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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:19, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
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- Could link Universal Music New Zealand.
- "featuring backing vocals from four other musicians" you already said this.
Done Removed the unnecessary repetition. --LivelyRatification (talk) 07:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- "and "Solar Power", the" link.
- Lead should probably cover how well it did and how critics received it.
Not done Added information on critical reception to lede, but not really sure what to add re: the song's performance. Chart-wise, there wasn't anything that remarkable aside from "it charted", except for maybe its no 22 placement in NZ. --LivelyRatification (talk) 07:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- "second single[2] from" odd place for a ref.
Done Moved [2] ref to end of sentence. --LivelyRatification (talk) 07:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- " D major" link.
- "beats per minute" link.
- Rolling Stone doesn't need to be piped.
- "previous single, "Solar Power".[4] Also" overlinked now.
Done Removed link to Solar Power. --LivelyRatification (talk) 07:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- "Thumbs" and Clairo's" overlinked.
Done Removed link to Clairo. --LivelyRatification (talk) 07:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- "drew comparison by ... who noted the difference" this feels like it's saying sort of the same thing.
Done Changed to read ""Stoned at the Nail Salon" drew comparison by critics to Lorde's (pictured) earlier work." --LivelyRatification (talk) 07:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- "of The Guardian wrote" overlinked.
- "for The Telegraph, Neil" The Daily Telegraph?
- "on the Billboard Hot" overlinked.
- "appeared at #85" avoid using hash for number.
- "Shaffer of Rolling Stone, "sings " overlinked.
- "guitar".[36] Billboard writer" overlinked.
- Ref 38 has a spaced hyphen, should be en-dash.
That's all I have for now. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 10:43, 4 September 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: Sorry for not getting to this until now, for some reason this wasn't on my watchlist and I missed it. Anyway, I've made most of the changes here, just have some quibbles about one of them. --LivelyRatification (talk) 07:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)