Talk:USS California (BB-44)/GA1
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 17:28, 2 March 2019 (UTC)
I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:28, 2 March 2019 (UTC)
- Move the link for main battery to first use in the first paragraph of the design section.
- Done
- Fix the link.
- Ha, I knew that would be a red link and meant to create the redirect afterward, but then I spaced, obviously
- Fix the link.
- Done
- Explain what caliber means.
- The caliber note is there :P
- Ah, carefully hidden in the cites. Perhaps a separate note instead? 'cause I certainly didn't think to look down there.
- Fixed
- Ah, carefully hidden in the cites. Perhaps a separate note instead? 'cause I certainly didn't think to look down there.
- The caliber note is there :P
- Explain further the background to Kiefer's achievement.
- Made it a bit clearer
- the ships also stopped in Pago Pago Why "also"? No other stops listed.
- Good point
- Link Haiti
- Done
- Down to WW2, more later.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:10, 27 March 2019 (UTC)
- I sit with bated breath ;) Parsecboy (talk) 15:39, 29 March 2019 (UTC)
- And how does that worm taste?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:58, 29 March 2019 (UTC)
- Always nice to be reminded of my mental frailty! Parsecboy (talk) 20:28, 29 March 2019 (UTC)
- And how does that worm taste?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:58, 29 March 2019 (UTC)
- I sit with bated breath ;) Parsecboy (talk) 15:39, 29 March 2019 (UTC)
- Standard series? Perhaps spelling out the link would make it less confusing?
- See if what I added works
- When did she get the .50s? Provide a conversion and a link.
- Good question - the Warship Profile on Tennessee says that she got them in c. 1935, but nothing on California - I'd assume at around the same time, but I don't know for certain.
- First lieutenant? Was that an USN term?
- Yeah, it's a billet, not a rank
- Tell the reader what type of aircraft a Zero was.
- Done
- Link drydock
- Done
- Provide conversions for 40 and 20 mm
- Done
- California replenished ammunition "her" ammunition
- Done
- patrolled off the island, shelling Japanese forces on the island delete the reptitious "on the island"
- Done
- fired a terrific barrage? link barrage
- Done
- Temporary repairs were effected I know that we see this phrase a lot, but it's always struck me as sort of passive voice-y. Howzabout "made" instead?
- Works for me
- remained in service for Not sure I'd call being part of the mothball fleet as being in service.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:57, 3 April 2019 (UTC)
- Good catch. Thank Sturm. Parsecboy (talk) 13:18, 8 April 2019 (UTC)