Talk:Trent Milton/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 23:18, 13 April 2014 (UTC)

I'll take up this review as part of the chain of Paralympians submitted in past few days. I mainly focus on copy editing issues. Given the size of these articles the GAR itself should not take too long so I will leave down some initial comments on these articles within 48 hours. I'm sorry if I'm reviewing too many of your articles, Hawkeye! ☠ Jaguar ☠ 23:18, 13 April 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   It is well referenced.

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Initial comments

Lead

• Could more of the lead (if possible) be expanded a little to summarise more of his life/career?
• Other than that the lead should comply per the GA criteria if expanded a little.

Personal

• I see no problems in this section - the prose is excellent and the citations are in place.

Skiing

• "With the introduction of snowboarding to the Winter Paralympics program, je set the goal of participating at the 2014 Winter Paralympics in Sochi" - I presume this is 'he', so I've corrected this myself. It wouldn't have been worth making an issue over it otherwise!
• "With the assistance of Peter Higgins, the Australian Paralympic snowboard coach" - how about With the assistance of Australian Paralympic snowboard coach Peter Higgins? This is just a suggestion, do you think this sounds better?

On hold

Due to the size of this article there are very little points to make. All references are in good standing and most of the prose also meets the GA criteria. The only problem I found to be honest was the length of the lead - if this could be expanded a bit to mention his life/career then it should meet the GA criteria. When all of those points have been addressed, this article should pass the GAN! ☠ Jaguar ☠ 20:47, 25 April 2014 (UTC)

• I have expanded the lead, and corrected the text as suggested. Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:40, 26 April 2014 (UTC)

Close - promoted

I'll keep these brief. All issues addressed. The article now meets the GA criteria. Well done! ☠ Jaguar ☠ 21:27, 26 April 2014 (UTC)