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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 18:01, 20 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]


I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 18:01, 20 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

It is quite unclear to me as to the original source of this image (as in, the photographer and when it was taken) so completing the FUR is a little confusing for me; thankfully, I have a pretty good idea of some people I could talk to now that I'm back on campus as to whether I could either obtain this information or get a picture that isn't ARR, so I have decided to comment out the image from the infobox for now (since this is the main thing standing in the way of a GA, if I'm understanding you correctly), and I'll see what I can do from here. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 05:23, 1 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
That source was just a collection of obituaries from The Advocate-Messenger, so I've replaced that source with the actual obit in the paper. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 05:21, 1 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why are we singling out the New York Times as having praised Spragen's plan? I have a subscription to the NYT and tried to find the article, and couldn't; if you have any more details, let me know and I'll see if I can dig it up.
  • Not an issue for GA, but there are a lot of uses of "also", many of which could be cut.
  • "Spragens ended his presidency when he asked to be relieved of his duties on November 16, 1981": is this just a way of saying he resigned? Or does it mean more than that?
  • "After his retirement from the presidency, he continued his public service, and served on": suggest just "After his retirement from the presidency he served on" -- the bit in the middle is just unspecific praise.
  • "and one such committee drafted a "statement of concern" intended to be sent to President Richard Nixon": why is this relevant in this article?

-- Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 20:07, 20 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Mike Christie: several responses above. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 02:05, 22 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
PCN02WPS, just checking you haven't forgotten about this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 13:47, 28 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@Mike Christie Thanks for the ping - this weekend I have been moving back into school and will start classes soon so I will get to it when I have a touch more time, probably within the next few days, if that's alright with you. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 20:41, 28 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, no problem keeping this open for a bit. I'll check in with you again in about a week. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 20:50, 28 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@Mike Christie I think I'm ready for another look, thanks very much for your patience. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 05:24, 1 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
No problem. Fixes look good; passing. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 10:48, 1 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]