Talk:Terra Nova Adventure Park

Comments from Rosie on this proposal: Excellent job! Be sure to create lots of outgoing links to related parks, playgrounds and city pages, and incoming links from these pages to your page. Rosieredfield (talk) 23:58, 5 February 2017 (UTC)

Comments by Nivethana Krishnamurthy:

- The page could include a subsection under “introduction” for better organizational purposes. - The subsections “History”, “locations” and “design” are very informative and clear to understand. - Adding photographs and maps will enhance the illustration of the page. There are none provided so except the planning and design maps, which have captions and are cited. - Enough Incoming and outgoing links have not been created, which was also an initial suggestion given by Ruth and Rosie. The references are well created. - Over all, the page is very good with good detailing, written from a neutral perspective. Incorporating maps, photographs and other visual information is key for good illustration. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Vivijamal (talk • contribs) 22:17, 20 March 2017 (UTC)

Comments by Miranda

I found the organization of the wiki page difficult to follow. For example, at the very beginning, you mention Terra Nova and Hapa collective. As someone who does not know either of these, re-ordering some of your sections such as history or design to come first, or providing a bit more detail under your Terra Nova section, would make the page easier to understand. I am also interested in known where the money raised for the park came from. Was it by a private investor? A government initiative?I like how you suggest that the park is suitable for all ages. However I think the sentence, particularly the exclamation point makes the commentary seem a little biased. I also find the sub-header "Location" very wordy. I also find how you describe the location particularly confusing. Additionally, could you also explain why getting to the park is important? Could you also explain more about what LMN23 is as well as who is Lynne Werker? I find the paddock and homestead description under your "Current" section a bit repetitive. Also, perhaps you could create another sub-heading titled facilities and another one titled events to break down the "Current" section. Overall, I enjoyed learning about a new park I had not yet come across. Mirandamoshayxx (talk) 06:22, 21 March 2017 (UTC)

Comments by Jessie

The first thing I noticed is that there is no info box to this page. Moving the table of contents below the lead summary paragraph about Terra Nova Adventure Park would benefit the overall layout and appearance of this page. Using additional pictures of the amenities or services the park offers, or the various fauna and flora in the park or surrounding area would greatly add to the overall appearance of the page. Adding on to Nivethana’s comment, a picture of a map of the place would also really help out non-Vancouverites find the place easier. Adding on to Miranda’s comment, I think more description about Terra Nova is necessary. What does Terra Nova or Hapa collective mean? I think you’re using a bit too much terminology without explaining, making it hard to understand for laymen. The history part says that the “playground mirrors that of another city park” but doesn’t specify which. I think dividing up the “Current” section into specific subheadings would be good. Some suggestions would be a section about the wildlife and environment and its conditions, or a section specifically on the activities and events in the park and surrounding areas. Also linking the Wikipedia pages of Lulu Island and the Fraser River can be included in your location section. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jessiezhu98 (talk • contribs) 04:37, 22 March 2017 (UTC)

Comments by Sara

I think a map or picture in the introduction section would be very useful since it helps readers locate the exact location of the park

“This park is fun for individuals of all ages!” This statement is biased and should not be included according to Wikipedia’s rules.

“Built adjacent to the Fraser River and former farm fields[4], the location of the park plays a key role in promoting outdoor play and appreciation for nature.” Awkward sentence… if you start with a noun it sounds better.

“Read more about how the Terra Nova Play Experience integrates the park setting in the 'Design' section.” I think readers already know how find information on Wikipedia, so no need to instruct them in this way.

Also, I’m not sure if it is necessary to give the exact address. If you think giving an address will be useful for readers who may want to visit maybe creating a little information box in the top right corner can be a better way to provide this information. Also it is easier for people to see.

On history, also can mention who the park was funded by? Hngsm2 (talk) 06:40, 22 March 2017 (UTC)

Comments from Rosie

This page whetted my interest in the park, but didn't really satisfy it. The peer reviewers' comments are excellent, and you should try to implement as many of them as you can. A few specific points:

• The page must have a Lead section. The present first sentence can become the start of the Lead section, but you'll need to make several changes. Don't mention the Hapa Collective there, instead say what the playground is designed to accomplish. Cut or move the information about the budget, but do briefly describe the facilities. The Lead is the place to briefly summarize the other sections of the page.
• The page must have an Infobox. Put the address there.
• The page really needs a map showing the park's location.
• Can you find information about the history of the land before it's recent development?
• The planning drawings aren't nearly as useful as a diagram of the park's layout would be.
• Many references are used repeatedly. You can change the formatting so they're each only listed once in the reference list.
• Photos of the park would make the page much more attractive. Now that Spring has come you can probably get good ones of children playing.
• Don't gush! Exclamation marks are never appropriate in an encyclopedia article.

Rosieredfield (talk) 20:43, 24 March 2017 (UTC)

Comments from Ruth

• As Rosie said, don't forget to include a park info box. See Stanley_Park and other parks pages for examples.
• You need to link to more Wikipedia pages within your text including, but not limited to...
  • Lulu_Island
  • Fraser River
  • Vancouver
  • Canada Line (and some explanation of what the Canada line is needed, including a link to sky train)
  • Thompson Area

• Was there any criticism and/or opposition to the building of the park? Maybe around the high price tag?
• PHOTOS!! You need to go to the park to take photos.
• Are the pictures you uploaded copyright free? If not, you can't upload them to Wikipedia. — Preceding unsigned comment added by RuthVancouver (talk • contribs) 20:34, 26 March 2017 (UTC)