Jump to content

Talk:The Heart Knows its Own Bitterness

Page contents not supported in other languages.
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

Suggested improvements

[edit]

This article would benefit from:

  • images (that don't have copyright problems), like a marked-up Talmud page (?)
  • elaboration and more clarity about different interpretations of the sugya among rishonim
  • editing of the sugya text, so that it is "hidden" unless clicked by reader, and to differentiate original text from "elucidations"

Other ideas? ProfGray (talk) 00:25, 15 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Did you know nomination

[edit]

(
)
  • Source: current footnote 12: Berger, Zackary; Cahan, Rabbi Joshua (2016). "Patient Autonomy in Talmudic Context: The Patient's "I Must Eat" on Yom Kippur in the Light of Contemporary Bioethics". Journal of Religion and Health. 55 (5): 1778–1785: "Here, we analyze a discussion in the Mishna, a foundational text of rabbinic Judaism, regarding patient autonomy in the setting of religiously mandated fasting, and commentaries in the Babylonian and Palestinian Talmuds, finding both a more expansive notion of such autonomy and a potential metaphysical grounding for it in the importance of patient self-knowledge."
  • ALT1: ... that a Talmudic passage, "The Heart Knows its Own Bitterness", has been used to justify a rabbinic law project by and for transgender Jews? Source: current fn #5: Soloman, Laynie; Pearce, Russell G. (2022). "'Nothing about Us without Us': Toward a Liberatory Heterodox Halakha". Touro L. Rev. 37: 1769–1836 – via HeinOnline: ""The heart alone knows its bitterness" is not simply a mantra about the essential power of individuals to dictate their medical needs when confronted with a disputing party. This statement, as we have seen, becomes an interpretive principle that we can utilize to articulate a truth at the center of a vision of a liberatory Heterodox halakha that attempts to center the needs, realities, experiences, and expertise of the community from which it emerges. (1830)... The approaches to Heterodox halakhathat we have described thus far are the ideologies that ground the Trans Halakha Project, a recent initiative that "aims to curate existing resources that have been developed for trans Jews and by trans Jews..." (1832)
  • Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Elin Falk
  • Comment: I'm very sorry, I lost track of the timing (because I put wrong creation date on my user page)! It's a few days over. But the hooks are short and clearly sourced, so hopefully easy to review.
Created by ProfGray (talk). Number of QPQs required: 1. Nominator has 7 past nominations.

ProfGray (talk) 14:10, 19 November 2024 (UTC).[reply]

  • Comment: That's fine, User:ProfGray, but please make a note to avoid this again. This is at least the second time you've missed the cutoff date and if you make it a habit, some editors are likely to decline in the future. I will compose a review. Viriditas (talk) 23:17, 10 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • The lead hardly summarizes the body.
  • No quotes for "The Heart Knows its Own Bitterness" as the title?
  • You alternate between the uppercase title "The Heart Knows its Own Bitterness" and the lowercase phrasing of "the heart knows its own bitterness" of the sugya and the proverb it refers to. That's three different references, and it must be really confusing for our readers. You probably need a dab header pointing to the Proverb as well. Figure out a way to make it clear that you are differentiating between the 1) principle 2) the sugya, and the 3) proverb.
  • It is because the verse states: "The heart knows the bitterness of its soul" (Proverbs 14:10) Please link to Proverbs 14
  • In a 2022 law review article, Laynie Soloman and Russell G. Pearce deploy The Heart Knows its Own Bitterness as one of two No quotes for "The Heart Knows its Own Bitterness" here?
  • While applying The Heart Knows its Own Bitterness for a Jewish ethics by a those outside the mainstream No quotes here?
  • Citation 2: ""The Heart Knows its Own Bitterness". You've got two quotes in front of the title. This can be solved by using a single quote in the title field.
  • gemara. You're using a different convention for Gemara than Wikipedia. Here, it is uppercase with no italics. You're doing the same for other words like Yoma, etc. Note: I see you are doing this for a specific reason, but that it isn't evident to most people, so perhaps add a footnote explaining the usage differences.
  • Hence it is discussed in the 313rd mitzvah Per WP:EL, don't use an external link in the body of the article. Add the footnote.
  • Jewish Medical Ethics. Add the pub date so we know the year like this: Jewish Medical Ethics (1959). I believe it is 1959, but you should verify.
  • I added the link to the source in the hook. Please also add it to the article.
  • Along these lines, Libson mentions the case of a rabbi (a Tosafist, Isaac ben Asher) who fasted to death in the medieval period, earning some recognition for piety as well as push back on the rabbinic acceptance of such conduct There's a great opportunity to add some interdenominational cross-referencing if the sources support it. Fasting to death was a thing in Asian Buddhism and was practiced to achieve self-mummification. Apparently, these bodies of monks who fasted to death are still in public view (China, Japan, Korea).
  • Yes if a person says they need food, their view outweighs even 100 doctors who say they should fast. That's not encyclopedic style. Please rewrite that passage.
More in a bit. Viriditas (talk) 23:17, 10 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the detailed comments. And I'm sorry about the timing, not my strong suit, I'll try not to err again. I've made most of your suggested changes. (I know about Sallekhana but might seem like OR for me to refer to it, and the rabbinic case is more an exception than a comparable practice.) I see the inconsistency: should The Heart Knows its Own Bitterness generally be in title case with or without quotation marks? I revised the lead a bit but I think it covers much of the ground of the article, what do you sense should be added? ProfGray (talk) 18:17, 11 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
General: Article is new enough and long enough

