Talk:USS Onondaga (1863)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 23:52, 16 August 2020 (UTC)

An ACW article. This one's up my forte. Hog Farm _Bacon 23:52, 16 August 2020 (UTC)

• "The nine-caliber Dahlgren gun weighed 42,900 pounds (19,500 kg)" - Should gun be plural here, as there were two Dahlgren pieces on the ship?
• "Construction was delayed by shortages of material, labor and the closing of the shipyard during the New York City draft riots in July 1863. The ship cost $759,673.08, a budget overrun of over 21 percent" - If I did my math right, it would round to 22%, but if the source says 21%, stick with that. I may also have done my math wrong.
• "and arrived at Hampton Roads two days later." - Might be worth specifying that Hampton Roads was in Virginia and was Union-held territory nominally part of the CSA
• I'm not seeing where the commission date (15 June 1869) for the French Navy is cited
• Both of the external links are dead. Archive or remove.
  • It's probably the date of commissioned for trials, but since I can't substantiate it, gone.
• For the general characteristics in the infobox, it's probably worth qualifying them as (as built), since the French refit seems to have changed some things.
  • Good idea.
• I don't know if the sources state these, but one of the interesting things about the Union Navy monitors was that some of them had a very low freeboard. If it's mentioned, it might be worth stating, although I think they got the worst design flaws fixed by 1864. Hog Farm _Bacon 16:24, 17 August 2020 (UTC)
  • Yes and no, read the Casco-class monitor article for the no side. Otherwise pretty much yes. Thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:27, 19 August 2020 (UTC)