Talk:Sunshine of Your Love/GA1

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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 19:53, 20 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Will take this one! FunkMonk (talk) 19:53, 20 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks FunkMonk. Why is Jimi Hendrix posthumous discography ignored?

Quick fixes! Well, personally I've never visited the Featured Lists page before, but I'll give it a look. FunkMonk (talk) 18:23, 21 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"or riff developed by Bruce" and "Brown had a difficult time writing lyrics", Dowed etc. Introduce all persons and their role at first mention in the article, not just the intro. The lead is just a summary of the article, the article itself should be able to stand alone.

OK, done. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:14, 21 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"gave the song their wholehearted approval" The song? Earlier you mention several demos of several songs.

Added "SOYL"; the ref specifically names it. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:14, 21 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"and harmonic motions like like A–C–G" One like too many? Also, same quote could have links to Led Zeppelin and Whole Lotta Love?

Fixed. I see another editor linked "WLL". I've been told quotes should not contain links. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:14, 21 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"Hendrix often performed faster instrumental versions of the song, which he often dedicated to Cream." One often too much maybe?

Fixed. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:14, 21 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'd expect the sample to include the main riff (most well known part of the song), but it cuts just after and before?

My setup doesn't allow me to play these. If it doesn't have the riff, then it shouldn't be here. —Ojorojo (talk) 18:14, 21 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I could maybe make a new version, can you give me some timing for what part you'd want to include? FunkMonk (talk) 18:24, 21 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I like the segment beginning at 2:02, you can hear the riff and the woman tone. However, some may want to hear vocals, so the very beginning may be a good choice. —Ojorojo (talk) 19:53, 21 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I've now added the first 20 seconds (with initial silence removed), for the sake of the ordinary reader, but we can also add the other part instead. FunkMonk (talk) 20:32, 21 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

That works for me. —Ojorojo (talk) 21:16, 21 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Alright then, I'll pass this, just remember to readd the sample, or it will probably get deleted... FunkMonk (talk) 21:20, 21 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]