Talk:Stjepan Vukčić Kosača/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 20:30, 19 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

In the infobox, use "plainlist" instead of <br>.
herzog should be capitalized.
"reconciliation achieved" → "reconciliation was achieved"
Add a hyphen between "present day".
"he will rise to become" - you mean "he rose", right?
"like non other Bosnian nobleman of his time did" - see WP:NEUTRAL
"these circumstance" - singular or plural?
Avoid using words like "just", "yet", and "like".
"two crucial Bosnian nobleman" → "two crucial Bosnian noblemen"
"achieve a peace" → "achieve peace"
"undertking" - typo?
Avoid starting sentences with "but" and "and".
"minfd too" - typo?
Be consistent with knyaz, Knyaz, and Knyaz.
"he invited Ottomans" → "he invited the Ottomans"
#Citizenship_of_Dubrovnik is unsourced.
"29 June" → "29 June"
Remove the comma after "the two men".
Add a comma after Duke Sladoje Semković.
"the Venetians ." → "the Venetians."
Remove the comma after "King Thomas took back Srebrenica".
"300 ducats was" → "300 ducats were"
"iobliged" - typo?
Remove all line-breaks created using <br>.
"de nova dignitate cherzech acquisita" - explain what that means.
"Tvrtko in" → "Tvrtko in"
Be consistent with herceg, Herceg, and Herceg.
"Just before death" → "Before the death"
"After this he completely withdraw to his fortress in Novi." - reword
"of Kosača family" → "of the Kosača family"
"but Skanderbeg failed to carry out his promises" - source?
"most Bosnian nobleman" → "most Bosnian noblemen"
"a move which proved to be" → "a move that proved to be"
"traditionally, most Bosnians' attitudes, and Stjepan Vukčić was no exception" - reword
Be consistent with the use and absence of serial commas.

Overall, this article needs a large copyedit. Try paraphrasing quotes and removing the article's informal tone. Failing for now, but feel free to renominate when my comments above have been addressed and a copy-edit has been requested and completed. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:32, 21 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]