Talk:White flags over Port Stanley/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 20:53, 4 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! I'll be taking a look at this article for the January 2022 GAN backlog drive. If you haven't already signed up, please feel free to join in! Although QPQ is not required, if you're feeling generous, I also have a list of GA nominations of my own right here.

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Lede

Per MOS:TIME, colons should be used to separate hour and minute, not periods

Done

First instance of "the Falklands" should be written out "the Falkland Islands" and also linked

Done

"1.30 am on 15 June, BST" → "1:30 am BST on 15 June."

Done

Link Downing Street

Done

Background

"was installed" needs more elaboration

Added "to administer the territory", if that is OK?

"towards the capital of Port Stanley"

Reads OK to me. To me writing "capital of Port Stanley" makes it sounds like Port Stanley is some sort of province with its own capital. I've added a comma to make it: "towards the capital, Port Stanley", does that read better?

follow them up don't end sentences with prepositions

Changed to "and began an advance towards the town"

White flags

Commas instead of parentheses around "who were part of the advance"

Done

The Falkland Islanders resident Though technically correct, confusing syntax makes it sound as if only one person lived in Port Stanley

Changed to "The Falkland Islanders present in Port Stanley"

Comma after "over the radio"

Done

Thatcher's statement

"she met with her war cabinet, though it was a tense meeting with members waiting" → "she held a tense meeting with her war cabinet, whose members were waiting"

Thanks, that's much better. Changed

See above about colons rather than periods in clock times

Done

Comma after "including the origin of the war"

Done

No comma needed after "from the Officials' Box"

Done

where they drank to her health trivia and a little flattering towards Thatcher

OK, removed this sentence entirely

be proceeded with preposition at the end of a sentence

Changed to "be allowed to proceed"

Per MOS:LQ, if "Great Britain is great again" is a full sentence by Thatcher, it should have the period inside the quote

I don't like it, but happy to conform with the MOS! Done

Subsequent events

See above about MOS:TIME

Done

Thule Island and South Sandiwch Islands should be linked

Done, also realised I had made an error here. Should've been "Thule in the South Sandwich Islands", now fixed

References

Good

General comments

Images are properly licensed and relevant
No stability concerns in the revision history
Earwig score looks good, top result is artificially inflated due to the pullquote

Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions, and let me know when you're finished. — Ghost River 21:57, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your thorough review GhostRiver. I think I have addressed all your comments - Dumelow (talk) 09:17, 9 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Everything looks good now, happy to pass! And yeah, my personal MOS beef is with MOS:'S and the requirement that singular noun possessives always have an 's even when the name ends in an "s". — Ghost River 16:54, 9 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks GhostRiver. Yes, I also hate Louis's, Achilles's etc! - Dumelow (talk) 18:02, 9 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]