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GA Review

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Reviewer: Warrior4321 (talk) 03:26, 30 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:


In Depth Review

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Weasel words
The weasel words are still there. Please see WP:AWW for more details. warrior4321 02:27, 5 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I cannot locate them :(. Where exactly are they? Thanks, Airplaneman talk 03:41, 5 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Please give examples of such words. "This book is fast paced" cannot be weasel. It has a ref and the tone looks ok to me. If weasel words are in somewhere else, I need to know that in order to fix. Pmlineditor  11:52, 5 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Like the previous book, this novel too is of the fantasy genre.[3] It is fast paced,[4] humorous, full of action,[4] and a blend of the themes of acceptance and family love.

are the sentences which contain weasel words. As WP:AWW says

  • Who says that?
  • When do they say it? Now? At the time of writing?
  • How many people think it? How many is some?
  • What kind of people think it? Where are they?
  • What kind of bias might they have?
  • Why is this of any significance?

Weasel words do not really give a neutral point of view; they just spread hearsay, or couch personal opinion in vague, indirect syntax. It is better to put a name to an opinion than it is to assign it to an anonymous or vague-to-the-point-of-being-meaningless source. warrior4321 20:50, 5 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I've changed it to "Reviewers consider it to be fast paced,[4] humorous, full of action,[4] and a blend of the themes of acceptance and family love.[5]" if that is ok. Pmlineditor  08:02, 6 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Plot
Images
Disambiguation
References
  • Reference 6 is dead.
     Fixed PmlineditorTalk 08:34, 2 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why is reference 8 a reliable source?
    Official website of the Mark Twain Awards. Pmlineditor  12:33, 11 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is rickriordan a RS? It is used for all of the awards, might be better to use other references.
    Re below.
  • Sequel section has no references
    Read WP:MOSFICTION. Plots don't need cites, however, I'll try to do that.
     Fixed Pmlineditor  12:30, 11 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Refs lack details, e.g. ref 3 - no idea what it is, by looking at the ref, '"The Sea of Monsters". Retrieved 2009-09-20." - what is it? a book, a mag, a website? who wrote it? when? etc
     Fixed Pmlineditor  08:41, 7 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • more independent sources would be good. the criticism they've used has B&N and Amazon; both of those are not independent sources. Maybe you can find some reviews in newspapers and stuff?
    I'll try but you'll see that sources available for this book are pretty few. The majority of sources that are offline aren't available here. Nevertheless, I'll try and look for sources.
  • The only reference used for the awards is the author's website. Provide more reliable sources for all the awards.
     Doing... Pmlineditor  12:30, 11 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Single sentences
Audiobook
Capitals
Characters
It is not a Wikipedia standard to use ”'bold”' in this manner; in fact, it would be preferable to rewrite this section in prose-format, rather than as a list. See MOS:BOLD. warrior4321 03:05, 8 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I'm not so sure that's a good idea. It is a listing of the main characters with brief descriptions of each and their role played in the book. Rewriting the section in prose would defeat the section's purpose, which is to list the main characters. Maybe they could be italicized? (I'd have to change the format in The Lightning Thief too then so they match ;)). Airplaneman talk 19:16, 11 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
This is what I was talking about when I meant "prose-format". warrior4321 22:26, 20 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
 Fixed - Ah, ok. I'll go around to the other articles and do the same! Airplaneman talk 21:29, 21 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Looks a bit choppy, no? Airplaneman talk 21:52, 21 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Can more information be added about each? warrior4321 22:32, 30 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Lead
  • Sequel to the lightning thief not mentioned in lead
  • He is thirteen years old, not mentioned in lead
  • The lead is not an adequate summary
  • Lots of stuff mentioned in lead not mentioned in article
    Looks like the stuff is  Fixed Airplaneman talk 02:42, 8 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Good work, but what about the audiobook and the next sequel? warrior4321 02:56, 8 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Oh, that's the stuff. Will fix soon! Airplaneman talk 00:25, 9 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
 Fixed Airplaneman talk 00:29, 9 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I'll finish fixing by the weekend. Pmlineditor  16:14, 7 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Passed warrior4321 23:09, 1 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]