Talk:USS Oklahoma (BB-37)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 06:54, 26 February 2018 (UTC)

I will review this one, comments to follow in the next few days. Zawed (talk) 06:54, 26 February 2018 (UTC)

Lead

• No need for the cite (4) in the lead, as cited in article body  Done
• Shouldn't West coast be West Coast?  Done
• 2nd para. The word "ship" is used several times in successive sentences, perhaps vary these.  Done

Infobox

• The ship's nickname and motto aren't mentioned in the text so needs to be cited here. The battle star is cited but I wonder if it is worth a mention in the appropriate section as it is not discussed at all in the article body.  Comment: I added a reference for the nickname but I couldn't find one for the motto
  • Also found nothing on motto, so removed. —Ed!^(talk) 04:04, 12 March 2018 (UTC)

Design

• The range information in the text is inconsistent with the infobox. I see that different speeds are used (10 kn vs 12 kn), this might explain the inconsistency.
  • Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 04:04, 12 March 2018 (UTC)
• From the text, I make the deck armour 4.5 inches as opposed to the 5 inches recited in the infobox.
  • Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 04:04, 12 March 2018 (UTC)

World War I

• A little uncertain on the MOS here, but shouldn't east coast be title case? If so, then this will apply to the next section as well.
  • Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 04:04, 12 March 2018 (UTC)

Interwar period

• It seems as though you don't link countries, so you might want to amend the pipe link for Portland, England.
  • Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 01:27, 13 March 2018 (UTC)
• Link New York City, San Francisco, Norfolk, Hawaii
  • Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 01:27, 13 March 2018 (UTC)

Attack on Pearl Harbor

• "approximately 0756": again, an MOS issue that I may be wrong on but isn't it 07:56? And 08:00 later in this section?
  • Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 01:27, 13 March 2018 (UTC)

References

• There is a little inconsistency in the presentation of print refs: some include the year and some don't.
  • Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 01:27, 13 March 2018 (UTC)
• Shouldn't La Forte be La Forte & Marcello?
  • Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 01:27, 13 March 2018 (UTC)
• Note 56, missing the word "retrieved"
  • Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 01:27, 13 March 2018 (UTC)

Bibliography

• It looks like only one of the online sources is used. And one of the remaining ones is also in the external links section
  • Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 01:27, 13 March 2018 (UTC)
• None of the other sources appear to be used. May be convert to a further reading section?
  • Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 01:27, 13 March 2018 (UTC)

Other stuff

• Tags on the images look appropriate
• No dupe links

That's my initial review done but I have a couple of checks to still make as the dab and external link tools aren't working for at the moment. Regardless, I will check back in a few day. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 08:09, 4 March 2018 (UTC)

@Ed!: just a ping in case you missed this. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 20:08, 10 March 2018 (UTC)

Ahh thank you!! Will get to this in the weekend. —Ed!^(talk) 20:20, 10 March 2018 (UTC)

Ed!: would you mind if I helped in the GA review? Also, I did some of the things that Zawed suggested, but then where do I write that its done? Should I place a {{Done}} template after the suggestion? L293D (☎ • ✎) 20:18, 11 March 2018 (UTC)

@L293D: Sure thing! And yes, just indicate after each comment what's done — so we each know what tasks are left to do. —Ed!^(talk) 21:08, 11 March 2018 (UTC)

• Have done dab/external link checks, these are all good. Zawed (talk) 03:08, 12 March 2018 (UTC)

• @Zawed: I think we've fixed everything! Thank you! —Ed!^(talk) 01:27, 13 March 2018 (UTC)

• Looks good, passing as GA. Zawed (talk) 07:28, 14 March 2018 (UTC)