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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk · contribs) 16:47, 4 June 2012 (UTC)
I remember the episode, but I must say that I've not watched any Simpsons in a long time, nevermind this particular episode! Review to follow soon. J Milburn (talk) 16:47, 4 June 2012 (UTC)
- "who paid visit to a cemetery in Los Angeles to do research for several scenes at the beginning of the episode where the Simpsons visit a funeral salesman." Feels like a somehwhat useless factoid for the lead. It would be worth mentioning the director, however.
Agreed, fixed! Theleftorium (talk) 17:49, 4 June 2012 (UTC)
- "and in 2009 it was released on DVD." Presumably, with the rest of the series? Currently, it sounds like it was a DVD of just this episode
- ""Tennis the Menace" features guest appearances from Andre Agassi as himself, Pete Sampras as himself, and sisters Venus and Serena Williams as themselves." This is clunky
Better now? Theleftorium (talk) 17:49, 4 June 2012 (UTC)
- The animation style point seems important- it could perhaps be mentioned in the lead?
- "With a Nielsen rating of 8.2, the episode tied The X-Files for the 41st place in the ratings for the week of February 5–11, 2001." Do we know which episode of The X-Files?
Added the episode! Funnily enough, that episode is also listed at WP:GAN. Theleftorium (talk) 17:49, 4 June 2012 (UTC)
- The quote from Jason Bailey is very long. I'd recommend moving it to a blockquote, but perhaps try to cut it down a little?
I shortened it a bit. Theleftorium (talk) 17:49, 4 June 2012 (UTC)
- The formatting on the DVD commentary references isn't quite right- I'd recommend
- Maxtone-Graham, Ian (2009). The Simpsons – The Complete Twelfth Season DVD commentary for the episode "Tennis the Menace". 20th Century Fox. [note change in italics, the dash and the loss of "(DVD)". I appreciate the template may not support this- just do it manually?]
- Images/sources seem to check out (though I had to make some edits on Commons).
In all, very nice. I'll be happy to promote once the above issues have been dealt with. Note that I made a few edits. J Milburn (talk) 17:14, 4 June 2012 (UTC)
- As always I really appreciate your great copyedits! Thanks for the review! Theleftorium (talk) 17:49, 4 June 2012 (UTC)
- Much better- impressively quick replies! I'm happy to promote now. Great work, as usual. J Milburn (talk) 18:47, 4 June 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks! :D Theleftorium (talk) 19:15, 4 June 2012 (UTC)
- Much better- impressively quick replies! I'm happy to promote now. Great work, as usual. J Milburn (talk) 18:47, 4 June 2012 (UTC)