Talk:Theos Casimir Bernard/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Whiteguru (talk · contribs) 09:27, 18 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Starts GA Review; the review will follow the same sections of the Article. --Whiteguru (talk) 09:27, 18 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:53, 18 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Is it reasonably well written?

There is some excessive linking in the Lead. Explorer and author do not need links.
- Removed.

Biography

Early life

Is it reasonably well written?

obtaining a bachelor's degree in 1931 does batchelor's degree require a link?
- Removed.
a Syrian-Bengali Hindu (Hindu does not need a link)
- Removed.
instructed him systematically in hatha yoga ... Hatha yoga has been linked to in the lead; I'd like to raise a question, does this need any further links?
- Policy is to link once in the lead, once in the body, and if appropriate once in an image caption.
The comment on lineage of teachers is correct; sutra and gotra are frequently recited.
- Noted.
including working as a matchmaker for the rich; I am raising the question here; does matchmaker need a link?
- It probably does, as a term familiar in some cultures but not in others.

India and Tibet

Is it reasonably well written?

The meeting with Lama Tharchin of Kalimpong was the springboard of his further studies and subsequent travels; an important inclusion.
- Noted.
Comment: Interesting claim by Bernard that he was the reincarnation of Padmasambhava. Even more incredulous that the Tibetan high society of that time accepted this.
- One of many extraordinary things about the man.
From what is a vast field of writings about Bernard, this section is a concise and snappy summary of his first visit to India, Sikkhim and Tibet.
- Thank you.
The links in this section are all relevant.
- Noted, thanks.

Hatha Yoga

Is it reasonably well written?

The Herbert Schneider reference is both informative and excellent.
- Noted.
The link to the book Hatha Yoga: The Report of a Personal Experience allows the reader to follow for themselves on asana poses, pranayama and mudras. Smart work.
- Thank you.
It is noted that Bernard stayed away from saying exactly what the experience of jivanmukti / moksha / liberation is for the practitioner (in the light of his later self-promotion). The citation of Norman Sjoman's words about achieving successive stages on the path of hatha yoga is very apt.
- Thanks.

Tibetland, Lotusland

Is it reasonably well written?

Section noted. The link is intriguing.
- Noted.

Final Journey

Is it reasonably well written?

Noted. Partition took a lot of lives. As Hackett resolves, Bernard’s and his guide’s deaths seemed the result of a misidentification during a period of Hindu-Muslim violence in the area.
- Indeed.

Works

Noted.

Notes

Noted.

References

Well resourced
- Noted.

Sources

Parachin, Victor M. (February 2018). "Theos Bernard : Yoga Pioneer" (PDF). Yoga Journal: 53–55 fell over. I used https://web.archive.org/web/20190224231533/http://yogamagazine.online/admin/images/pdf/February%202018-red-opt.pdf to get to it. Might be an idea to use the archived link.
- Added.

External Links

Noted.

End Matter

Is it is Broad in its coverage?

Is it reasonably well written?

Apart from questions raised about links in the Lead and Early Life, this is a concise synopsis of the white lama who served the western world with reports and photographs of his travels and the promotion of asana poses in Hatha Yoga. * The Journal of Buddhist Ethics reference opens with, Was he a sincere religious seeker who found answers in the yogic traditions of India and Tibet? Some might say he was a bit of a charlatan, and it would be easy to paint Bernard as such. However, this leads to the next, section, inter-alia,
- Noted.

More End Matter Stuff:

Does it follow the neutral point of view policy?
Yes, it is very fair to him, and appropriately links to alternate reports and coverage of Bernard's life works and photography.
- Noted.

Is it stable?

This article started life on 3 April 2011 and has had 186 edits. It has been expanded considerably from early versions. In 2017, there was only a biography and notes on the article. I don't see evidence of edit-warring here. In February-March of 2019 there was a lot of work on the article, and then again in December of 2020. 549 page views in the past 30 days.
- Noted.

Top editors are

   * Chiswick Chap  
   * Scy77  
   * Moonriddengirl

It is illustrated by images ?

Yes, appropriately filled with images.
- Noted.

Overall

A neat article, well referenced.
- Thank you.

Conclusion

Can we confabulate about the issues raised? --Whiteguru (talk) 05:46, 20 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Thank you for the attentive review. We can talk about any of the six GA criteria. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:58, 20 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  - You have attended to all the matters raised satisfactorily. Enjoyed doing the review. --Whiteguru (talk) 21:20, 20 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    - Passed