Talk:Stuart Bingham/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Epicgenius (talk · contribs) 22:41, 31 October 2021 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Prose, POV, and coverage

• Bingham won the 1996 World Amateur Championship but enjoyed little sustained success in the early part of his professional career. - Out of interest, when did he start his amateur career?
  • Amateur just means not professional. So, he started when he first picked up a queue as a kid. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:17, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
• The oldest first-time world champion in snooker history, he joined Ken Doherty as the only players to have won world titles at both amateur and professional levels. - I would rephrase the second part of the sentence, particularly "as the only players". E.g. "he became only the second player, after Ken Doherty, to have won..."
  • Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:17, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
• He has scored eight career maximum breaks behind only Ronnie O'Sullivan (15), John Higgins (12), and Stephen Hendry (11). - What is he "behind only" in? I know he has more career maximum breaks than all except these three players, but the grammar is a bit strange.
  • Reworded Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:17, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
• In 1996, Bingham won both the English Amateur and the World Amateur Championships - This was his first year playing?
  • He played amateur stuff, but we rarely comment on this unless it's notable. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:17, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
• Bingham lost in the first round in four of the eight events in the 2008–09 season. - Four of the eight events of the season?
  • I think the grammar is already right. The events don't neccesarily make up the season (at least not in its entirety). Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:17, 31 October 2021 (UTC)

    @Lee Vilenski Yeah, I was just asking because you use "in" several times in a row. – Epicgenius (talk) 23:21, 31 October 2021 (UTC)

• and secure him a place in the 2012 Masters - I would remove "him" since it's clear what the subject is.
  • Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:17, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
• and led Stephen Maguire 7–5 but eventually lost 8–9 - Losing to Maguire or someone else?
  • Losing to Maguire. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:17, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
• to end it ranked world number six - I suggest something like "ending it with a world number six ranking", because "end" can be mistaken for a noun.
  • Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:17, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
• David Morris 6–1, O'Sullivan 6–4 - Should this be "and O'Sullivan"?
  • Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:17, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
• Bingham progressed through to - I'd remove this too.
  • Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:17, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
• He exited the Masters in the first round - I'd replace "He" with "Bingham" to vary the sentence structure a bit.
  • Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:17, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
• rules on betting on matches - "rules concerning betting"?
  • Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:17, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
• "Despite being Masters champion" - Not really a concern, just interesting how this turned out.
• accusing him of possible gamesmanship - Accusing Selby?
  • Yeah, added his name.Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:17, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
• O'Sullivan (15), Higgins and Hendry (both 11) - This doesn't quite match with the lead, where it's mentioned Higgins has 12.
  • Oh, yeah, he made one quite recently. Added Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:17, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
• Personal life - not important but is nothing known about his childhood?
  • There's probably some family stuff out there. I can probably take a look around after the GAN is finished. I doubt it's super important. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:19, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
• born in January 2017, - Since you used a semicolon after "2011", you should use it here too.
  • Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:19, 31 October 2021 (UTC)

References

• I spot checked some refs. They seem to support the claims, so these are all good.
• Number 10 is a dead link. If it's permanent I would remove it, but if not it should be archived.
  • Removed Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:22, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
• Number 11 ("BBC SPORT - WORLD CHAMPS 2002 - Doherty edges through") should be in title case, not all-caps
  • Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:22, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
• Number 114 (to bgsnooker.com) seems to have "bgsnooker.com" as a publisher rather than in the website parameter.
  • Fixed Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:22, 31 October 2021 (UTC)

Images and copyright

• Images are all appropriately licensed
• Copyright check came up clean
• Stuart Bingham at the 2013 German Masters. - Per WP:CAPFRAG this shouldn't have a period.

General comments

@Lee Vilenski: Great work. I'm going to put this on hold but the issues are all fairly minor. Epicgenius (talk) 23:06, 31 October 2021 (UTC)

• • Hi epicgenius - I have replied and fixed all of the above. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 23:22, 31 October 2021 (UTC)

No reference for the statement that Stuart supports West Ham. I can't find anywhere he has stated this.