Talk:Twilight's Kingdom/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 12:00, 23 July 2021 (UTC)

• Add a short description and WP:ALT text to the image.

•  Done

• Non-free use rationale looks good.

• Thank you

• However, I would suggest changing the image to one of Tirek, as the article contains commentary of his appearance.

•  Done

• Remove the links to Canada and the United States.

•  Done

• "animated television series My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic" → "animated television series My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic" – (WP:SEAOFBLUE)

•  Done

• "The two-part finale" → "The two-part season finale"

•  Done

• "airing as an back-to-back" → "airing back-to-back"

•  Done (by another user)

• "who praised villain" → "who praised the villain"

•  Done (by another user)

• (from "[[My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic (season 4)#ep66|Princess]] [[My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic (season 4)#ep67|Twilight Sparkle]]") – see WP:EASTEREGG. Suggest changing it to (from "[[My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic (season 4)#ep66|Princess Twilight Sparkle]]") as we can trust a reader's knowledge of scrolling down.

•  Fixed

• Plot section: Part one is 342 words and part two is 397 so this passes MOS:TVPLOT.
• Remove the comma after "the edge of Ponyville".

•  Done

• "and a tail of a horse" → "and tail of a horse"

•  Done

• "since humans did not exist in Friendship Is Magic" → "since humans do not exist in Friendship Is Magic" – see MOS:TENSE

•  Done (by another user)

• "more similarity of a bull" → "more similarity to a bull"

•  Done (by another user)

• "a good flow of one to the next" → "a good flow from one to the next"

•  Done

• Archive sources (you can use this automatic tool).

•  Already done: The tool didn't make any modifications as far as I can see.

• Ping when done. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:56, 23 July 2021 (UTC)

Thank you for your comments, Some Dude From North Carolina. I have hopefully addressed them and if there are any other changes I should make, please feel free to let me know! Pamzeis (talk) 01:29, 24 July 2021 (UTC)