Talk:Tina Armstrong/GA1
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Nominator: Kung Fu Man (talk · contribs) 14:40, 30 June 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Pokelego999 (talk · contribs) 22:01, 28 November 2024 (UTC)
Six GA Criteria
[edit]1. Article is well-written. Very minimal mistakes if any at all.
2. No OR, all info is cited in the article.
3. Coverage is broad in depth and focus. Shows multiple aspects of the character.
4. Article appears neutral, and does not appear to hold a significantly negative nor positive stance on the subject.
5. Article appears stable. Does not appear to have had any major vandalism occur.
6. Article uses two fair use images with proper rationale.
Lead
[edit]Looks good
Conception and design
[edit]-"meanwhile were removed between iterations of the game due to Itagaki feeling they did not translate well to the 3D presentation of the title." As someone unfamiliar with the series, is this transition because they went from 2D to 3D, or something else? Specify this if possible.
- Reworded to be clearer.
-"given to the motion capture team as they had limited time" Armstrong being done with motion capture is not mentioned before this and could do with a brief mention earlier on.
- Added an earlier mention with the same reference.
-"many of which intended into fanservice territory such as a catsuit with a tail, or incorporate either cowgirl or American flag aesthetics into her design as the development team felt both suited her." Reword this. I believe there's a typo at the start but I'm not sure what the intention of the sentence is.
- Reworkded these sentences.
Appearances
[edit]-"with the film taking several liberties from the source material" Like what?
- Removed this bit; truth be told, Tina's probably the one person they didn't utterly mangle.
-Is Rotten Tomatoes a reliable source outside of the usage of its critic scores?
- Muckrack shows the author has a wide history in freelance journalism surprisingly enough. It's editorial so I'm assuming it should be fine here given the company's prestige.
Promotion and reception
[edit]-What is the reliability of SuperGamePower and Kakuchopurei?
- SuperGamePower was a major magazine publication with a full editorial team. Kakuchopurei was brought up on WT:VG/S awhile back and actually warmly received to my surprise, in part because they have a television presence as well. I've used both on previous GANs without issue.
-"as one of their charms, "somehow warm and comforting" in how he supports her privately" I'd cut the second half after "charms."
- Reworked this, kept the quote bit more but made the sentence flow better.
-Link the definition of contour you're using since it's not a very common word that can be confusing
- Fixed.
-"encouraging players to "match play style with as well as fetish" I feel the quote here makes it grammatically confusing and could be paraphrased.
- Completely rewrote this to be clearer.
Overall
[edit]@Kung Fu Man: Looking decent so far. Address the above and let me know if you need any more clarification. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 22:01, 28 November 2024 (UTC)
- Should be all done!--Kung Fu Man (talk) 22:56, 28 November 2024 (UTC)
- Alright, onto the Source Spotcheck:
- Sources reviewed: 33, 42, 21, 35, 37, 34, 32, 18, 4, 26, 1.
- 1, 32, 37, and 42 are unviewable, but the rest seem to verify their information, so I believe that I can trust in those sources' reliability. Article looks good. Happy to pass. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 23:10, 28 November 2024 (UTC)