking Creek, Virginia, when, as leader of a group of 22 men, he captured an enemy camp and took over 100 prisoners. This was accomplished without the loss of any of his men on November 26, 1862. He was honored with the award on July 22, 1890." In the main body, which now mentions casualties, I have added a note that explains the Medal of Honor and why some were awarded much later after the war. The note also has Powell's citation linked. TwoScars (talk) 23:07, 26 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
    • a short sentence fragment to explain what he did before the war might be in order
    • the bit about surgeons on both sides isn't supported by the body
      • That was in Walker's book. Added that to the note after "...and Powell believed to be mortally wounded."
    • I like the quote, works well. If you want to use the whole quote in the lead, I suggest using the whole quote in the body and dropping the fn from the lead
      • I want to make sure I have this right. I can drop the footnote in the lead (footnote 1), and repeat the whole quote in the body (under Division Commander)—do I have that right? TwoScars (talk) 17:49, 27 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
        • Per MOS:LEADCITE, the verification policy requires you to footnote something in the lead if it might realistically be challenged. But, as everything in the lead should be reflected in the body, and you've now cited the quote in the body, it is a bit redundant. Others may disagree of course. IMO footnoting in the lead is more of a pre-emptive action to forestall arguments, as many people just read the lead. Alternatively you could summarise the quote and the other praise he received rather than use the quote verbatim in the lead. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:50, 28 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

more to come. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 07:20, 25 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Otherwise, that's me done, placing on hold for a bit for these to be addressed. Really interesting article, I think you've captured him well. Has been a nice distraction from the usual Christmas drama in the RW. Don't bust a gut responding, it's Christmas! As a Milhist member, you might like to consider submitting this and other articles you work on for the monthly article writing contest. It is great to see new names submitting entries, and you'll get more interest from reviewers if your user name is better known to others. Merry Christmas! Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:42, 25 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]