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Excellent start! View your page's history to see if I made any edits or left any templates. My biggest concern is the size of the synopsis and the "recipe" type feel it has. I think you can stick with the size (perhaps you'll get other feedback), but try to cut back on the recipe transitions. Once you've made a few tweaks, proceed according to the syllabus. -Reagle (talk) 21:49, 20 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Katie, great article! I like how you've structured it and thought you had a good balance between information about the background and actual content of the book. The main thing I would try to fix is just consistency in tenses and names. In the "Synopsis" portion you write in the past tense at times, such as in "Foreword & Introduction" and then move to the present tense. Adding consistency in that regard, especially when talking about "the book is written" could be helpful. I added a couple copy edits, there were just a couple of typos and clunky turns of phrase. Overall though great content, just minor fixes! Tiarawearer (talk) — Preceding undated comment added 03:14, 22 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Katie! This was an awesome article to read through. To add to the above feedback, staying consistent with your tenses would be the most important. Additionally, I have gone in and made some minor grammatical changes, however, great job! Dena.wolfs (talk) 19:42, 4 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 8 January 2024 and 17 April 2024. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Kbill98 (article contribs).

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