Talk:Tryvandshøiden (station)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Arsenikk ^(talk) 21:41, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

Comments

• I did a small copyedit (nothing really worth mentioning, all typos and the like).
• You overuse "did" sometimes when it is not necessary (twice I simply removed the word to make the flow better).
• You are aware that {{convert}} defaults to British spelling, so sp=uk is not necessary.
• Please avoid contractions, such as "wasn't", instead use "was not" and the like.

I am passing the article, as it is well written, thoroughly referenced and there is little more to say about the topic. Just maybe Galleri Nor has an image laying around (I'll take a look). Arsenikk ^(talk) 21:41, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

Thank you for the review. Perhaps, in summer time, I'll take a picture of the rail trail from Frognerseteren to Tryvannshøyden and one of the signalman's house, which is not demolished(!) --Eisfbnore ^talk 21:47, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

And btw, ought this to be included in the article? As a UH-member, I maybe know the then-acting leader a bit to well to decide . How about the Facebook group? --Eisfbnore ^talk 22:06, 16 January 2011 (UTC)

The article doesn't really add much beyond stating that UH is also in favor of an extension, and the article already mentions high-profile politicians. It does add some argumentation for why the expansion should be done, but again it would be better if high-profile politicians were quoted instead (particularly Myhre, as he was the relevant councilor back a while ago). As for the Facebook group, I can't seem to find it (Tryvann Vinterpark alone has only 2,200), and even Fosli isn't a member of any such group. Arsenikk ^(talk) 23:15, 16 January 2011 (UTC)