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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 15:14, 26 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this very soon. But I have to say that the image in the infobox, is truly, hilarious. Also, happy to report that there are no dab links, or dead links. TBrandley 15:14, 26 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Yeah, I'm pretty fond of ol' Prison Mike. Wish he would have made a return before Carell left! Ruby 2010/2013 15:43, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Infobox
  • Despite the awesomeness of the picture, it's non-free rationale needs to be expanded upon, or the image has to be removed. :(
  • I rewrote the purpose section ("To illustrate a scene noticed by television critics and help readers visualize Carell's "Prison Mike" character, a prominent component of the episode"). Ruby 2010/2013 15:29, 30 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • Still not a good enough rationale. It should be talked about in production, to help the understand the topic? You state that it helps reader understand it, how? Also, the image's credits to NBC should be removed. See on the left side of the picture. Regards. TBrandley 22:21, 30 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • That screenshot is truly a mess, and though it provided some benefit when viewed from critics' perspective, I've removed it. It isn't necessary enough to replace it with a logo-less screenshot, IMO. Ruby 2010/2013 02:31, 31 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Where is the production code referenced? IGN, epguides, DVD release, etc.
  • Add "running time" to the infobox
  • *List of The Office (U.S. TV series) episodes". The Office should be italics
Lede
  • "The episode was the first original script written for the show by Ricky Gervais and Stephen Merchant". What? Confusing.
  • "original British series of the same name". Comedy series?
Plot
  • Nothing to be seen
Production
  • "British series of the same name" Comedy series?
  • "The third season DVD contains several scenes that were deleted from the final cut of the episode. These include Dwight and Andy verbally sparring in the kitchen, Dwight informing Michael that he believes Martin has murdered Meredith, Michael explaining that he created "Prison Mike" in an improvisation class, and Pam giving Andy wildly incorrect tips for hanging out with Jim." Small paragraph should be merged.
Reception
  • "The Convict" 'was first broadcast". Add bolded word.
  • ""The Convict" first broadcast in the United States on November 30, 2006,[5] near the end of the fall sweeps period". What channel was it on? It's only in lede, is missing here. Per WP:LEDE.
  • "AOL TV"? Isn't it The Huffington Post now?
  • US → U.S.
  • MOS:ACRO says either abbreviation works (as long as they are consistent with other abbreviations within the article). "The Convict" used US and UK in their quotes, so I think it would look better to keep them all the same. Ruby 2010/2013 15:29, 30 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
References
  • Ref. 1: "Give Me My Remote" is not a "high-quality" source good for Wikipedia. Remove.
  • Ref. 1: Double quotes (") should be single quotes ('), as per MOS: guidelines for references
  • Ref. 2: Double quotes (") should be single quotes ('), as per MOS: guidelines for references
  • Ref. 5: I think citing/referencing the episode for those above statements is WP:OR. The broadcast one can for sure be replaced
  • I replaced the episode source that was being used to cite the broadcast. Blitz' name appears in the credits as director and should definitely be included for that part of it. I'm unsure about where I should find a RS detailing that it was his first episode of the series; I don't want to remove it, as I think it's important to mention. Ruby 2010/2013 15:29, 30 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ref. 9: "AOL TV"? Isn't it The Huffington Post now?
  • Ref. 12: The Boston Herald should be without "the". That isn't part of the official newspaper title
  • Ref. 12: Curly quotations should be regular per MOS: guidelines
External links
  • Link NBC.com
  • Categories below should be sorted in alphabetical order

Great work on the article. On hold for now, per the above issues to be fixed. Cheers, TBrandley 16:47, 28 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the review! Please see my replies above. Ruby 2010/2013 15:29, 30 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
No problem. The article appears good now. Pass. TBrandley 23:23, 31 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]