Talk:Tim Barrow/GA1

GA Review

Passed. IntentionallyDense (talk) 02:59, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: LibStar (talk · contribs) 00:22, 19 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: IntentionallyDense (talk · contribs) 03:21, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I will review this shortly. IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:21, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	IntentionallyDense (talk) 21:05, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	IntentionallyDense (talk) 21:05, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
2. Verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:35, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	I checked about half of the sources and found some issues. IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:35, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	2c. it contains no original research.	IntentionallyDense (talk) 21:05, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.	IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:35, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	IntentionallyDense (talk) 21:05, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).	IntentionallyDense (talk) 21:05, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	IntentionallyDense (talk) 21:05, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.	IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:35, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:35, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:35, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
	7. Overall assessment.	I'm going to put this on hold so that the nominator has time to fix the areas I suggested. IntentionallyDense (talk) 21:05, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply] Prose is good, everything is nicely cited, no glaring issues etc. I didn't have to much work with this review but I did spot check some sources and read through the whole article and found very little issues (which have now been resolved). Pass! IntentionallyDense (talk) 02:57, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

What is going on with ref2? IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:35, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I will remove. LibStar (talk) 22:01, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Deputy Foreign Minister Sergei Ryabkov expressed his wish to Barrow that "such dangerous and provocative actions will be strongly suppressed by the British security in the future." I'm not seeing this in ref 10 [1] also the title I'm getting for ref 10 is "Dagestan President Proposes New Amnesty for Militants". IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:35, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Have removed sentence as it's unverified claim. LibStar (talk) 23:13, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Sounds good. IntentionallyDense (talk) 02:55, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 20 isn't working for me [2] IntentionallyDense (talk) 03:35, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Have now removed, will look for another source. LibStar (talk) 22:50, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Found another source. LibStar (talk) 23:10, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
GCMG LVO MBE Acronyms should be spelt out in full when first used. IntentionallyDense (talk) 20:40, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Have removed, as this is spelt out in Honours section. LibStar (talk) 23:18, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Do you really need the one citation in the lead? IntentionallyDense (talk) 20:40, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
HM Ambassador Spell out acronym in full. IntentionallyDense (talk) 20:40, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
have removed HM, means Her Majesty's but not required in this context. LibStar (talk) 22:55, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
FCDO's Spell out in full. IntentionallyDense (talk) 20:40, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Done LibStar (talk) 22:53, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The sections "Education" and "Personal life" Are both really short. Is there any way you could either expand or combine them? IntentionallyDense (talk) 21:05, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Now combined LibStar (talk) 22:51, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
where he read English Is this a specific thing or just the language he reads? IntentionallyDense (talk) 21:05, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
at UK universities it means "he studied". LibStar (talk) 21:53, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Sounds good. IntentionallyDense (talk) 22:02, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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