Talk:The Invincible Iron Man (video game)/GA1

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Reviewer: Bluecrystal004 (talk · contribs) 05:19, 7 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be reviewing this! If I haven't reviewed this by Saturday please shoot me a reminder! Bluecrystal004 (talk · contribs) 05:19, 7 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Pinging @Bluecrystal004: per request Cat's Tuxedo (talk) 15:49, 12 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for the delay, started a new job last week and overestimated the time I'd be able to commit to this. I have the next few days off so I should have my thoughts here within the next couple days. Bluecrystal004 (talk · contribs) 17:30, 13 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Copyright

Fair-use rationales are good.
Earwig returns nothing major, but some stuff that I think should be re/paraphrased (see below in red)

Infobox

Add caption for cover art

Lead

Gameplay

Special power orbs located in various areas allow Iron Man to unleash a massive chest-mounted cannon or to detonate a bomb that clears the entire screen of enemies. - This is pretty much the exact wording the source uses, so I would rephrase the second part of the sentence

Plot

in which the former defeats easily in a battle. - "in which" -> "who" or rephrase the whole thing a bit more clearly
concocted the entire scenario - phrase this some other way, such as "orchestrated the theft" or something

Development and release

with Torus' Kevin McIntosh - a bit picky but "Torus'" -> "Torus's"
It is the first handheld video game to feature Iron Man as a playable character. - recommend moving this to the end of the section

Reception

My main problem with this section is there are too many direct quotations. All the ones listed below should be paraphrased in my opinion
"the best side-scrolling shoot-'em-up for Game Boy Advance since Turok: Evolution" - could just remove this, I don't know that it needs to be mentioned
"one of the better examples of how a comic book should be transformed into a video game"
"a throwback to the days of the Genesis and Super NES where action platformers featuring licensed characters were pretty much a dime a dozen"
with little distinguishing features. - "little" -> "few"
"The Invincible Iron Man is one of the wimpiest game heroes we've encountered and deserves to be locked away in this rather limp platformer-with-guns"
"Metroid and countless other games mastered eight-directional shooting a decade ago, this is ridiculous"

References

Spotchecked all citations since there's not many, all claims are sourced
All sources reliable

@Cat's Tuxedo: Again, sorry for the delay. Here are my thoughts, but the article is in good shape overall. Putting On hold to await fixes/responses. Bluecrystal004 (talk · contribs) 01:26, 15 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Bluecrystal004: No prob. All points have been addressed. Cat's Tuxedo (talk) 02:28, 15 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Cat's Tuxedo Looks good, thanks for your work on this article! Passing now Bluecrystal004 (talk · contribs) 03:12, 16 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]