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poorly organized

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Even as a start this is poorly organized. The personal biographical information should be in one paragraph together, not spread over two. Likewise the information about Crowley and the Pompe treatment should be in the same paragraph. The way this is written is how I would write a first draft, which I would not publish as drafted but reorganize so as not to create mental whiplash. 100.15.117.34 (talk) 18:59, 1 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]