Talk:The Outfoxies/GA1

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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 19:42, 22 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take a look at this one. Courcelles (talk) 19:42, 22 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

"Although the game did not accumulate much interest at release" Accumulate is the wrong word here... perhaps "attract"?
- Replaced
"The game was designed by Masateru Umeda, who later on went to design Dancing Eyes (1996), a game similar to Qix (1981)." Sources for all parts of that sentence, please.
- It is in the next footnoted source. Should I copy the footnote? I usually just place footnotes at the end of whatever block of text it supports, not necessarily at the end of each sentence.
  - Yeah, try and put citations close to information, even if it means repeatign certain footnotes. Courcelles (talk) 22:10, 23 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
    - Fixed TarkusAB^talk 14:14, 24 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Any releases outside Japan?
- Not that I know of. I cannot find a source or even an non-JP arcade flyer to suggest such a release.
"Coincidentally, Suda is a fan of The Outfoxies and owns a copy which is displayed and playable at Grasshopper Manufactuer's offices." Source? Also, "Manufacturer" might be misspelled...
- Same as above. Everything is sourced just at the end of the block of text it supports. I can copy the footnote and place at the end of the sentence if you think that's better, but I haven't seen that kind of sourcing in other articles. Oh and I fixed spelling of Manufacture.
"Although there are thematic similarities between it and his game Killer7 (2005), he claims he learned about The Outfoxies after developing Killer7, and any such similarities are just coincidence." Can you translate the Japanese text supporting this? This is a big claim and needs big evidence, or it should go.
- Yep. Suda says in the interview: 本当に偶然なんですよ（笑）。『アウトフォクシーズ』の存在を知ったのは、『killer7』を作った数年後のことです。 This translates to "Really, it's a coincidence. I didn't know about the existence of Outfoxies until a number of years after making Killer7."

Courcelles (talk) 20:06, 22 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Courcelles: Thanks for reviewing. TarkusAB^talk 23:13, 22 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Promoting. Courcelles (talk) 18:22, 25 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]