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Reviewer: Yash! (talk · contribs) 08:57, 8 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I will be doing this. Best, Yash! 08:57, 8 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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  • Repetition of the fact that Goddard adopted the screenplay. Remove it from either of the mention, preferably from the first mention. Suggestion: merge the fact of adaption in the first sentence, like - "...Matt Damon based on the novel of the same name." checkY
  • Merge the first two sentences of the third paragraph. checkY
  • "629" -> "630" checkY
  • "For his performance" is extra-text and no need to write that. checkY
  • Also, in the last sentence, say "Damon won the Golden Globe for Best Actor in a Musical or Comedy, and was nominated for..." checkY

Plot

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  • "without him" - since he was assumed dead, "without him" wouldn't fit alone. Add something else such as "since he was assumed dead" or anything that you would like. checkY
  • "He begins a video diary." - a bit too short. Perhaps merge with the following sentence? checkY
  • Do mention why he starts to make the long journeys. Though it is mentioned previously that the crew would arrive 3200 km away, it would be better to make it clear that he does that to reach that spot. checkY
  • "1997" - is it possible to know how many years ago was that? If yes, do mention.
  • "90-sol" -> "90 sol" checkY
  • No need to write "(MMU)" if the abbreviation is not going to be used later. checkY

Cast

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  • Unlink "JPL". checkY
  • Use the zh template for the Chinese names. checkY
  • Who were Ryoko and Tim Grimes?
  • Unlink "Jet Propulsion Laboratory". checkY
  • Merge the first two paragraphs. Since Damon is the central character here, how he prepared for the role should come first. checkY
  • Add "(MANAA)" after "Media Action Network for Asian-Americans". checkY
  • Use Weir's full name the first time it is mentioned in the prose and also link it, in "described by Weir". checkY
  • "Author Andy Weir" -> "Weir" checkY

Production

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  • Ridley Scott" -> "Scott". This problem is throughout the section. checkY
  • Andy Weir" -> "Weir". Again, throughout. checkY

Development

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  • Avoid repeating "The Martian" in the same sentence. checkY
  • Remove "The studio". checkY

Filming

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  • Use the convert template for km. checkY
  • Use years in () after Scott's films. checkY
  • Unlink potato. checkY
  • Link UNESCO world heritage site. checkY
  • There is a CN tag. checkY
  • One observer? Observer of? checkY
  • Will be released? Was it? If yes, do mention it there. checkY

NASA involvement

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  • JSC and JPL are linked before here as well. Unlink all four of them. checkY
  • Remove "at NASA" while describing Green's position. checkY

Music

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  • Unlink Exodus: Gods and Kings and remove "(2014)" as it is already mentioned previously. checkY
  • Film score is overlinked - unlink please. checkY

Marketing

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  • No need to mention "Studio". checkY
  • "Matt Damon" -> "Damon". Throughout the section. checkY
  • "Ridley Scott" -> "Scott". Throughout the section. checkY
  • Unlink Prometheus". checkY
  • Unlink astronauts. checkY
  • Unlink NASA. checkY
  • Unlink Johnson Space Center. checkY

Release

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  • "Ridley Scott" -> "Scott". Throughout the section. checkY

Box office forecast

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  • Remove "in the U.S". checkY
  • "Andy Weir" -> "Weir". checkY
  • "Matt Damon" -> "Damon". checkY
  • Unlink Exodus. checkY
  • Unlink NASA. checkY
  • The tense and grammar in the last sentence can be improved. checkY

Theatrical run

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  • "...was also released in 49 markets including the United Kingdom, Mexico..." - why is UK mentioned again after mentioning in the previous sentence? checkY
  • CinemaScore fact should be in the "Critical reception sub-section below. checkY
  • "United States and Canada" -> "North America" - since you already mention what NA means in brackets previously. checkY
  • "In South Korea, it is" -> "In South Korea, it became". checkY
  • Use years in () for Avatar and Kingsman. checkY
  • Unlink Spectre the second time. checkY
  • "In its second weekend, it fell by 60% to $13.7 million. In total, it grossed $95 million there." - they can be merged. checkY
  • There is too much usage of "it". Use "it", "the film" and "The Martian" (use less of this though) alternatively please. checkY
  • "as of February 28 has grossed a total of $23.2 million" -> perhaps the final gross would do better. Writing like the final gross was xx$ is preferable.
  • "U.S." -> "North America", and if not that, "United States". checkY

