Talk:Wicked Lester/GA2

GA Review

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Canniba loki 22:10, 15 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Checklist

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:
The article needs a copy-edit to improve its flow and readability.
Will re-visit with fresh eyes tomorrow.

I think it reads well now.
B. MoS compliance:
In the members section there is an excess of bold text.
That section has been removed
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
The article is largely sourced by three books, all offline and lacking the pages numbers. In the two sources that are online I did not find original research.
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:
Searching on the Allmusic's website, I found content that can be used to expand and add details to the article text.
I added the bit about them fearing CBS would release the pictures without make-up, was this what you were referring to? I couldn't find anything else that I thought should be added.
B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
On hold for a week.--Canniba loki 01:29, 16 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
I think it's good to go, let me know what you think and thanks for the assessment. J04n(talk page) 02:29, 22 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Passed.--Canniba loki 14:03, 22 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"The group took the name Rainbow shortly thereafter. [...] After the show, the group discovered that there was already another band called Rainbow. They decided to drop the name, and quickly settled on Wicked Lester." Why the group chose Rainbow and later Wicked Lester?

No indication in the books of where 'Rainbow' came from, added the bit about the origin of 'Wicked Lester' as a name.

"The second, during the summer of 1971, was at an Atlantic City, New Jersey hotel hosting a B'nai B'rith Youth Organization event. [...] They made the decision to start a new version of the group, and began auditioning for a drummer in the fall of 1972." According to WP:SEASON, "during the summer of 1971", "in the fall of 1972" and "Throughout the summer and fall of 1972" should be rewritten.

done

"The first new member they added was drummer Peter Criss, who had placed an ad in Rolling Stone. The ad stated, "EXPD. ROCK & roll drummer looking for orig. grp. doing soft & hard music. Peter, Brooklyn." [...] In early December, Paul Stanley placed an ad in The Village Voice stating, "LEAD GUITARIST WANTED with Flash and Ability. Album Out Shortly. No time wasters please," rather than the historically incorrect "with Flash and Balls." The ad ran for two issues, December 7, 1972 and December 14, 1972, and the band had to run several sessions of auditions." According to WP:QUOTE, the quotations above should be worked into text to flow and organization of the article.

not sure that I agree here, those brief ads are so much a part of the history of WL and Kiss that I believe they should be included ver batem.

Please rename the subsections "Rainbow" and "Wicked Lester".

I'm not disagreeing here but can't think of what to change them to. Any suggestions? I may come up with something when I have fresh eyes tomorrow.

I removed the subheadings, I don't see them as useful.

You should add subsections to the section "history". Keep in mind that "Headings of sections (including subsections) should be unique on a page."--Canniba loki 03:07, 22 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I put in subheadings, what do you think? J04n(talk page) 12:38, 22 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Looks like vandalism, but I will accept. --Canniba loki 14:02, 22 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Can you convert the bulleted list in "the unreleased album" section to text?

done

"The only part of Wicked Lester's album to actually be released, initially, was the cover art, which was used for The Laughing Dogs' debut album in 1979." What is the album title?

self-titled, included

The sections "former members" and "lineups" are really necessary?

agree that they aren't, they're gone

I think the section of related bands is irrelevant, remove please.

agree, gone

Additional information should be merged into the Wicked Lester section.

agree, done

You forgot to add the pages of books.

done