Talk:The Whale (The Office)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 04:19, 14 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be glad to do this one. I'll start with a readthrough of the article in the next few days, noting initial issues here, and then I'll go to the checklist. Looking forward to working with you, -- Khazar2 (talk) 04:19, 14 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

First pass

On first pass, this looks like very solid work, well-written and sourced.

I haven't followed the show since Season 3, so wasn't clear on this sentence: "Oscar thinks that Robert may be seeing another man besides him and convinces Angela to help her spy on him at his yoga class." Is Robert having an affair with Oscar? If so, perhaps the previous sentence could be rewritten as "Angela Lipton (Angela Kinsey) confides in Oscar Martinez (Oscar Nunez) that her husband, Robert (Jack Coleman)—who is secretly having a relationship with Oscar— is cheating on her".
"Ed Helms only appears in the cold open episode" -- should this read "in the episode's cold open"? If I understand right what we're talking about, you might link cold open for readers unfamiliar with the term.
I'm not familiar with how TV ratings should be written. Is the repetition of rating in "2.2 rating/6 percent rating" correct?

I'll now begin the checklist; take a look at these three items when you get a chance. -- Khazar2 (talk) 16:01, 14 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Checklist

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	Well-written and clear. Spot checks show no evidence of copyright issues.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	Meets policies.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	Thoroughly referenced.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.	Excellent work.

I believe I have addressed all the issues that you noted. Thank you for taking the time to review this.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 17:04, 18 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Yep, that's a big pass. Thanks for all your work. -- Khazar2 (talk) 19:17, 18 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]