Talk:The Telltale Head/GA1
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[edit]There are quite a few problems with the article, nothing which can't be fixed though. Here's the things that need fixing:
- Try and expand the lead a little. Maybe add something about the reception. Done
- Merge the Production and First appearances sections. Done
- Merge Reception and Legacy. Done
- There's no need to reference the plot. Per WP:MOSTV: "Plot summaries do not normally require citations; the television show itself is the source, as the accuracy of the plot description can be verified by watching the episode in question."
- Image:SideshowBobsfirstappearance.png I don't see how this image qualifies for fair-use here. Done
- What makes "rec.arts.tv" reliable? Done Removed information also, as it would be unreferenced.
- Un-wikilink "beheaded" in the infobox caption. Done
- "and originally" >> and it originally Done
- "three children Bart admires" name the children (if they're named in the episode, or other episodes). Done
- "$5.00" >> "US$5" Done
- "On his way in" >> "On his way to the movie" Done
- " I thought" take away the space between " and "I" Done
- "despicable deed" This may just be me, but this sounds very sketchy. Try replacing "despicable" with a word like horrific or atrocious. Done
- "'one who done this,'" Use speech marks to quote not apostrophes and to think about it, there's no need to really quote that anyway. Done
- "(who also feels more than a little responsible for this incident)" remove "also" and change the brackets to commas. Done
- "into the statue" >> "onto the statue" Done
- "episode is flashbacks" >> "episode in flashbacks" Done
- Maybe 4 or 5 words to describe who Jack Woltz is. Done
- "This episode is the first for the characters" >> "This is the first episode of the series in which [the list of characters] appear." Done
- Warren Martyn and Adrian Wood, said they enjoyed: "the Simpsons [being] grossly dysfunctional in church, Homer dispensing terrible advice, and a real moral dilemma for Bart." Done
- "adds" >> "added that" Done
- Add a full-stop/period after "to come" Done
- "15.2 and a 26 percent audience share" explain what this means. DoneRemoved info. See above.
- remove ", as "Professor Chaos"" Done
- "Second" >> "The second reference was in the episode" Done
I'm putting the article on hold, meaning that you have a week to fix these problems. I'll promote if they're fixed by then. Leave a message on my talk page when an editor fixes the problems. -- [User]Jamie JCA[Talk] 00:42, 25 August 2008 (UTC)