Talk:Super Bowl commercials/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 13:36, 21 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:36, 21 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

General comments

See MOS:'S.
Lead section looks good.
In #Benefits: "The popularity [...] have also" → "The popularity [...] has also"
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 14:56, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Is the usage of "US$" and "USD" necessary for this article? (found in #Cost)
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 14:56, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"In order to" → "To"
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 14:56, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

This should be changed for all uses to avoid wordy sentences.

Done JParksT2023 (talk) 14:44, 13 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"A number of" → "Several"
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 14:56, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

This should also be changed for all uses.

Done JParksT2023 (talk) 14:46, 13 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"all-time" → "all time" (change all uses)
- Done Fixed all except for the first reference, where the usage of the hyphen is appropriate since it is an adjective of the word "viewership" and comes before the word. JParksT2023 (talk) 14:56, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"ad equated" → "adequated"
- Done "ad equated" made sense in the context but was a little unclear, so I changed the phrasing to "The narration of the ad likened the emergence from the crisis to the second half of a football game[...]" (emphasis added) JParksT2023 (talk) 15:10, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
In #Local_advertising, try avoiding the repetitive "In [year], [event]".
- Done Removed three out of the six usages JParksT2023 (talk) 15:16, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
The phrase "only of the" doesn't sound right.
- Done Removed "of" JParksT2023 (talk) 15:34, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Remove the comma after "abortion or Christianity".
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 15:34, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Add a serial comma after "MoveOn.org".
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 15:34, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"sponsor the NFL" → "sponsor of the NFL"
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 15:34, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

References

adage.com → Ad Age
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 15:34, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Deadline → Deadline Hollywood
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 15:34, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Forbes.com → Forbes
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 15:34, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
NYTimes.com → The New York Times
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 15:34, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Time.com → Time
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 15:34, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
TV By The Numbers → TV by the Numbers
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 13:06, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Wall Street Journal → The Wall Street Journal
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 13:06, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Are publisher parameters needed if they are the same as the website?
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 15:02, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
The link to #22 might be dead (from Sports Business Journal).
- Done Found correct link JParksT2023 (talk) 13:35, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Citations #41 and #42 do not currently exist ("invoked but never defined").
- Done I just removed them, since I don't know what source was being used and there was already another source there. JParksT2023 (talk) 14:12, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Same issues for #49, #117, #196, #197, #198, #226, and #238.
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 14:12, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Citations #65, #73, #166, #208, #245, and #249 are missing their website parameters.
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 14:58, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
#128 is missing several parameters (date/author/access-date).
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 14:12, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
#153 has an error with its URL and citation.
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 15:04, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Properly cite #223 and #224.
- Did you mean #222 and #223? #224 looks fine.

I think you removed a reference; now the numbers don't match but yes, #222 and #223.

Done JParksT2023 (talk) 15:02, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

New York Post is not reliable per WP:NYPOST (remove it).
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 15:43, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Mark citations from Adweek / Advertising Age with "|url-access=subscription".
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 13:06, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Mark citations from Bloomberg with "|url-access=subscription".
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 13:06, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Mark citations from Chicago Tribune with "|url-access=limited".
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 13:06, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Mark citations from Financial Post with "|url-access=limited".
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 13:06, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Mark citations from Financial Times with "|url-access=subscription".
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Mark citations from Forbes with "|url-access=limited".
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 13:06, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Mark citations from Fortune with "|url-access=subscription".
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Mark citations from Los Angeles Times with "|url-access=limited".
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Mark citations from Rolling Stone with "|url-access=limited".
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Mark citations from San Francisco Chronicle with "|url-access=limited".
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Mark citations from Time with "|url-access=limited".
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Mark citations from The New York Times with "|url-access=limited".
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Mark citations from The Wall Street Journal with "|url-access=subscription".
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Mark citations from Vanity Fair with "|url-access=limited".
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Mark citations from Washington Post with "|url-access=limited".
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 13:25, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Don't use the "Archived [...] at the Wayback Machine" template.
- Where is this used?

Currently at #19, #21, #22, #108, #110, and #152.

Done JParksT2023 (talk) 14:55, 6 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Also replace the "(subscription required)" template for "|url-access=subscription".
- Where is this used?

Reference #155.

Done JParksT2023 (talk) 14:55, 6 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Mark citations from Sports Business Journal with "|url-access=registration".
- Done JParksT2023 (talk) 14:55, 6 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Archive references (might have to do it manually).

Progress

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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