Talk:Vanilla Chocolat/GA3
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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 01:02, 4 March 2016 (UTC)
Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.
Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 01:02, 4 March 2016 (UTC)
Infobox
[edit]What do you mean by "being vanilla-coloured" in the alt box? Could this possibly be reworded?- Remove the flat list from the genre; there's only one genre listed
Remove the flat list form the producer; there's only one producer listed
Lead
[edit]Remove the space before the link to Romanian- Change 'sophomore' to 'second'
- Remove the reference as you do not need one in the lead
- Remove 'herself' from the listing of writers involved with the track
- Remove 'alone' from the listing of writers involved with the track
- Remove the mention of 5 million views for the music video
- Remove the video comparison to "Selfie en Paris"
- Change 'Everything Express' into 'Musical critics'
- Change 'Hitfire' to 'others'
- Again, remove the reference
Overall, I feel this lead could be significantly reworded
Background and recording
[edit]Remove the second 's' in '26-seconds' in the description of the included audio- Again, remove 'herself' and 'alone' from the first sentence
- Remove 'the' immediately before 'Fonogram Studios'
- The reftitle is a bit too long for the source after "like on [her] second studio album."
I think 'commended' sounds like a weird word choice since she's describing her own song
Critical response
[edit]I think this section should be renamed 'Critical reception'- Include a topic sentence, stating that the song received generally positive reviews upon release
- You list two completely different sources for the same quote, so this needs to be fixed and/or removed
- You keep using 'they', but not clarifying who 'they' is
- The '[...]' in the quotes needs to be formatted correctly to Wikipedia standards
Possible expansion of this section would be appreciated as well
Live performances
[edit]This should be moved below 'Music video'- Combine the first two sentences
- Combine the sentences discussing her performances on Pro FM radio
- Italicize 'The Voice'
Again, Italicize 'The Voice' or replace with 'the program'
Music video
[edit]Add a space before 'A selfie video...'- Link 'selfie' in the lead sentence
- Combine the sentences discussing some of the television shows she filmed the video on
- The reftitle could be shortened perhaps in the source involving plagiarism accusations
The last sentence doesn't seem too necessary; if you want to keep it, I'd suggest adding more video reviews/reception towards the video
Credits and personnel
[edit]Looks good!
Track listings
[edit]The Spanish/Turkish/Polish download box needs to have proper spaces used
References
[edit]Primarily, a template needs to be added to the article since one is available- [11] - Unlink YouTube
- [12] - Unlink YouTube
- [16] - Unlink YouTube
[21] - Link iTunes store
End of GA Review:
[edit]Good article, but it definitely needs to be put on hold for now. There are mistakes that need to be visited before GA consideration. Gimme a holler when any updating has taken place. Carbrera (talk) 01:07, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
- Carbrera, I've adressed everything above besides the expansion of some of the article's topics, as I couldn't find any other reliable source out there. Thanks!
Cartoon network freak (talk) 13:49, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
- I think this article is probably one of the better ones out there when it comes to Alexandra Stan-related topics. Thanks for your contributions to the article and your cooperation. Carbrera (talk) 15:32, 6 March 2016 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.