Talk:Swan Song (song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 10:17, 17 July 2021 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Coming tomorrow --K. Peake 10:17, 17 July 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Pipe Warner Bros to Warner Records in the infobox
• "for the 2019 film" → "for the soundtrack of 2019 film"
• "wrote the song with" → "co-wrote the song with"
• "also composed the films soundtrack" → "also composed the soundtrack"
• "the lead single from the film's soundtrack." → "the soundtrack's lead single."
• Shouldn't you write electropop track in the lead for consistency?
  • I don't think it's placement in the lead really matters. I put it there just so the paragraphs don't look too overflowed. LOVI33 04:30, 20 July 2021 (UTC)

• I was referring to the term "song" being used instead of "track", but they are interchangeable so this doesn't really matter. --K. Peake 07:13, 20 July 2021 (UTC)

• "praised "Swan Song" for" → "praised the song for"
• Mention the award after the above statement instead
• "and reached the top 100 of" → "and also reached the top 50 of" cutting down the countries listed to these ones since top 100 is too many
• "specifically with its" → "specifically with the"
• "and eventually Alita. Lipa transforms into Alita" → "and eventually Alita, before Lipa transforms into her"
• "complimented its sci-fi" → "complimented the video's sci-fi"
• "as well as a remixes" → "and a remixes"

 Done

Background and development

• "a new film, Alita: Battle Angel, that" → "the new film Alita: Battle Angel, which"
• Introduce Alita as being a character and pipe to Alita (Battle Angel Alita)
• "would be perfect for the film" → "would be a perfect fit for Alita: Battle Angel"
• "She was given" → "Lipa was given"
• "synopsis to begin. The singer later got to see the film just prior" → "synopsis to begin, while she later got to see it prior"
• "Lipa wrote the song with" → "Lipa wrote the song alongside"
• "She found it" → "The singer found it"

 Done

Music and lyrics

• "ACT UP and" → "ACT UP, and" on the audio sample text
• ""Swan Song" is" → "Musically, "Swan Song" is"
• Shouldn't you write that it is composed in the time signature of ⁴
  ₄ time?
• Pipe synths to Synthesizer
• Pipe strings to String instrument
• "as well as a mechanized," → "and a mechanized,"
• "while the song builds up to the" → "while the sections progress to the" to be less repetitive
• "Lipa's uses triumphant" → "Lipa uses triumphant"
• Pipe ranging to Vocal range
• "as well as how society always needs use their voices;" → "as well as how their voices always need to be used;"
• "the groups motto" → "the group's motto" plus merge this with the following sentence since they are too short to be separate
• "contradicts it's meaning." → "contradicts its meaning."

 Done

Release and promotion

• "would perform "Swan Song" for" → "would record "Swan Song" for" or something similar because otherwise it sounds like she performs it during the film
• "The same month, the movie's trailer was released which featured a" → "Also in December 2018, the film's trailer was released, featuring"
• "tv spot for the film." → "TV spot for Alita: Battle Angel."
• "as the film soundtrack's lead single," → "as the lead single from the film's soundtrack,"
• "On 28 January," → "On 28 January 2019,"
• "and inspires one" → "and inspire one"
• "The song was included as" → ""Swan Song" was included as" plus I don't think the comma is needed after release

 Done

Critical reception

• Retitle to Reception since you can merge with the one para commercial section below
• "For The New York Times, Jon Pareles compared" → "Writing for The New York Times, Jon Pareles compared"
• "as a "proper solo singles" instead" → "as a "proper" solo single instead"
• "he said it" → "he said the song"
• Uproxx should not be italicised
• "named it "powerful"," → "named "Swang Song" a "powerful","
• "easily be her next" → "easily be [Lipa's] next"
• "praised "creative and" → "praised the "creative and"
• "that "sparse where" → "that is "sparse where"

 Done

Commercial performance

• Make this the third para of the above section
• "a peak of 24." → "a peak of number 24."
• The charts after this are not in any numerical or geographical order; I would suggest doing the latter with European countries first, then American, then Oceanic
• "on the Bubbling Under Hot 100 Singles" →"on the Billboard Bubbling Under Hot 100 Singles" with the pipes
• "of 24 and 27." → "of numbers 24 and 27."
• Mention that the certification was for those units in Poland

 Done

Music video

• Img looks good!
• "the video as different to" → "the video as different from"
• Pipe CGI to Computer-generated imagery
• "people from the movie" → "people from Alita: Battle Angel"
• "The only time Lipa had" in what way? Please specify...
• "was a powerful story" → "is a powerful story"
• "her power. The director wanted to play with that notion" → "her power, a notion the director wanted to play with"
• Shouldn't the synopsis and blockbuster part be the last sentence of the first para instead?
• "and her crew rummages" → "and her crew rummaging"
• "mountains of trash looking" → "mountains of trash, looking" for the correct link
• "performs a martial arts" → "performs a martial arts inspired"
• "into the air posing in" → "into the air, posing in"
• "thought it is" → "thought it marked"
• "Nied called it" → "Nied called the music video"

 Done

Track listings

• Good

Credits and personnel

• Good

Charts

Weekly charts

• Why is the Czech Republic radio chart here when you already have the singles one?
  • Removed. LOVI33 04:50, 20 July 2021 (UTC)

Year-end charts

• Good

Certification

• Good

Release history

• Format → Format(s)
• Pipe Adult contemporary radio to Adult contemporary music

 Done

References

• Copyvio score looks great at 27.5%!!!
• Pipe The Singles Jukebox to Stylus Magazine on ref 13
• Pipe Universal Music to Universal Music Group on ref 16
• Remove the publisher from ref 17
• Cite Genius as publisher instead for ref 20
• Cite Popjustice as publisher instead for ref 21
• Cite Uproxx as publisher instead for refs 24 and 37
• Are you sure The Music Jukebox should be wikilinked twice on ref 29 when the two citations are next to each other?
• Pipe Warner Bros. Records to Warner Records on ref 56
• Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 72

 Done

External links

• Good

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 21:12, 18 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review Kyle Peake! I have addressed all your comments. Let me know if anything else needs to be done. LOVI33 04:56, 20 July 2021 (UTC)

• ✓ Pass now, decent response time! --K. Peake 07:13, 20 July 2021 (UTC)