Talk:The Haunting Hour: Don't Think About It/GA1

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Reviewer: Mediran (talk · contribs) 06:43, 25 August 2013 (UTC) I will review! :)[reply]

Review coming soon.

Review

Infobox

Resolved BTW, it looks good but "Cartoon Network" shouldn't be there because it only aired the film but it didn't distributed it.
Resolved What's the production studio?

Lead

Resolved Typically, the lead seems incomplete as it doesn't include the plot. Please add atleast two to three sentences synopsis about the film.
Resolved I would suggest to you that you need to specify the film is an American production. Instead of "R. L. Stine's The Haunting Hour: Don't Think About It is a 2007 horror fantasy family film based on..." please use "a 2007 American horror fantasy family film..." Link "family film" or "children's film"

Plot

Resolved I never saw the film but did Cassie moved into the neighborhood with her family? If yes, please say like "Cassie (Emily Osment) is a thirteen-year-old goth girl who just moved with her family to a new neighborhood and new school." or to something else. If not, don't change it around. But of course she did, she's 13. :)
Resolved "On the way to the library..." Is this the school library? If yes, please specify. If not, please say like "a library." it's confusing.
Resolved "in the middle of her writing a report" change to "in the middle of her report writing"?
Resolved By the way, who is Priscilla here. You need to introduce her first. It's somewhat confusing to those (like me) who're not familiar on the film.
Resolved Same as the previous, who is Sean? Please introduce him.
Resolved "He leaves them with only a riddle..." change to "He leaves them a riddle"?
Resolved "save the pizza delivery guy..." I think the guy here should be changed to "man" to make it sound more encyclopedic.
Resolved PS Please fix the plot more. I was confused about "The Evil Thing". What does it look like? Does it have multiple heads? If yes, please describe how monstrous it is. Also, describe on what instances how will the monster come to life (The plot said that the monster will live if the book will be read aloud. Also, I've added that when you think about its monsters, it will come to life. Is that right? Please make that clearer. Thanks) Also, describe where the parents went before they got home. I think they were from a party.
Resolved "They burn the book and rid themselves of The Evil Thing." This is actually confusing. They rid themselves? Describe what they actually rid?

Cast

Resolved I have few question here. "Tobin Bell as The Stranger" Was Bell really credited as "The Stranger". If yes, don't change it but don't capitalize the T. If not, you can change it to "Tobin Bell as [the] store owner" or to something else.

Production

Resolved Please link the "Chronicles of Narnia" for those people who're not familiar.

Release

Resolved Only with the "Television" sub-section. Do you have any reports how many viewers watched the film? If you don't have, it's just OK.
Resolved Was the film rated by the MPAA? If yes, please add their rating. If not, don't mind this. But of course it was rated.

Reception

Resolved I would suggest to make this as a new section and merge the "Award nominations" here. About the reviews, make another section and name it like "Critical response".
Added Example:

== Reception ==
=== Critical response ===
''Add reviews here''

=== Accolades ===
''Add nominations here'' (But change it to a paragraph and not in bullet form to make it more encyclopedic)

Resolved I've change this section a bit. Please don't italicize the "DVD Talk" and "About.com". Also, please link them. Thanks.

References

Resolved Ref 6. Don't italicize "Common Sense Media".
Resolved Ref 7. Don't italicize "DVD Talk"
Resolved Ref 8. Don't italicize "Cinema Blend"
Resolved Ref 10. Replace "Young Artist Award" with "Young Artist Association". BTW, I should have told you that you must also not italicize this but I've already fixed it. Thanks.
Resolved Ref 11. Don't italicize "Amazon" and change it to "Amazon.com".
Resolved Ref 12. Don't italicize "DVD Active"
Resolved Ref 15. Don't italicize "About.com"
Resolved Ref 16. Don't italicize "Steeltown Entertainment"

BTW, thank you SL93 for improving the article a lot. I think it will pass soon. Thanks and have a nice day! :) Mediran (t • c) 08:15, 25 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'm confused about the references. Template:Cite Web automatically italicizes the sources. SL93 (talk) 08:30, 25 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Never mind. I figured it out. SL93 (talk) 08:33, 25 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks.

I think that I took care of all the problems. The film never gave any type of name for the store owner, but IMDb lists him as The Stranger. It might be in the film credits, but I don't have the DVD. SL93 (talk) 09:02, 25 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

That's OK! Kind of strange but I guess Bell was really credited as "stranger." Mediran (t • c) 02:17, 26 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I have foxed the plot. Reading it aloud does not bring the monster to life in itself, but it makes it so that more people could think about it, which thinking about it brings it to life. I have also described the monster. SL93 (talk) 19:55, 26 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'm not sure how to fix the plot hole at the end of the film's plot. By plot hole, I mean that the dad shouldn't have brought it back to life by reading it out loud. The store owner specifically mentioned that only thinking about it brings it to life. SL93 (talk) 20:04, 26 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I visited the Haunting Hour Wiki and I saw that it was stated there like in this article that the "father" brought the monster back to life by reading the book. Mediran (t • c) 07:30, 30 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Final thoughts

Sorry about the delay in passing this article as I was too busy in the last few days. Anyway, I think all of my comments above have been addressed and checked with the criteria. By that, this article is good to go. Also, I would like to thank you SL93 for the improvements and effort you gave in making this a good article. Thanks and have a nice day! :) Mediran (t • c) 07:30, 30 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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