Talk:Susan Mayer/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: I'm going to review this over the next day or two.Banana (talk) 06:13, 14 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

Personality and characteristics

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

The section Personality and characteristics is somewhat unclear in who is being quoted. The plot summary has some awkward writing. "She has a strong reliance on men, as evidenced when Edie deduces that Susan only spent forty-one days of her high school and college years single". "Zach's murder scheme backfires and he escapes, prompting Mike to confess to Susan that Zach is his biological son.""Susan attempts to console Edie's husband, Dave Williams (Neal McDonough), following Edie's accidental electrocution." (was this actually accidental?) None of these are serious problems. The last section has a link to a youtube video that should be removed

The picture should have captions that reference what is going on in the shot, rather than just who is in it.

I'm putting this on hold and will return to pass/fail. --Banana (talk) 06:48, 14 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The Personality and characteristics section has been rewritten. I eliminated exact quotes that were not necessary to the context and mentioned who had said the remaining quotes. The awkward sentences you pointed out have also been rewritten. The YouTube link was removed by another user. Also, I rewrote the caption based on WP:CAP and other good and featured articles on fictional characters. Akcvtt (talk) 23:06, 14 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good. Great article : ) --Banana (talk) 04:00, 19 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]