Talk:Tropical Storm Dolores (2021)/GA1
GA Review
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Nominator: JayTee32 (talk · contribs) 19:13, 22 February 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Tails Wx (talk · contribs) 16:05, 7 April 2024 (UTC)
Starting review on this tropical cyclone! Pretty interesting fact that this tropical storm was linked to another tropical cyclone in a separate basin! This'll take up to a week. Thanks! :) ~ Tails Wx (🐾, me!) 16:05, 7 April 2024 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
- Is it well written?
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
- Looks mostly great, especially the lead section! A few spots where it could be corrected, though.
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
- C. It contains no original research:
- D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- Is it neutral?
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- Is it stable?
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- No unstability issues as of now!
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- Pass or Fail:
Comments
[edit]Good work on this work, JayTee32! I have a few comments below so far:
Prose
[edit]- In lead: "
At least three people died in Mexico due to the storm
" – "died" to "were killed", no?
- "Died" is more standard use in TC articles; killed indicates a human act. JayTee⛈️ 14:43, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
- That's fair!
- "Died" is more standard use in TC articles; killed indicates a human act. JayTee⛈️ 14:43, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
- Under Meteorological history: "
Simultaneously, a closed surface circulation developed, signaling the development...
" – how about "signaling" to "which signaled"? - In the same section: "
with the mountainous terrain of the area
" – "of" to "in", possibly? - In Preparations and impact: "
198 shelters were opened in 35 municipalities across the state of Jalisco prior to Dolores moving through the area
" – re-write the sentence or write "198" out in words; it shouldn't start with a numeral. - Same thing in the same section: "
35 houses across Guerrero were damaged by landslides resulting from Dolores' precursor
" - "
The worst damage Oaxaca occurred in the Sierra Sur and Costa regions, where debri was strewn across roads and extensive mudslides rendered many streets impassable
" – a bit of spelling and grammar mistakes here; "in" between "damage" and "Oaxaca", isn't it "debris"?
Spotchecks
[edit]Several spotchecks were made; a few comments below!
- Reference 10: I tried – argh, paywalled! I'll assume good faith and assume that it verifies the provided content.
- Reference 15: Dallas News does state that heavy rain occurred in the Oaxaca, Guerrero, and Michoacán – but not on the coasts.
- Reference 16: La Razón de México source does not mention the "precursor" of Dolores caused it, neither the landslides causing the damage to 35 homes!
- Reference 25: Can you remove "origin-" from the url? It's leading me to a non-private connection website and not the proper news website, and when removing that part from the url it leads me to the proper news website. The proper news website also verifies the power outages and the areas impacted, though!
No other concerns! Feel free to ping when you're finished addressing my comments above, or for any questions or comments! :) ~ Tails Wx (🐾, me!) 02:37, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
- @Tails Wx All issues have been addressed. JayTee⛈️ 14:50, 15 April 2024 (UTC)