Reception

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Critical reception

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  • Mention the overview of the reviews in the opening sentence. Not just about how they were on the premier. Like, "The Martian received generally positive reviews to critical acclaim upon release." checkY
  • "Critics commended the visual effects, the scientific accuracy, and the film's likability, largely due to Matt Damon's performance." - this statement should be the second sentence in this section after the general overview of the reviews and before the RT and MC scores. checkY
  • As pointed previously, add the CinemaScore fact after RT and MC scores. checkY
  • Merge the Variety quote with the first paragraph (which has the general description of reviews just like this quote).
  • The quote of The Guardian is the only one in the paragraph. Perhaps find one more review and add to the paragraph.
  • Unlink Intersteller. checkY

Accolades

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  • About the Top Ten List, can we do it like it is in Intersteller? If not, at least mention which position did the film take in the list and of which publisher. checkY
  • "The film has received many industry awards and nominations" -> "The film received various industry awards and nominations". checkY
  • Remove "but lost in all categories" as it is redundant. checkY
  • A major problem over here - we will need sources for all these uncited claims. checkY

Scientific accuracy

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  • "Andy Weir" -> "Weir". checkY
  • "Ridley Scott" -> "Scott. Both the times. checkY
  • "Drew Goddard" -> "Goddard". checkY
  • Use the convert template. checkY
  • "says" -> "said" checkY
  • A reference for "It is also thought possible that microbial organisms could potentially live on Mars." checkY
  • "Dr. Michael Shara" -> "Michael Shara". checkY

References

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  • Keep the format of the dates consistent. Most of them are DDMMYYYY but we can also see a few YYYYMMDD checkY
  • "Box Office Mojo" can be seen with italics as well as without? Be consistent with that. checkY
  • "Deadline.com" is sometimes "deadline.com". Remove italics and capitalize the D in all those. checkY
  • Ref#14 - IGN should not be in italics. checkY
  • Ref#27 - link CNN. checkY
  • Ref#29 - unreliable source. Please find an alternative.
  • Ref#52 - remove the YouTube source and find some another one.
  • Ref#74 - don't use Caps even though the page says so. checkY
  • Ref#109 - needs formatting. checkY
  • Ref#110 - same as above. checkY
  • Ref#120 - MC should not be in italics. checkY
  • Ref#121 - RT should not be in italics. checkY
  • Ref#122 - TM should be in italics and linked. Also needs retrieved date. checkY
  • Ref#123 - HP should be in italics and linked. Also needs retrieved date. checkY
  • Ref#135 - remove the Facebook source and please find an alternative. checkY

That should do it! Apologies for the delayed responses again. Kind regards, Yash! 21:18, 24 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • All looks good and I shall pass this once an alternative to the Quora source is found. The problem with Quora is that even if the interview is genuine, the answer can be deleted at any time. And after all, the answer is by certain user on that site, and just like Reddit, not a reliable. Better to use a reliable alternative. Yash! 15:57, 28 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Captain Assassin!, it is completely understandable. I was out for a fellowship programme at the Netherlands and had a colleague who was fasting so I know that it is tough. I would like to review articles from a few different topics now. If it stays unreviewed for a couple of months or so, I shall jump in. If I were to suggest some addition, I would suggest that include a "cultural impact" section, the focus being on Leo winning the award. As everyone knows that it has been around for a while now, the jokes, memes, talks and discussions about Leo not winning an Oscar. Perhaps a mention is warranted considering how significantly those things have been talked about over the internet. A little mention on his speech about climate change can also be added and if he has done some charity work associated with the film for it (I suspect that he might have), it would be worth writing about. As it stands right now, it is missing out on the "broad in coverage" criteria by a bit. Happy Ramadan! Yash! 08:53, 29 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]