Talk:Torreón massacre/GA1
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Reviewer: Ceradon (talk · contribs) 02:56, 7 January 2015 (UTC)
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1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. |
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4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. |
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5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. |
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6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. |
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Addressing the issues
[edit]Okay, here goes:
- Immigrants
I think the problem has generally been fixed.
- 17th century
Immigration began in the 17th century, but they didn't arrive in Torreón specifically until the late 1800s. Since it was unclear, I added a line to clarify. [1]
- Probably
Added a line clarifying why this is thought.
- "Chinese gardens"
Thanks, not sure why I included the WP:SCAREQUOTES. Removed
- general→General
Done [2]
- The mob finally reached the bank...
I disagree that this is stating the same thing twice. The first sentence illustrates the violence with which the victims were killed, the second sentence is about the desecration of the bodies once dead.
- "Estimated that the dead"
According to the "snippet views" of unavailable pages from the Romero source, it would appear that the estimate was made during Wilfley & Bassett's investigation. However, I'm not sure if I feel comfortable citing this since I can't view the whole text. Thoughts?
- 308 people
Fixed: [3]
- 2015 or 1911
Fixed, see [4] & [5]. I also added {{inflation}} as you suggested.
- a plan which never played out
- Owang King and Antonio Ramos Pedrueza
- Independence Day
- Bloquotes
I have removed the quotation marks.
- Anchors
Not done, per Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Linking#Broken section links (and WP:ANCHOR, which I presume was the link you intended) anchors are useful if the section title is ever changed, to prevent broken section links. Since a section title has previously been changed in this article, and conceivably could be again in the future, I'm going to leave the anchors.
- Spokane Review
The "12 Spaniards and a German" statement is also verified by the East Oregonian source, while the "several Americans" is not. That's why I chose to include one but not the other.
- Publication information discrepancy
The copyright information from the first page of the book credits it as UCambridge 1986, so I used that.
- Location parameter
I didn't include the location in those citations because it wasn't given as part of the bibliographic information in the book, however, I suppose the location is almost certainly that of the presses, so added.
- Further unrest
The incidents' relationship to the Torreón massacre was considered significant enough to be included by the authors of the references, so I would be inclined to leave it per WP:DUE.
- Hai Chi
I made an attempt to provide the proper credit, per what was available on the original source's information page. However, if this is not sufficient, I could always tag it with {{unknown|author}} instead.
- Captions
I can't find anything in WP:CAPTION that forbids the use of {{center}} to increase the aesthetic value of the captions. However, if there is, I wouldn't object to removing them.
- It would seem that all the issues I alluded too have been addressed. Good work, G S Palmer. --ceradon (talk • contribs) 02:45, 10 January 2015 (UTC)
I hope that addresses all of it, Ceradon. Thanks for the review! G S Palmer (talk • contribs) 20:19, 9 January 2015 (UTC)