Talk:Vergil (Devil May Cry)/GA1
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 05:43, 7 September 2018 (UTC)
- Picking this up for a review now that I have some more time, and I would be interested in reading more about this character. Aoba47 (talk) 05:43, 7 September 2018 (UTC)
- Lead and infobox
- I would be a little more specific in the ALT text for the infobox image, as you could technically apply to any image of any character from the video game series.
- Done.
- I have a suggestion for this sentence (Vergil was originally conceptualized as Nelo Angelo—Dante's rival in terms of moves and appearance—in the 2001 game.). I think “portrayed” is a better word choice than “conceptualized”.
- Done.
- Creation and concept
- I would be more descriptive in the ALT text, as it could apply to any image of a video game character.
- Done.
- I would combine these two sentences (Nelo Angelo was created as a rival for Dante; he was designed by Makoto Tsuchibayashi) to the following (Makoto Tsuchibayashi designed Nelo Angelo as a rival for Dante).
- Done.
- For these two sentences (Ikeno stated that because Vergil and Dante are identical twins, they share a hairstyle in the opening of the game, which was intended to make new players confuse them. Vergil's clothing was intended to contrast with his brother's; similarly, Nelo Angelo's design was prominently blue while Dante's was red.), I would avoid using “intended” twice in close proximity.
- Done
- For this sentence (Unlike other enemy demons from Devil May Cry, Nelo Angelo did not have original frameworks;), do you know if there is a way to wikilink “frameworks” to help an unfamilar reader?
- Tried adding an easier concept.
- Voice actors
- I would avoid having a two sentence paragraph if possible.
- Done.
- Characteristics
- Everything looks good here.
- Appearances
- Unlink the games that were wikilinked in the previous section. I have noticed several instances of this.
- Done.
- Reception
- Unlink Project X Zone 2.
- Done.
- Final comments
- Wonderful work with the article. I could not find that many issues with it (at least for the level of a GA). Once my comments are addressed, I will be more than happy to pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 23:15, 7 September 2018 (UTC)
- @Aoba47: Thanks for the review. I tried fixing all the issues you pointed. Also, I gotta thank Flowerpiep for helping me with a minor copyedit.Tintor2 (talk) 23:32, 7 September 2018 (UTC)
- Thank you for addressing everything. I will ✓ Pass this. If you have the time, I would greatly appreciate either an image or source review for my current FAC. Aoba47 (talk) 00:13, 8 September 2018 (UTC)
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