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Reviewer: Mymis (talk · contribs) 18:25, 3 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Mymis

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Hello, I do wish to review your article. Please note that this is my first time reviewing an article, you are welcome to disagree with my comments. Mymis (talk) 18:25, 3 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

General

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Introduction

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  • "organs and violins" → I would suggest linking the instruments.
  • "selling over 60,000 copies" → In the US or worldwide? The Release section says they sold it within a year, I think it should be included in the intro as well.
  • "In writing songs for the album, MercyMe used a basic" → A bit odd sentence structure, maybe just "MercyMe wrote songs for the album using a basic.."
  • It seems that these three long sentences about what kind of albums the band released afterwards are a bit off-topic and not very important mentioning, especially in the introduction, in my opinion. Maybe just merge it in one short sentence, like: "The band further released one independant album before making a decision to sign with a major record label."
  • I think it's important to mention the success of "I Can Only Imagine", especially that it was certified double platinum.

Background and composition

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  • "..released four independent records, Christian alternative rock albums that drew.." → doesn't sound like a grammaticaly correct sentece, maybe ".. records that were all Christian alternative rock albums influenced by grunge music"
  • "While playing live, however, the ba.." → I think you missed a word in this sentence, doesn't sound right. I'd suggest starting a new sentence after a word "audiences". Like, "In contrast, their covers of popular worship songs received a greater reception during their live performances, which lead the band to write and produce..."
  • "written by Millard and composed by" → mmm, not very clear what is "written" and "composed"? you meant "write lyrics" and compose music"?
    • Changed to "With the exception of "Beautiful", a song Cochran wrote the lyrics and music to, the lyrics on the album were written by Millard, while the music was composed by the entire band". Toa Nidhiki05 00:52, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "because it meant so much to Millard" → sounds informal
  • "The Pig Sty" → is it a recording studio?
    • I assume - the liner notes say that is where it was recorded and give the location, but I couldn't find anything about it other than that, so I can't say for sure. Toa Nidhiki05 00:52, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "worship" → is already linked once in the section
  • "Hammond-style organs" → link "organs"

Release, reception, and impact

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Personnel

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Track listing

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References

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Further fixes

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The article looks way better now, would be more than happy to promote it once you adress these remaining minor issues. Mymis (talk) 15:18, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I believe you fixed all the listed problems. It is a well-written article with no original research or any copyvio detected. The sources are all reliable well formatted. I am happy to promote it. Good job! Mymis (talk) 18:15, 8 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]