Policy compliance:

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
QPQ: Done.

Overall: Exemption per WP:DYKNEW. Article is long enough; no problems found by Earwig except quotes. Hooks seem fine and sourced. My primary issue is with the article itself. Even though there are no maintenance tags, I think it indirectly fails WP:DYKCOMPLETE due to is tendency towards obscurantism from the style of writing, which I believe impacts the overall presentation. I realize this is not done on purpose. I recommend a complete rewrite. The current version lacks clarity and focus and is technical and dense. This problem could easily be remedied by removing all the quoted passages and reducing the topic to its bare simplicity for the general reader. Then, slowly add back in more advanced concepts and quotes as needed. I realize my review will be controversial, so after writing this, I will immediately request a second opinion. Viriditas (talk) 01:18, 11 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Well, I've never been asked to do a complete rewrite before. It is true that the articles on the Talmud are going to get into some special terms, which have hyperlinks, and content (e.g., literary sources and legal issues). Perhaps you could mark which quotations should be removed and presumably paraphrased instead? Which paragraphs are too dense and require more clarity or clarification? Not sure that 'obscurantism' is a helpful feedback term, but I do appreciate your willingness to help me improve this. ProfGray (talk) 18:26, 11 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
In terms of DYKCOMPLETE, I wonder if folks would glance at my other currently nominated articles on Talmudic topics, to check for similar concerns. Moses sees Rabbi Akiva (Menachot 29b), Sugya, Hefker. ProfGray (talk) 18:34, 11 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I did that, and your other article on the list of older hooks needing to be reviewed didn’t appear so bad. For me, the issue here is, what if you pretend for a moment that you aren’t who you are, you’re someone who doesn’t know this subject and has no familiarity with it. Now read what you wrote with that pretend state of mind. It’s difficult to make sense of it. Like I said, work towards simplicity for the general reader and you should be fine. The easiest and simplest way to do this is to add all of the text, except for the quotes, to a sandbox page, and rewrite it. Once you've achieved a reasonable outline and structure that anyone can follow and understand, begin adding in your selected quotes if necessary. That should solve the entire problem. I will bow out of this and ask others to take over. Perhaps you will find someone who is sympathetic and will pass it. But I read it three times with the idea that I was new and a beginner and as someone who has never come across the subject before, and I couldn’t get very far. Try it yourself. Remember, we aren’t just writing for ourselves but a general audience. You’re not alone in this struggle, it’s something I keep running into in my own writing and I’m always having to make changes because I sometimes forget that I’m not the intended recipient. Viriditas (talk) 18:49, 11 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Retrieved from "https://wiki.riteme.site/w/index.php?title=Talk:The_Heart_Knows_its_Own_Bitterness&oldid=1262350636"