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GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 05:58, 24 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

As a huge fan of the show, I would love to review this. I am glad to see people working on articles related to the show. Aoba47 (talk) 05:58, 24 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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  • Add that the episode debuted on Cartoon Network
    Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 15:21, 24 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • For the last sentence of the first paragraph, I would add the roles that Isaak and Jones played in the episode. Something like: “The episode debuted on March 5, 2015 and guest stars Chris Isaak as King Huge and Matt L. Jones as a bear named Seven.” I suggest this just to clarity that the men are not playing themselves on the show. With these changes, you can removed the (voiced by…) in the second paragraph.
    Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 15:21, 24 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Give some sort of indication on the reasons behind the mixed reviews. Since it is the lead, you do not need to go into great detail, but provide some indication to the reader.
    How does that look?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 15:21, 24 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
    I corrected a minor error with a comma, but otherwise looks great. Thank you for making the correction. Aoba47 (talk) 19:40, 24 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Add a comma between the words “episode” and “Herpich”
    Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 15:21, 24 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Change “an Outstanding Individual Achievement in Animation Emmy Award” to “a [[Primetime Emmy Award” for Outstanding Individual Achievement in Animation”.

a [[Primetime Emmy Award” for Outstanding Individual Achievement in Animation

  • Change the final sentence to the following to fix problems with sentence structure and flow: (For his work on the episode, Herpich won a [[Primetime Emmy Award” for Outstanding Individual Achievement in Animation; this was the series’ third win in the category.)

Plot

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Production

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Reception

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References

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Final comments

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