Talk:The Secret Lives of Waldo Kitty/GA2

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 02:42, 14 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I will grab this for a review if that is okay with you. Since the article is relatively short, I will try to have my comments up soon. Aoba47 (talk) 02:42, 14 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

To be more concise, I feel that subtitle for the infobox image could just read simply as “Title card”.

Done

I would spell out NBC in the lead.

Done

In the phrase “It follows”, I would specify “It” as the “The show”.

Done

I would specify the year in which Helen Thurber sued the production company for clarity rather than the rather vague “would later sue”.

Done

I would add a bit in the lead about the outcome of the Thurber lawsuit.

Done

I am a little confused by the “the small amount of episodes”. Is he upset that the show was cancelled so quickly? I apologize if that is obvious; I just want some context/clarity. Maybe add something about the small amount of episodes ordered by the network, put into production, or something like that.

Done – reworded. Carbrera (talk) 23:16, 20 June 2017 (UTC),[reply]

I am a little confused by the “Other than this issue,” as it implies a contradiction between the next part and the previous parts. However, the previous parts on the discussion of Smith receiving credit seems like a testy time in the production, as you later discuss in the same paragraph. Maybe a better transition would be better here?

Done – reworded. Carbrera (talk) 23:16, 20 June 2017 (UTC),[reply]

I believe a comma would be more appropriate rather than a semicolon after “November 29, 1975” in the “Broadcast history” subsection.

Done

Please add the years for Josie and the Pussycats and The Pink Panther Show as you have done for other shows in the same subsection.

Done

I agree that it would be nie to have critical commentary on the show, but I believe that this is fine, as it can be very difficult to find reviews for a show this old. If you want to take this further, then maybe look for more, but this might be all of the critical reception for the show since it is so short and rather obscure now. I just wanted to make a comment about this considering the previous reviewer’s concern.

Thank you. I was afraid you were not going to touch on this issue but I'm glad you're aware of the previous review. I have never watched this show, minus just a few minutes, but even with that it's not hard to see why this show isn't extremely memorable haha. Thanks. Carbrera (talk) 23:16, 20 June 2017 (UTC).[reply]

Wonderful work with this article. I will pass this once my comments are addressed. Aoba47 (talk) 03:11, 14 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Aoba47 – Thank you very much for the reviews. I have completed this one. Good job on "Mother's Day" passing its FAC! I would also like to comment on the one for "Shine", but unfortunately I cannot since I'm a significant contributor to the article, so I apologize in advance. However, if you're not overly busy, I have nominated Ivy discography to undergo FLC and the link is here if you would like to take a look. Thanks again. Regards, Carbrera (talk) 23:16, 20 June 2017 (UTC).[reply]

Thank you for addressing my comments and for your compliments. I understand what you mean about the "Shine" FAC. I am just going to keep my fingers cross that things go well this time. I will definitely look through your FLC. I will try to get to it by the end of the week if that is okay with you. This is a ✓ Pass. Aoba47 (talk) 02:15, 21 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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