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Reviewer: HaEr48 (talk · contribs) 04:41, 13 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this on. Interesting topic, will read the article in detail soon. HaEr48 (talk) 04:41, 13 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

*Preliminary feedback: As per WP:PAGENUM, please include page numbers in citations referring the Britsch (1986) book. See WP:CITEPAGE on how to do this. HaEr48 (talk) 04:47, 13 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Ok here goes:

Feedback on body

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* “It was anticipated that copies of the new book would be prepared quickly” => who anticipated that? HaEr48 (talk) 05:34, 13 March 2017 (UTC) [reply]

* “The king and prime minister of Tonga both “ => name the king and PM? HaEr48 (talk) 05:34, 13 March 2017 (UTC) [reply]

* Why is the section heading in plural when there’s only one? HaEr48 (talk) 04:08, 25 March 2017 (UTC) [reply]

Feedback on lead

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@JAGrace (BYU): Thanks for the response. Your updates look good, I've considered most of the recommendations addressed, but there are some remaining. Could you take a look on the unstruck bullet points above and act on them? HaEr48 (talk) 04:11, 25 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@HaEr48: I have gone through the four remaining recommendations listed above. The first unstruck point regarding the Quorum of the 12 was something I did add to the article in my first round of edits, but it was removed by another user. Second, I have changed the usage of the "Tongan Mission" to be capitalized as a proper noun when referring to the "Tongan Mission" on its own. However, when referring to a "Tongan mission president", this title is lowercase according to the MOS:LDS, to avoid the use of jargon regarding church leadership positions. I have edited the article's usage according to this guideline. Third, the point concerning the Golden Jubilee Celebration's time and location was also removed, but I have added the information in with a citation. Lastly, I went through the page's Mission section and added the citations that provided proper supporting evidence. I removed the information that I could not find any evidence for, despite scouring many resources. I hope that my explanation of these last edits was helpful, and please let me know if there is anything else I can do moving forward. Thank you again for your consideration! JAGrace (BYU) (talk) 22:16, 29 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@JAGrace (BYU): Thank you for the update! We're nearly there, I added a "citation needed" and a "page needed" tag. Could you take a look at them? When that's done I think we're good to go. HaEr48 (talk) 03:58, 30 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@HaEr48: I have added the citation and page number. Thanks! JAGrace (BYU) (talk) 16:16, 31 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! I'm happy to pass the review. Congratulations! HaEr48 (talk) 19:39, 31 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]