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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 19:44, 14 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]


I'll have this done by tomorrow JAGUAR  19:44, 14 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:


Initial comments

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  • "She made trips to Europe in 1910 and 1911 and after 1912" - are the trips in 1910 and 1911 separate?
  • The lead is well written and summarises the article
  • "She had a crew of 827 officers and men, though this increased to 881 and later to 896" - when was this? Did she begin service with 827 men?
    • Yes, and this should be clarified now.
  • " On 1 July, Kansas steamed out of Norfolk to carry the remains of the Venezuelan ambassador" - remains? It didn't say what happened
    • DANFS doesn't say who the ambassador was or how he died, and I can't find any further information on him. I added "recently deceased" to the line to make it a bit clearer, though.
  • " to protect a fast HX troopship convoy" - what is HX?
    • It's a convoy designation - we have an article, HX convoys, but unfortunately it only focuses on the WWII use of the designation, so I didn't think it would be useful to link as it would probably confuse readers.
  • "Rear Admiral Charles Frederick Hughes raised his flag aboard Kansas in Philadelphia as the flagship of the 4th BatDiv"- the Kansas was a flagship at one point? This was not mentioned in the lead

References

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On hold

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Just some very minor points to addressed. Once they're out of the way this will be another GA. JAGUAR  15:49, 15 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for addressing them! Everything looks good. JAGUAR  11:53, 16 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
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