Talk:The Who/GA1
GA Review
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I am failing this GA nomination because this article does not meet the good article criteria right now. Issues include lack of sourcing and overall subpar quality (in terms of reliability), as well as prose. For example,
- The following are unsourced paragraphs/sections.
- First para of "Early days"
- "The band crystallised around Townshend as primary songwriter and creative force. Entwistle made songwriting contributions. Moon and Daltrey contributed songs in the 60s and 70s." Very disconnected and unsourced.
- Much of "Early singles and My Generation".
- First paragraph of "Lifehouse and Who's Next"
- "Synthesizers can be found elsewhere on the album, in "Bargain", "Going Mobile", and "The Song is Over". Badly worded and unsourced. One cannot "find" a synthesizer in a song.
- First para of "Who Are You and Moon's death", and there is a {{fact}} tag.
- "Decline and breakup" Second paragraph.
- Most of "Reunions"
- The entire "1990s" section.
- Several paragraphs in "2000s"
- "The Who Tour 2006-2007", and it should be an en dash.
- "The Who Tour 2008-2009" Many stubby/unsourced paragraphs. For example "A New Zealand and Australian tour with the support of Counting Crows is scheduled for 2009, starting on March 21st in Auckland, New Zealand then following on in the Australian cities of Brisbane, Adelaide, Melbourne, Sydney and ending in Perth on the 4th April." Source needed, bad wording ("with the support of"), dates have ordinals and generally too long a sentence.
- Second half of "Influence" section.
- "Townshend and Daltrey received Kennedy Center Honors at the 31st annual awards ceremony on December 7, 2008. The Kennedy Center Honors are America's highest cultural honor. The Who are the only rock band to receive the award." Needs a source.
- Web inline citations need to be format with URL, title, publisher and last access date per WP:CITE/ES.
- Source quality is not very good. For example, what makes the following sources reliable?
- ". Joining them were the New York City Fire and Police Departments, a nod to the 2001 charity concert in New York - The Concert For New York City - where The Who performed "Who Are You", "Baba O'Riley", "Behind Blue Eyes" and "Won't Get Fooled Again" for them." What does "a nod to" mean here?
- "In 1990, their first year of eligibility," Explain what "eligibility" is for the reader.
- "A 2-CD live album Join Together had to poor sales in 1990" Ungrammatical "to".
- "In 1978, the band released Who Are You, a move from rock opera towards a radio-friendly sound, though it did contain one song from a never-completed rock opera by Entwistle." Generally awkward.
- "Who's Next was followed by Quadrophenia (1973), which can be seen an autobiographical or social history piece about early 1960s adolescent life in London." Sounds like OR.
Those were just examples. Please work on the prose and sourcing extensively before renominating. Regards, Dabomb87 (talk) 21:55, 22 February 2009 (UTC)