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GA Review

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GA Review by SRX--LatinoHeat

Lead

  • Since its invention, The Terrible Towel has spread in popularity; fans often take their Towel to famous sites while on vacation. - This is original research, unless sourced, this sounds like a opinion.
  • The Towel has been taken to the peak of Mount Everest and seen on Saturday Night Live. - Why is this important to the article, and what does it say about the towel?
  • Proceeds from sales of the Towel have raised over $2 million for a Pennsylvania school which cares for people with mental retardation and physical disabilities. - The currency used needs to be identified, a link to United States dollar would due good here.
    • Done
  • Terrible Towel is credited with being the first "rally towel", its success has spawed similar trends. - Spawed? Is "spawned" meant here?

Origin

  • In the weeks leading up to the game, Cope advertised the idea of the towel to fans on the radio and evening TV news, using the phrase "The Terrible Towel is poised to strike!" - per WP:ACRONYM, TV shouldn't be abbreviated, it should be spelled out, to "television".
    • Done
  • Also against the idea of the Towel, Andy Russell mirrored Cope's original thoughts, "We're not a gimmick team. We've never been a gimmick team." - this can be reworded, Also against the ideas of the Towel, was Andy Russell who mirrored ..........and so on.
    • Done
  • Growing nervous about the negative feedback, Cope, who had already advertised the towel on the news multiple times, polled the rest of the players with a "banana-republic vote", - what does banana-republic vote mean here?
  • The Towel made its debut on December 27, 1975, in a playoff game against the Baltimore Colts. - no comma is needed here
    • Done
  • If possible, the poem should be put in a quote box.
I see what you mean, I think it is better centered, Im sorry, you can leave it centered.SRX--LatinoHeat 02:46, 1 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Done

Rights and proceed

  • This prompted Gimbels department store began to market "The Official Myron Cope Terrible Towel" during the 1976 season - reword here, the sentence does not flow due to the past tense, it should either be "to begin marketing" or "This prompted the marketing of "The Official Myron Cope Terrible Towel" by Gimbels department store.
    • Done - Probably just a typo on my part.
  • During the 2005 season, when the Steelers won their fifth Super Bowl, over 1 million Towels were sold; with some fans buying 200 at a time. - reword, "as some fans bought 200 Towels at a time."
    • Done

Opposition

  • The Steelers went on to win the game by 20 points. - source?
    • Done
  • Pittsburgh went on to make a comeback victory, not allowing the Bengals another point the remainder of the game. - needs to be reworded, how about "After the touchdown, the Bengals were unable to score again, as the Steelers defeated them (whatever the score was ??-??)." It flows and sounds better. Plus, it sounds like Original research.

Similar gimmicks

  • During the 2006 playoffs, in a game against the Steelers, the Indianapolis Colts handed out blue towels to fans; Pittsburgh won the game. - should flow more, mayby like "though" should be used after fans, and the semicolon should be changed to a comma.
    • Reworded

References

Closing Comments GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality:
    Per the many concerns above.
    B. MoS compliance:
    Per the many concerns above.
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources:
    B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
    There was one instance above where there wasnt a ref to a source.
    C. No original research:
    Many instances above.
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
    B. Focused:
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
    POV issue above
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
    B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:
    On Hold-I will give this article a week before I pass/fail. Currently it needs work to meet the GA criteria, if the above concerns are addressed, I may pass/fail it.SRX--LatinoHeat 01:10, 1 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
You have not responded to the reference concerns.--SRX--LatinoHeat 13:49, 1 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Ok very well, Pass.--SRX--LatinoHeat 21:36, 1 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]